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"Instantaneous..."
I'm combustible...
a warning...
labeled like a
caustic corrosive
Toxic, a chemical
when I spit mental...
it's criminal...
It's as if
the crime of rhyme,
is slimed in hip hop
hype, n' still it's bite
is deftly homicidal...
Idle, the eye
won't be, instead
I will forever flee
the confinement
awash the 'see'
in the mind is strictly
bent on 'verse assassination'
all the while retracing
the roots of it's origin's base
this pace- fast,
blurred, is far past
conscious choice,
distanced
from whence it began
to first explore it's poetic voice
Self-rooted, the flame of fire
desired, yet not mired
by the multitude of mortal men
who endeavored n'
wished it's truth mute
though once the seed's been nutured, it's bound to bear
poetry's fruit...
a warning...
labeled like a
caustic corrosive
Toxic, a chemical
when I spit mental...
it's criminal...
It's as if
the crime of rhyme,
is slimed in hip hop
hype, n' still it's bite
is deftly homicidal...
Idle, the eye
won't be, instead
I will forever flee
the confinement
awash the 'see'
in the mind is strictly
bent on 'verse assassination'
all the while retracing
the roots of it's origin's base
this pace- fast,
blurred, is far past
conscious choice,
distanced
from whence it began
to first explore it's poetic voice
Self-rooted, the flame of fire
desired, yet not mired
by the multitude of mortal men
who endeavored n'
wished it's truth mute
though once the seed's been nutured, it's bound to bear
poetry's fruit...
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Re. "Instantaneous..."
26th Aug 2015 7:56pm
Poe I can feel the power in this write blazing the page..
excellent with love Crim
excellent with love Crim
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26th Aug 2015 8:04pm
Thank u sweetie, it kinda just popped in my head n I just started inking til it ebbed away :) appreciate you much n always
Re. "Instantaneous..."
I love the rhythm of the piece itself.
It doesn't have the usual rhyming scheme which makes it all the more pleasurable to read.
Just absolute Penning!!!
Darker
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Re: Re. "Instantaneous..."
26th Aug 2015 8:43pm
Aaawww my beauty, if it's one thing I DO try is to attempt to NOT be usual... Truly, sincerely, I'm grateful for u n ur support :)
Re. "Instantaneous..."
26th Aug 2015 8:18pm
"a warning...
labeled like a
caustic corrosive" <~~ a word-fav, gotsa luv on ur *caustic here!
& respectin that warnin label.. so needed w/ur bold self ;)
"it's criminal...
It's as if
the crime of rhyme,
is slimed in hip hop
hype, n' still it's bite
is deftly homicidal... "
~yep.. def chargin' you wif sumthen misters.. smooth-smooth & ripe fer handcuffs, you are! ;)
Adoring ur 'verse assassination' .. & love the mood of this piece, Never let em silence this poetic flair you gotts goin!
~d
labeled like a
caustic corrosive" <~~ a word-fav, gotsa luv on ur *caustic here!
& respectin that warnin label.. so needed w/ur bold self ;)
"it's criminal...
It's as if
the crime of rhyme,
is slimed in hip hop
hype, n' still it's bite
is deftly homicidal... "
~yep.. def chargin' you wif sumthen misters.. smooth-smooth & ripe fer handcuffs, you are! ;)
Adoring ur 'verse assassination' .. & love the mood of this piece, Never let em silence this poetic flair you gotts goin!
~d
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Re: Re. "Instantaneous..."
26th Aug 2015 8:46pm
My sweet sighs, u make me smile broadly n I'm forever grateful... Honestly, I'm overjoyed for your support always:)
Re. "Instantaneous..."
26th Aug 2015 8:34pm
The rhyme snuck in in an unusual way is genius.
Dig this on you PM
Screams loud and you!
Best. Or better put, fav of yours. The Raw and powerful voice sets me on 🔥 fire!
Incendiary poetry !!
💰gold
💫 J.
Dig this on you PM
Screams loud and you!
Best. Or better put, fav of yours. The Raw and powerful voice sets me on 🔥 fire!
Incendiary poetry !!
💰gold
💫 J.
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Re: Re. "Instantaneous..."
26th Aug 2015 8:47pm
Aaawwww my precious one!! I'm gonna brand you my GEM. :) thank you sweetheart, flattered always n forever :)
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26th Aug 2015 9:19pm
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27th Aug 2015 1:01am
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27th Aug 2015 2:15am
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27th Aug 2015 1:14am
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27th Aug 2015 3:17am
That's such sweet compliment! Thank you my dear, I'm so flattered n honored for your support :)
Re. "Instantaneous..."
27th Aug 2015 4:23am
'verse assassination'" indeed this was EXecuted with extreme precision!!! yep you killed it and i loved it!! Awesomeness
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27th Aug 2015 8:28am
Ooohhh sweetie! I thank you much but ssshhhh... Don't say 'kill' to loud, the MAN might be listening! lol jk... I adore you n your support always :)
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Anonymous
27th Aug 2015 7:58am
you are da man!! No doubt about it :)
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27th Aug 2015 8:31am
Aaawwww c'mere n let me kiss you! lol thank you my dear! n you know I know, you Da woman! lol mmmmaaauuuhhh! :)
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27th Aug 2015 1:53pm
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27th Aug 2015 6:56pm
Aaaawwww pucker up for a big ole
Wet one lady! Mmmmmmmuuuaaaahhhhh!! lol
I Thank u for ur support n time always :)
Wet one lady! Mmmmmmmuuuaaaahhhhh!! lol
I Thank u for ur support n time always :)
Re. "Instantaneous..."
28th Aug 2015 11:27pm
Ahhhh..another flame throwing session i see you got going I here bro...yeah..that pen be laced with flammable liquid indeed....you know when you get it in like this i get amped..haha...
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29th Aug 2015 00:25am
N by you gettin amped you know that will be amped too! So hell yea bro be amped n spit yo shit like the poet I know you are throwing down the lyrics
That's always a hit!! thanks a ton bro. Appreciate u always :)
That's always a hit!! thanks a ton bro. Appreciate u always :)