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~cruel lust~
swallowing razors
is admitting I love you
well who you are anyway
dark brown eyes
that pin me to the wall
forceful is your will
you make me crumble and shake
each time I approach you on trembling legs
then run as fast I can
touching you is to burn
sometimes I say to hell with it
burn me down fucker
usually when I've had some amber courage
loosing my tongue and inhibitions
I've flirted with the devil himself with you
you touch something in me
not moved by anyone else
broke through my barriers
with cyanide smiles
and arsenic poetry
then just when I think I know you
you come on gentle
making me fall in on myself and weep
for the beauty of you
Published 21st Jul 2016
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Anonymous
21st Jul 2016 4:56am
Precious Crim......wonderful wonderful wonderful!!! Brilliant lines thru out this piece.......you've sunk my heart with this one.....enjoyed totally......RL add on for me......purple luv & hugs xo :)
21st Jul 2016 5:09am
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21st Jul 2016 5:16am
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21st Jul 2016 10:42am
21st Jul 2016 7:56am
That sadistic passion
where the intense beauty is.
I know that particular bedroom, Crim...
where the intense beauty is.
I know that particular bedroom, Crim...
21st Jul 2016 10:43am
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21st Jul 2016 10:44am
21st Jul 2016 8:26am
We all like a bit of poison; lucky we are are, if like you, we can find our particular one...
21st Jul 2016 10:45am
21st Jul 2016 8:56am
21st Jul 2016 10:45am
21st Jul 2016 12:04pm
"Breaking on through to the other side " comes to mind ....
It always amazes me when you go gentle into the love space . You're kinda like me in your approach mostly. Savage truths. But then sometimes it all falls away with grace.
Really love this one
Xo
It always amazes me when you go gentle into the love space . You're kinda like me in your approach mostly. Savage truths. But then sometimes it all falls away with grace.
Really love this one
Xo
21st Jul 2016 12:09pm
thank you dearest Poet your comment made my morning :)
love Jim Morrison by the way and the Doors guess they are opening with us yes?
love Brenda
love Jim Morrison by the way and the Doors guess they are opening with us yes?
love Brenda
21st Jul 2016 12:15pm
Yes, Jim Morrison had a profound influence on me
Poet extrodinaire
Glad I started your day right luv
xo
Poet extrodinaire
Glad I started your day right luv
xo
21st Jul 2016 2:02pm
One, if not the, absolute best poem I have read that you have written!
21st Jul 2016 7:07pm
aw thank you graciously Jerry so moved and honored by your comment..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Anonymous
21st Jul 2016 3:11pm
I'd say there is more than lust here..when all the signals are there, there's got to be more (deeper).
Primitive and raw; but then I wouldn't expect less from you Brenda.
Primitive and raw; but then I wouldn't expect less from you Brenda.
21st Jul 2016 7:08pm
you're right of lovely Rina I appreciate who they are and I guess that is more than lust thank you..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Anonymous
21st Jul 2016 3:55pm
Such an intensely passionate piece!
I adore the depth of emotion.
Brilliant ink ❤️
I adore the depth of emotion.
Brilliant ink ❤️
21st Jul 2016 7:09pm
21st Jul 2016 5:45pm
Even the most dangerous men (and women) can be hard to resist. I love my Belladonna beneath the deadly nightshade, a potentially fatal muse.
"touching you is to burn
sometimes I say to hell with it
burn me down fucker"
Excellent work Crim. I just hope the burning goes both ways....
"touching you is to burn
sometimes I say to hell with it
burn me down fucker"
Excellent work Crim. I just hope the burning goes both ways....
21st Jul 2016 7:11pm
I love that Sir Crow Belladonna beneath nightshade so poetically perfect.. sigh it is one sided that's why it is indeed a cruel lust.. thank you my dear friend..
love Crim
love Crim
21st Jul 2016 6:10pm
The vulnerable side is always the most beautiful
on others as well as ourselves. It disintegrates
defenses conscripted by fear and allows the heart
to trust what the mind doubts.
Beautiful write, Crim.
on others as well as ourselves. It disintegrates
defenses conscripted by fear and allows the heart
to trust what the mind doubts.
Beautiful write, Crim.
21st Jul 2016 7:12pm
21st Jul 2016 6:16pm
What a perfect title for this piece! Lust can be so cruel because it's so damn hard to remove once other emotions are captured in it's webbing. I love the way this was created, Crim. xo
21st Jul 2016 7:13pm
thank you beautiful Rain for showing me love and understanding on this write..
love Brenda
love Brenda
21st Jul 2016 8:01pm
21st Jul 2016 8:15pm
21st Jul 2016 11:26pm
And it burns deeply, uncontrollably doesn't it?
yes it does, no words my ladyloves
..no words
-Howlings
yes it does, no words my ladyloves
..no words
-Howlings
24th Jul 2016 9:47pm
22nd Jul 2016 2:19am
masterful poem of desire and what it can do - you are so good at this, in my view the best erotic poems in DU :-)
"you da man"
"you da man"
24th Jul 2016 9:48pm
22nd Jul 2016 3:06am
We are all guilty of something. Better to be guilty of love than a serious crime.<3
24th Jul 2016 9:48pm
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24th Jul 2016 9:49pm
23rd Jul 2016 1:43am
Oh how I have missed you crim. Quite sadistic indeed. I have to play catch up on your works. Hugs to you
24th Jul 2016 9:57pm
23rd Jul 2016 3:55pm
love the beautiful way you write unblemished and undiluted by perceptions and outside thoughts, imo one of your best, reading "you is to burn" , nice Crim...
24th Jul 2016 9:58pm
ugh tiny gods, beautiful one
that last stanza practically tore out my heart
& beat me bloody with it...
.... i love everything you write,
but when your fragility shines through
it really is something to behold
xoxox
that last stanza practically tore out my heart
& beat me bloody with it...
.... i love everything you write,
but when your fragility shines through
it really is something to behold
xoxox
27th Jul 2016 00:47am
thank you beautiful Katja you made my day with your comment and add..
love Brenda
love Brenda
7th Aug 2016 7:24pm
8th Aug 2016 2:46am
15th Aug 2017 1:12am
Brenda, that last stanza...
Are you kidding me!?
Omg this is stunning.
The whole thing is just beautiful.
Are you kidding me!?
Omg this is stunning.
The whole thing is just beautiful.
15th Aug 2017 3:17am
thank you for finding this one for me dearest Droopy & showing it love this write is special to me.. love Brenda
