A curious case of sacrifice

digging the image, concept, and compacted wording.

of course particular wording is always important, but crucial in these concentrated writes - and that being the case, I sorta wonder if the "in fact" is needed?  Seems so inconsequential, and I do like the write,  but I do wonder...

Whatever, just nitty pickity for the talk of it... potent bugger here E, cheerio my friend! :-)

LB

cheers, man. you're right. totally disregarded the unwritten rule of compact. in my defense I was trying to give the narrative and narrator some character: kinda like telling the story as apposed to showing the event. I'm not sure if it's possible within the restrictions of such a short verse. certainly not the way I tried anyway, though I do harbor aspirations of fleshing it out with another stanza or two if I can.

Thanks for your eyes and thoughts good sir. sleep deprived that you must be, if not yet then very soon haha :)    

Sounds like a case of "knowing your numbers up"
Love the directness of this ink Good Sir!!!

Soul-teaser

perhaps you are right, good fellow. I s'pose knowing something and acting accordingly can be a rarity

thanks most much for the visit and words

astute and not a word in excess.  SO.  Though one wonders what the executioner did with said skin - but maybe that's the point...

SweetOblivion

cheers man. that's a good point, I would hope that the cut off allows people to picture their own turn of events. though on the other side of the coin the whole thing could be a metaphor

thank you kindly for the visit and your words. much appreciated

A helluva strong stance to take for a last one! Sounds like a person refusing to allow her power to be taken away til the last breath. I can respect this character, which is commendable on your part as a writer. To create such a vivid image and persona in so few words is testament again to your mastery of potency with brevity.
I love the defiance shown by offering the skin and assisting...pretty stunningly bold. This is a protagonist sure that they're right and been wronged.The title is suggestive of a person who is so sure their life is worth the point being made that by all rights they are correct. martyrs are just heroes with fewer fans. Awesome work, as usual
Mr. Craic
shine on

Missus Moon

yes, I must confess to nearly giving this lady a back story, mostly because I thought the character deserved one. but I figured it would ruin her altogether so deleted it at the last minute.

I'm glad you mentioned the title because this occasion is one of the few  I actually put some thought into one. I was hoping it be more suggestive than concrete in order to tie in with the body of the poem

you make some very good observations Missus, the kind that make writing feel worthwhile.

thanks most much for your visit and in-depth pondering. much appreciated  

Toetill standstill poeit Mann
Rm

Thank you most kindly for the visit and words, RM
much appreciated

there is a magic in this scene that
renders its truth

absinthe

very good of you to say, Lady. I suspect that any magic would need to be offset by one's own magic.

hat tip to you, thanks for visiting and leaving your thoughts    

gosh, this is touching
I had to read this over and over again.....

she's got no remorse for her condemnation!

absolutely great write...

sektioN8ty

far too kind, good sir and a nice take

thank you for visiting and leaving your thoughts

Gabriel. bonjour, monsieur.

let's hope no cats come visit. glad you like it and thanks most much for dropping by and leaving your thoughts

Gawd Damn! Slap right in the face I love it!
Zazz

I had to come back for seconds, read it twice.
Gawd Damn that is crazy powerful Lepp!
love it!

Cheers, Zazzles. it's not very often I can slap someone in the face and they come back for seconds

much obliged for your visit and words, Lady

"D

i'm glad you left this one untinkered [which is now totally a word] i love how effective it is in its brevity.
there's something really uncomfortable here that grabbed me by the throat the first time i read it... it's still choking ^.^

Dear Lady

I must apologise for the behaviour of my words. this latest stunt whereby they choke a person is reprehensible and I can assure you that I'll be having some strong words with my words to try curtail any future acts of untinkered savagery

thanks, I think this could be a what do you see poem. people are free to see different things in the character. from selfless sacrifice to hardened unrepentant. her description is minimal so it's only by her actions we can form an idea, but I think her actions are strong enough to compensate for that and bold enough to strongly suggest but still keep ambiguity for interpretation

I am also glad that I left it untinkered, cheers


welcome back, and thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts    


  

Very interesting Lep
I'd love to say something witty and poetic
But I will settle for a you go boy

ahh but you go boy is both poetic and witty so happy days.

thanks for all your support, lady. nice to see you knocking about again

there is much said in so few words. small writes like this are all about proper word choice, and you have executed very well. whoever this woman is, she is not to be forgotten. well done.

Okk, have I little chillings everywhere.. it reminds me of a time , oh so long ago ...yet still feels so fresh like a gigantic wound, I suppose. Hmm, your words open the ventricles for the blood to grow pale & thick

always happy to give little chillings, not so happy 'bout opening gigantic wounds ...we'll call it swings n roundabouts.

thank you most lots for the visit and words, dear lady  

Not too much of an opening wound, but it took me also to when it was huge... my apologies,should conveyed it clearly. But was swept off my feet of the power in so few words

no need for apologies, dear lady. thank you most lots  

Smirking, as your lady has de-balled the executioner..(if female- de-sumthened else) ha!
Unremorseful defiance? commendable trait!

Your lines provoke & even naughtily
*demand a deeper ponder to so concise
a piece of myriad possibilities. Be thinkin'
on this fer a bit mista-man..(after sum sleeps)

Cool stuffs
~d

ah yes, DS . the executioner is not gender specific. could be either, or both

there are quite a few possibilities to ponder right enough and thank you for the pondering and for your visit and leaving of thoughts to ponder in return    

CraicDealer, luv ~ :-*

You have left this one open to such an array of interpretations; here's what I think.

I think even if you're a badass executioner, you've got to have some respect for that situation there. Mayhap grudging, but there. So, mayhap, you ensure it's a quick thing, as efficient as you can make it. Mayhap... ;-p

As for the woman (and I'm certain this is due to where my mind is these days), I know I'd do whatever I had to to keep attention on myself to protect my children - ripping the skin off my back, fashioning a hood, all expressionless? I think that fits the bill well, luv... ;-*

This poem is as so much of your work exceptional, finely crafted and honed - a sharp blade lethal and gorgeous. :-*

Savaja

you're very kind, Lady.  I find reading the different interps to be a wonderful bonus and huge compliment, so thank you heaps and bunches for yours, which is quite dark and deep in itself

and thank you again for dropping by and leaving your thoughts

love the savage nature of this woman knowing her time is come and leavings with one last fuck you..

excellent ink Craic..

with love Crim

lady Crimson

yeah, there are certainly many great qualities attached to the woman. I have a bit of a hard spot for her myself

thanks most much for your visit, lady. and for leaving your thoughts  

Brother you hit perfection on that one.
Thank you for the share.

thank you, and welcome to  this place


cheers for dropping by and leaving your thoughts

Only a strong woman could truly sacrifice herself.
And only a strong piece of poetry could make you feel it....

Hullo

thank you on both counts, and a third for stopping by and leaving your brain print

This had quite the Joan Of Arc feel to it. However the bigger question that this piece poses is the level of sacrifice that each woman gives in servitude of something... whether that be a family, children, a partner, a job... it portrays the woman as rather humble, and although humble women seldom make history, they are the every day heroes of the human race.  

I don’t usually comment on font, but even that worked for the piece really. Slanted. Delicate. Feminine.  

Enjoyed picking over this one. Besta luck in the comp 👍🏻

-M