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I'm Fucking Depressed (Less Abrasive Title forthcoming)
Drip, drip, drip
Fall the tears from my eyes
Counting down the ways
I wish I could die
Every brave face
Is just another lie
I'll go to class tomorrow
With this pain disguised
Hidden from my friends
All the girls and guys
I can't break down for them
But they keep me alive
Wishing on a stranger
To lend me their arms
So I could fall apart
Would that do them harm?
The anguish congealed
Making a lump in my throat
Screaming for love
Hoping no one knows
Another night
And then the day
First the bend
Then the break
Family film
The pain is opaque
On an on it goes
I'm so fucking drained
Fall the tears from my eyes
Counting down the ways
I wish I could die
Every brave face
Is just another lie
I'll go to class tomorrow
With this pain disguised
Hidden from my friends
All the girls and guys
I can't break down for them
But they keep me alive
Wishing on a stranger
To lend me their arms
So I could fall apart
Would that do them harm?
The anguish congealed
Making a lump in my throat
Screaming for love
Hoping no one knows
Another night
And then the day
First the bend
Then the break
Family film
The pain is opaque
On an on it goes
I'm so fucking drained
Published 26th Jan 2016
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26th Jan 2016 1:07pm
Very powerful write Amiablere, potent and expressive...real raw emotion, there's a lot that can be said for being able to deliver a poem like
I knew this pain all too well in school. And honestly man, it gets better trust me.
"Hidden from all my friends
All the girls and guys
I can't break down for them
But they keep me alive"
That stanza nailed it dead on. Thank you for writing such a powerful poem about such a difficult topic.
P.S. I don't think you should change the title, it captures what you're talking about and feeling, to me that's what a title is supposed to do. Just my opinion though
I knew this pain all too well in school. And honestly man, it gets better trust me.
"Hidden from all my friends
All the girls and guys
I can't break down for them
But they keep me alive"
That stanza nailed it dead on. Thank you for writing such a powerful poem about such a difficult topic.
P.S. I don't think you should change the title, it captures what you're talking about and feeling, to me that's what a title is supposed to do. Just my opinion though
26th Jan 2016 11:34pm
Hey man,
I very much appreciate the kind words and praise. As I said, I think the compassionate social element is a big part of the therapy, and I thank you.
Maybe I won't change the title after all. It's kind of growing on me.
Cheers!
I very much appreciate the kind words and praise. As I said, I think the compassionate social element is a big part of the therapy, and I thank you.
Maybe I won't change the title after all. It's kind of growing on me.
Cheers!
26th Jan 2016 8:45pm
I like the title too, exactly as it is!
This is a powerful write. You have really nailed those feelings....if this is you right now, I hope you find someone to talk to. It is difficult, but it helps. Been there.
Welcome to DU.
This is a powerful write. You have really nailed those feelings....if this is you right now, I hope you find someone to talk to. It is difficult, but it helps. Been there.
Welcome to DU.
Thank you for your praise, and also your compassion. I find that our art is intimately connected with our human experience, as is compassion. If you've read my other work, you know how I appreciate connections, so it's comforting to see that through art, you're showing kindness, and I very much appreciate it.
28th Jan 2016 2:19pm
I can feel the pain. Good write, sucks that we have to endure torture to be so inspired. Keep it up! And keep your head up!
28th Jan 2016 11:43pm
Thanks Midnite!
It's always good to hear that my writing is appreciated, but a lot of people don't explicitly mention what a shame it is that suffering has to produce it; they also don't offer encouragement beyond that (like "Keep your head up.") You've done both here, and it means a lot to me. Thanks for reading!
It's always good to hear that my writing is appreciated, but a lot of people don't explicitly mention what a shame it is that suffering has to produce it; they also don't offer encouragement beyond that (like "Keep your head up.") You've done both here, and it means a lot to me. Thanks for reading!
