Bruised

This was more like a deep incision
as opposed to a bruise! wow, very strong, seeping emotions... Vivid n darkly laced imagery added to the punch of this spill.

Deep incision? I'll take that Poe! :) Thank for lending me your eyes for a second!
Ink love~

Great images come from this kick ass piece Rain... Enjoyed very much ")
Zazzles xoxox

Thanks luv for passing through showing love, and thanks again for 'spell checking me'. What would I do without my DU red pen inspectors?! ;)
Pen love~

Miss Rain, Miss Rain. . .Always...a l w a y s...content to read your work; this was *stunning*, *beautiful*, *sensual*. . .and I'm to assume that this is what love is when [you are] making it. . .Again, your words leave me breathless as if I'm right there in your poetry. . .~xo, Devlin.

Hey there sexy Dev! :) Assume away luv! This ink has so many faces that even a detached interpretation would be pretty accurate. Appreciate the kind words and poetic love sent my way! Thank you!

Intense, sinister. The ending feels like a dark whisper. A great commentary or cautionary tale. Very much enjoyed.

Awesome comment Indie! Love your take on it! A pleasure to see you at my front door. Thanks a bunch!

Yessss maaaammm!!!
My big sister, You really put your pen to this. Whheeewwww, "behind Pandoras cadence" .. Apricot scarves.. ( my gosh yes )
" pressure built like semen strained veins"
You BETTER write that goodness to my soul Rain😘 Gosh I love you , your work, your spirit ..
Please keep them coming beautiful

...laughed, blushed, and still wearing a smile because of your wonderful response. :)  
You just light up my page everytime you stop by Viv. I love your radiance and love you too! Thank you sweetie!  
#TightHugSent.com

Lady Rain.....this truly moved me......I felt as if I was in some of your lines.......I'm speechless as I think about your words......you're such an outstanding writer.....enjoy you very much.....purple luv and hugs xo :)

I can believe that PPrincess. I actually see you in a few of these lines too! (insider) xoxo
Thank you for the lyrical appreciation hun! Touched by your words.... #Cyberhug

"love became a blemished haze    
when thirst sent vapors of defeat,  
misplaced opportunities to quiet the noise  
from past plights the both of them faced,  
plights that left them....  
Bruised"
Now that is a perfect ending to such a captivating poem. Wow!! Im at a loss for words, this tale is charismatic in the way it portrays a woman lost in the charm of a man beyond realms she couldn't even begin to comprehend.
Now it makes sense (wink)...
Lovely piece Rain.

You're the charmer, Dala! xo  I love the way you inhale my words and exhale them with a poetic sigh. So humbled by your wonderful comment. Thank you!  
btw.... don't try to connect the dots, this complicated maze ain't whatcha think! (wink) :)

Such vivid imagery of obsession and addiction to a lover who manipulates her, even perhaps brainwashes her until she gives up and gives in. A long battle that leaves them both beaten on the inside... Very painful!
JJ

hmmm.... that's a heavy interpretation JJ. If that's what you get out of it, then roll with it babe. :)  
Thanks for feeling the bruised ink! Pen love~

Funny how a change in mood can alter ones perception of the same words. After reading your comment and taking a nap, I read it over again and now I see it as a erotic piece of bondage. When I first read it I was thinking he was raping her, tied to the bed posts, blind folded with a noose around her neck and beaten up. I must have eaten something bad for lunch...lol
jj

Oh Rain,
Soft sensual and subtle entrapment like having one's bollock caught in a velvet noose. :-)

Fascinating write. Loved it baby.

^^^^Love it! That statement rocked, funnyman! Thanks honey, appreciate ya! :)

I take this as a look at a manipulative, destructive man.  He turns out to be vulnerable himself and sustains his own bruises, richly merited.  This lends itself to multiple interpretations and no easy answers.  Fine work Rain!  

"This lends itself to multiple interpretations and no easy answers" <-- ...exactly! That's kinda' where I was trying to go, just don't think I got there smoothly. lol... Love your comment Crow! Thanks hun...

full of lines to contemplate, complicated thing emotions are, sometimes inexplicable(some more so than others), love is pain as the saying goes, thoroughly enjoyed goddess, i love to get lost in your lines...

....not sure love is pain, but loving someone that's not the right someone, can be painful tho, in my humble opinion. :) Thank you for the refreshing perspective, Dean! I love when you get lost in my lines....

"disappointment and mournful sorrow..." <--- the fights, the battles, the wars that leaves us 'bruised', usually are very disappointing, but bruises fade away, as if they've never touched your skin. :)  Thank you Lady T for the inspiration! #Hug

Just love your pieces Rain ... an exquisite ink ! ox

...and I just love you for loving my ink Je! :) You're an exquisite woman, with great talent! Thanks lovely one.....xo

edit: Thank you for shelving her!

Rain, mo chara .....  
 
Your exceptional, vivid imagery within this piece, heightens the senses....'feeding' the soul--to be sure!!  
"...Those secret occasions she shared internally,  
     externally and and around his emotional edge...  
...capsized her...." <--- Breath-catching!!!  
 
For me. this poem presents the slightly more insidious side of a relationship.....each of the individuals (willingly) enabling their addictions........or........  
perhaps, sometimes, love is just ill-fated.........and simply has to hurt!!  
 
Either way, you have 'gifted' us with another extraordinary piece!  
 
 
 
 
 

Enchantress, you've been missed darlin'! Big smile seeing your presence on my side of town. I've always loved reading your thick encouragement and excitement regarding my ink. Your unwavering supports melts my heart. Thanks you so much!

"perhaps, sometimes, love is just ill-fated.........and simply has to hurt!! "
^^^^^^^^^ I'll drink to that!!  *swigs back straight shot of peach Cîroc*    

"She slept restlessly in his bed of    
guilty intentions...  "

So when you start the poem with this you leave hanging mouth a jaw thirsty to swallow your words..CURTSY BOW TO YOU

....lol  Does my heart wonders when I receive a curtsy bow from you feen!  :)
Happy you passed through my sweet friend. Thankya luv!

alas the pleasure was mine..
[a deep low sincere bow as I curtsy my retreat!]

oh my stars, rainy lady this just gutted me. truly.
i adore these snapshots of yours, your use of colour & texture & sound in written word... brings the depths to life...
"She slept restlessly in his bed of
guilty intentions...
where she suffocated from love’s noose
apricot scarves from bedposts that
kept what they did behind Pandora’s cadence."
^^^^
that opening stanza! oh my damn... those apricot scarves just tied me into hopeless little knots
loved this
xo

hey there sexy mama! :) I absolutely love your comment dancedoll, and pleased to read your favorite lines. Those apricots scarves and tying folks up - so you! ;)  Thank you for the endless goodies you constantly bring my way. xo

Every single thing you write is so beautiful - you truly have a gift. Honestly, you are my favourite poet on here - thank you for sharing your work.
Ra x

Oh My!!! Raa, when I read your comment my mouth hung open! Shocked by your humbling confession! Truly stunned by your appreciation of my craft. You have no idea how your words have lit fuel in my pen.
With sincere Thanks! xo

Poetic love~

As I often do... I have such a different feeling driving from this. This can only be from the skilled and gifted writer who exploits the readers feelings with the most amazing way of the use of words.

Tho in love the guilty intention makes love feel like a noose. Wanting to just hold the fire for one night and giving in to the apricot scarves and what they may hold. Reality chocking this dream leaving only the bruises of the noose, tho just a brush of this darkness is all we get.... I keeps us very much alive.

As always you blow me away Rain... Hope you don't think I am crazy

....as usual, you're inside of my head! ;)

Well said G, Well said! Love your commentary!  Thank you! xo

I think one poster described this as a"deep incision",  more of a wound in need of a bariatric chamber than a bruise.  The words don' t necessarily leap from the page with emotion but burn deeply nonetheless.  As I sit here alone in this hospital room, I guess I find a deeper affinity to this prose tonight.  Sometimes, love just hurts and wounds the heart.  Captured as only you can beautiful artist :-)

...those deep incisions usually need stitches, most cases leaving a scar. Bruises go away with time, once the swelling of the cause has vanished. Thank you and I appreciate the listing!
Hospital room? Oh no! I'll send a little prayer and ask God to be a fence around you. Sorry to hear you're down Archie.

A very well written poem of how many of us feel when we first fall in love with that one person you just can't live without . true love always leaves bump's, bruise and scares . thanks for sharing

Hey fella! :) I've missed your presence around these parts! Hope all is well!
Thank you for such a wonderful reply!

You painted a great picture. You took a feeling and made it deeper.

Thank you so much JAP! Appreciate the pen-love! Welcome to DU! Hope you have an enjoyable stay! :)