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Somewhere in Time
There was to be nothing
which would exhume ghosts
from entombed memories
No visible letters or gifts
So, I returned everything
to their respective boxes
as if saving them
would keep me closer
to your smudged fingerprint
Maybe decades down the road
they'll open naturally
crack the spine of their prison
roll out like insulation
over the dry solitudes
Or, maybe they'll forget
decompose unnaturally
laced with an arsenic of grief
Maybe they'll be discovered
by a young married couple
who closed on the house
after probate
Or a teenage daughter
rebelling against relocation
while still believing in dreams
finding the sealed boxes waiting
in the corner of dusty artifacts
overlooked, or purposely left
by a bequeathed
Maybe she'll be silently stunned
like I was at 16, unwrapping
by the small attic window
a stack of WWII correspondence
tied with a red silk ribbon --
Real Love letters that began
"My Dearest Darling...",
just as ours had -
maybe she'll believe
just as I did
That surely, surely
this is a Love that survived
Somewhere in Time
~
Author's note: an older piece written a few months back. Keeping everything together.
which would exhume ghosts
from entombed memories
No visible letters or gifts
So, I returned everything
to their respective boxes
as if saving them
would keep me closer
to your smudged fingerprint
Maybe decades down the road
they'll open naturally
crack the spine of their prison
roll out like insulation
over the dry solitudes
Or, maybe they'll forget
decompose unnaturally
laced with an arsenic of grief
Maybe they'll be discovered
by a young married couple
who closed on the house
after probate
Or a teenage daughter
rebelling against relocation
while still believing in dreams
finding the sealed boxes waiting
in the corner of dusty artifacts
overlooked, or purposely left
by a bequeathed
Maybe she'll be silently stunned
like I was at 16, unwrapping
by the small attic window
a stack of WWII correspondence
tied with a red silk ribbon --
Real Love letters that began
"My Dearest Darling...",
just as ours had -
maybe she'll believe
just as I did
That surely, surely
this is a Love that survived
Somewhere in Time
~
Author's note: an older piece written a few months back. Keeping everything together.
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Re. Somewhere in Time
Anonymous
17th Feb 2017 7:17pm
So very beautiful, lovely Ahavati.
Words which made the depths of my heart ache.
"Real Love letters that began
"My Dearest Darling...",
just as ours had -
maybe she'll believe
just as I did
That surely, surely
this is a Love that survived
Somewhere in Time "
~
Hold close, embracing deeply in the heart.
Words which made the depths of my heart ache.
"Real Love letters that began
"My Dearest Darling...",
just as ours had -
maybe she'll believe
just as I did
That surely, surely
this is a Love that survived
Somewhere in Time "
~
Hold close, embracing deeply in the heart.
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Re. Somewhere in Time
17th Feb 2017 7:19pm
What a beautiful bittersweet legacy of mystery and hope to leave behind. There's a breathtaking romance to finding in a shadowy cobwebbed corner a box of love letters. Beautiful :)
Willow
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17th Feb 2017 7:25pm
Re. Somewhere in Time
17th Feb 2017 8:12pm
Re. Somewhere in Time
Anonymous
17th Feb 2017 8:31pm
"Maybe decades down the road
they'll open naturally
crack the spine of their prison
roll out like insulation
over the dry solitudes"
I felt like discoveries were being unearthed in an episode of This Old House. Beautiful.
they'll open naturally
crack the spine of their prison
roll out like insulation
over the dry solitudes"
I felt like discoveries were being unearthed in an episode of This Old House. Beautiful.
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Re. Somewhere in Time
17th Feb 2017 9:25pm
THIS is excellent writing, so very indepth and slanted toward untold secrets about the bundle of letters. My, my, I wasn't quite ready for the unique masterpiece coming from your most talented pen . . . er . . . keyboard. I have gone through it three times. As I have already said this is a masterpiece poem of the understated. Congratulation!
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Re. Somewhere in Time
found an old letter once,
in the back of a drawer.
hadn't thought of her for years, not since well before
I was married.
which just goes to show how often you
change your socks, said my wife
as she closed the drawer...
in the back of a drawer.
hadn't thought of her for years, not since well before
I was married.
which just goes to show how often you
change your socks, said my wife
as she closed the drawer...
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Re. Somewhere in Time
18th Feb 2017 2:06am
A terrific piece Ahavati....Many of us put those gifts away not wanting to remember...
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Re. Somewhere in Time
18th Feb 2017 2:34am
"Unnaturally laced with the arsenic of grief"
That is very powerful. Excellent translation of the hard to express.
That is very powerful. Excellent translation of the hard to express.
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Re. Somewhere in Time
18th Feb 2017 3:15am
A beautiful write that could be the part of a story:) Ahavati. You are so talented.
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Re. Somewhere in Time
18th Feb 2017 6:48am
Very touching ink Ahavati, with phantom fingers that reach into corners of the heart. My favorite bit is the dry solitudes.
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Re. Somewhere in Time
18th Feb 2017 11:42am
Re. Somewhere in Time
18th Feb 2017 5:55pm
such a beautiful thought with subtle beauty expressed my sister - the best of a love boxed - a moment held that lasts as inspiration for love for others forever and for one's self
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Re. Somewhere in Time
Sage one this is an awe inspiring e
write of such poignant beauty the magnitude I cannot describe..
love Brenda
write of such poignant beauty the magnitude I cannot describe..
love Brenda
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Re. Somewhere in Time
19th Feb 2017 3:05pm
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Re. Somewhere in Time
Anonymous
- Edited 20th Feb 2017 4:28am
20th Feb 2017 4:27am
Wow Ahavti.......this absolutely tugged at my heart and soul.....glad you brought this one back.....luv it.......maybe luv doesn't always die with sad memories.....it touches those who read it......thought provoking ink.......enjoyed.....purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re. Somewhere in Time
the survival the emphasis on love..you say in such flow that it touches all time and hearts that hope ...n give more invaluable dimensions to believe. somewhere in time..the title says on the timeless love u needed to deliver, dearest Ahavati.
Loved this speaking touching piece, esp. the verses,
"they'll open naturally
crack the spine of their prison
roll out like insulation
over the dry solitudes
Or, maybe they'll forget
decompose unnaturally
laced with an arsenic of grief"
nothing constructive from an again new-dup entrant i feel after long dormant me:) shine on more xx. Tq
Loved this speaking touching piece, esp. the verses,
"they'll open naturally
crack the spine of their prison
roll out like insulation
over the dry solitudes
Or, maybe they'll forget
decompose unnaturally
laced with an arsenic of grief"
nothing constructive from an again new-dup entrant i feel after long dormant me:) shine on more xx. Tq
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Re. Somewhere in Time
21st Feb 2017 6:42pm
Wow! Stunning. I could only hope to some day come close to your poetic talent. Every line so smooth like velvet. Reading this was so satisfying like a gourmet meal that pleases every part of the pallet. Thank you for sharing this beauty.
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Re. Somewhere in Time
22nd Feb 2017 4:39pm
stark. you can box up letters, mementos, whatever,
but the spirit of them won't stay there;
like a body in a coffin, I guess.
you're right, there must be a place...
but the spirit of them won't stay there;
like a body in a coffin, I guess.
you're right, there must be a place...
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Re. Somewhere in Time
25th Feb 2017 3:53pm
Great detailed description. The emotion, hope, longing, and loss were easily felt. A twist on the old message in a bottle.
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Re. Somewhere in Time
26th Feb 2017 12:13pm
It's been too long since I've read you, and just as long since I've been meaning to get here. Always such a pleasure to read.
Beautifully written and expressed, it brings to mind those old black and white romantic war movies I watched when younger. It also brings to mind the black and white pictures with a splash of colour, I think the red ribbon brought that image to my mind.
Wonderful piece. :) x
Beautifully written and expressed, it brings to mind those old black and white romantic war movies I watched when younger. It also brings to mind the black and white pictures with a splash of colour, I think the red ribbon brought that image to my mind.
Wonderful piece. :) x
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27th Feb 2017 1:45am
Re. Somewhere in Time
5th Mar 2017 5:29am
"just as ours had -
maybe she'll believe
just as I did
That surely, surely
this is a Love that survived
Somewhere in Time
~ "
how crucial those stanzas Ahavati
inspiration by default..
yet inspiration nonetheless..
wherever you find it I say..
maybe she'll believe
just as I did
That surely, surely
this is a Love that survived
Somewhere in Time
~ "
how crucial those stanzas Ahavati
inspiration by default..
yet inspiration nonetheless..
wherever you find it I say..
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Re. Somewhere in Time
5th Mar 2017 11:47pm
Love how this poem joins a narrative across the changing of time, culture and attitudes.
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Re. Somewhere in Time
6th Mar 2017 11:24pm
...while still believing in dreams...
Maybe she'll be silently stunned
like I was at 16, unwrapping
by the small attic window
a stack of WWII correspondence
tied with a red silk ribbon --
What a vivid picture I have. Thank you for that. Absolutely beautiful and wholehearted. I will read more and be inspired.
Maybe she'll be silently stunned
like I was at 16, unwrapping
by the small attic window
a stack of WWII correspondence
tied with a red silk ribbon --
What a vivid picture I have. Thank you for that. Absolutely beautiful and wholehearted. I will read more and be inspired.
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Re. Somewhere in Time
11th Mar 2017 10:46am
I've often marveled at those writers whom
have chosen to compose their thoughts in such detail that one feels they actually See
the ink acting out in live action... it's just so awesome, how you pen!!!
have chosen to compose their thoughts in such detail that one feels they actually See
the ink acting out in live action... it's just so awesome, how you pen!!!
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Re. Somewhere in Time
You continue to inspire me Ahavati. There is magic in your written word. This lovely, sentimental piece strikes a cord in all of us. Thank you.
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