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Encasing Her
She can sense the coolness of
The grass through her shirt,
While orange swirls of light
Float before her eyes.
The sounds of the gentle water
Do nothing to stop the internal whispers
From encasing her in doubt.
Doubt in herself,
In her writing.
The confidence she has
Melts away like a fog
In the morning light.
She quietly asks,
"Why do I do this?"
"Why do I kick at shadows?"
"Why do I overthink?"
She opens her eyes
And stares at the burning
Piece of paper,
Her latest unworthy creation,
All the while thinking
That this needs to end.
This needs to end.
The grass through her shirt,
While orange swirls of light
Float before her eyes.
The sounds of the gentle water
Do nothing to stop the internal whispers
From encasing her in doubt.
Doubt in herself,
In her writing.
The confidence she has
Melts away like a fog
In the morning light.
She quietly asks,
"Why do I do this?"
"Why do I kick at shadows?"
"Why do I overthink?"
She opens her eyes
And stares at the burning
Piece of paper,
Her latest unworthy creation,
All the while thinking
That this needs to end.
This needs to end.
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Re. Encasing Her
22nd Jun 2018 1:37am
Re. Encasing Her
22nd Jun 2018 10:13am
I relate to this so much, I often feel this way about writing. Thank you for sharing it.
~anonshadow
~anonshadow
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Re. Encasing Her
22nd Jun 2018 12:44pm
Re. Encasing Her
Anonymous
22nd Jun 2018 12:57pm
Aahh well done
In this write I envisioned those same flames vanquishing ur doubts....
Keep scraping that pen girl
I love this
:)
In this write I envisioned those same flames vanquishing ur doubts....
Keep scraping that pen girl
I love this
:)
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24th Jun 2018 2:29am
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Re. Encasing Her
23rd Jun 2018 8:27pm
Your opening lines create a perfect mental image, which is truly engaging. This has a subtle intimacy that requires talent. Enjoy your writes Charlie.
Daniel
Daniel
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Re: Re. Encasing Her
24th Jun 2018 2:29am
Re. Encasing Her
Anonymous
25th Jun 2018 1:58am
how many times has the paper laid dormient because what was in my soul could not relate with what was in my mind. horrible feeling of emptiness that brings you close to saying why am i doing this? the answer i get is, because you need to. loved it. well done. J
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Re. Encasing Her
6th Jul 2018 3:48am
beautiful descriptions, really fascinating and original scribe - the emotions were well felt by the reader :-))))))
Excellent ink :-))))))
Excellent ink :-))))))
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Re. Encasing Her
7th Jul 2018 00:46am
"The sounds of the gentle water
Does nothing to stop the internal whispers
From encasing her in doubt."
splendid...I am not sure that we over think...perhaps the flame burns hotter creating more light and more words...we are meant to flower into the abstract...writing is a direct pathway...I enjoyed your flow and transition from subjective to objective and back in this introspection
bravo
Jeff
Does nothing to stop the internal whispers
From encasing her in doubt."
splendid...I am not sure that we over think...perhaps the flame burns hotter creating more light and more words...we are meant to flower into the abstract...writing is a direct pathway...I enjoyed your flow and transition from subjective to objective and back in this introspection
bravo
Jeff
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Re. Encasing Her
9th Jul 2018 5:06am
dearest Charlotte may your pen never be still
you are a very gifted poetess..
my spirits once upon a time caused self doubt
now they are actually helpful when it comes to writing
wanting their own voices to be heard..
either way please keep writing
you have natural ability..
love Crimsin
you are a very gifted poetess..
my spirits once upon a time caused self doubt
now they are actually helpful when it comes to writing
wanting their own voices to be heard..
either way please keep writing
you have natural ability..
love Crimsin
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Re. Encasing Her
9th Jul 2018 5:12am
beautiful Charlotte you are a deep soul
that's why you kick at shadows
you are a seer and see what others don't..
this is a really wonderful write..
my heart really felt this..
love Raven
that's why you kick at shadows
you are a seer and see what others don't..
this is a really wonderful write..
my heart really felt this..
love Raven
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Re. Encasing Her
4th Aug 2018 11:48pm
everyone feels that their writing is shit the important thing is to keep going...people will relate to you and that is a good thing
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Re. Encasing Her
31st Aug 2018 8:32pm
Anxiety, depression and self-doubt are terrible things to suffer.
And we all suffer alone!
And we all suffer alone!
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