Heartbroken by Top Critiquers Poems
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heartbroken by top critiquers poems. Poems written by members who have given lots of feedback to other poets this month.
retracts
just in
the middle
of our
kiss, she
opens
her eyes,
realizing
i am not
the man
that she
has been
dreaming
of, she
retracts
from our
kiss,
from my
arms.
the middle
of our
kiss, she
opens
her eyes,
realizing
i am not
the man
that she
has been
dreaming
of, she
retracts
from our
kiss,
from my
arms.
#deception
#disappointment
#escape
#heartbroken
#secrets
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Father's memory
On Sundays the father climbs
one side of the roof
trying to find somewhere
where there are no eyes.
Nothing else to do but
undress, lie back
and open his arms wide.
His feet are crossed and made into an X.
A target for the sun to focus
all the energies on him.
The seat of the soul, the damp hair,
breathing, it's the father who calls
all the light he can bring to himself,
in his heroic exhaustion,
a warrior.
If we follow him, still as the light,
genuflecting to his side. ...
one side of the roof
trying to find somewhere
where there are no eyes.
Nothing else to do but
undress, lie back
and open his arms wide.
His feet are crossed and made into an X.
A target for the sun to focus
all the energies on him.
The seat of the soul, the damp hair,
breathing, it's the father who calls
all the light he can bring to himself,
in his heroic exhaustion,
a warrior.
If we follow him, still as the light,
genuflecting to his side. ...
#death
#grief
#heartbroken
#memories
#nostalgia
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3 Comments
Where's Daddy?
No lumpenproletariat allowed,
or even old fashioned non-combatants,
to survive the new killing fields plowed
by techno-feudal targeting patents
designed for destruction block by block,
instead of soldiers duel by duel,
until depleting its carpet bomb stock
or the bombers run out of noxious fuel.
Yet still the algorithm looks for him
until the mission is declared complete
when something like a special cryptonym
sends troops to search each mortuary street,
since daddy may have eluded the bomb...
which made kibble out of the...
or even old fashioned non-combatants,
to survive the new killing fields plowed
by techno-feudal targeting patents
designed for destruction block by block,
instead of soldiers duel by duel,
until depleting its carpet bomb stock
or the bombers run out of noxious fuel.
Yet still the algorithm looks for him
until the mission is declared complete
when something like a special cryptonym
sends troops to search each mortuary street,
since daddy may have eluded the bomb...
which made kibble out of the...
#heartbroken
#shame
#despair
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6 Comments
Beginning To End
I can't stop this fall
Boulders are chasing me down
Our pain is avalanching all around
Hearts are bleeding shattering our sound
I never thought that I'ld feel like this
Less more ever sit down and write this
How I miss your touch and how I miss your kiss
The softness of your body as I pull you through the mist
Cuddled, swaddled, even though we both resist you're in my arms
It's not about astrology, although we're astrological and love astral charm
We're eternal boo because we existed before there was
We brought...
Boulders are chasing me down
Our pain is avalanching all around
Hearts are bleeding shattering our sound
I never thought that I'ld feel like this
Less more ever sit down and write this
How I miss your touch and how I miss your kiss
The softness of your body as I pull you through the mist
Cuddled, swaddled, even though we both resist you're in my arms
It's not about astrology, although we're astrological and love astral charm
We're eternal boo because we existed before there was
We brought...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love
236 reads
10 Comments
Beautiful Echoes Of Yesterday
#relationships
#heartbroken
#lover
#sensual
#passion
569 reads
13 Comments
Raw Unclean Wound
The anguish
That bleeds from this heart
Is an unclean wound
There’s no solace in beauty
It scratches at my scars
Keeping the pain raw
That bleeds from this heart
Is an unclean wound
There’s no solace in beauty
It scratches at my scars
Keeping the pain raw
#heartbroken
#love
#minimalist #UnrequitedLove
#minimalist #UnrequitedLove
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5 Comments
Just The Tip
(Ten thousand times)
_______________________
"We should talk about this"
"We've talked enough. It's time to heal"
"How?"
"I have an idea"
...
"Paring knives? You're stabbing me?"
"Not exactly. You get one"
"A knife fight?"
"No. We're going to stick each other with just the tips. See who
flinches the worst. Sit down...
_______________________
"We should talk about this"
"We've talked enough. It's time to heal"
"How?"
"I have an idea"
...
"Paring knives? You're stabbing me?"
"Not exactly. You get one"
"A knife fight?"
"No. We're going to stick each other with just the tips. See who
flinches the worst. Sit down...
#heartbroken
#breakup
#escape
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20 Comments
my words...
the journey
of my words
started from zero
will continue forever,
whether here or
somewhere else,
whether they get hurt
or get drenched in tears,
whether they get rejected
by someone or fall from a height...
of my words
started from zero
will continue forever,
whether here or
somewhere else,
whether they get hurt
or get drenched in tears,
whether they get rejected
by someone or fall from a height...
#emptiness
#heartbroken
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Deserts
Those silent sigils laid on the page
Barren, white, the starkest of places
Emblems of meaning the whole not conveying
I linger, hesitant, grief at the thought of touch
The thought of you, a rending, jagged torn
What is the word for a feeling as this
There are no feelings, no words, no more
Solitude...the wilderness howls, 'alone'
Nothing echoes here save memories
In the trackless waste as the mind circles back
Beneath sun and moon
Between heaven and hell
That thin whispered name, out of place
Lost. Aimless. Adrift on a sea of...
Barren, white, the starkest of places
Emblems of meaning the whole not conveying
I linger, hesitant, grief at the thought of touch
The thought of you, a rending, jagged torn
What is the word for a feeling as this
There are no feelings, no words, no more
Solitude...the wilderness howls, 'alone'
Nothing echoes here save memories
In the trackless waste as the mind circles back
Beneath sun and moon
Between heaven and hell
That thin whispered name, out of place
Lost. Aimless. Adrift on a sea of...
#love
#heartbroken
#TruthOfLife
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2 Comments
Uncontained
I am uncontained
Soul leaking out through the cracks
Those cracks that are supposed to let the light in
And they do, so lovely at first -
But then it burns
Burns holes in my self-control
Illuminates the shady-shamey corners
….it should feel like freedom….
But instead it is an agonizing nakedness
Laid bare against my will
Sobbing, surrounded by strangers
Uncontained
Bits of me and bits of crazy
(I can’t tell which is which)
Pouring down my face
Splashing messy...
Soul leaking out through the cracks
Those cracks that are supposed to let the light in
And they do, so lovely at first -
But then it burns
Burns holes in my self-control
Illuminates the shady-shamey corners
….it should feel like freedom….
But instead it is an agonizing nakedness
Laid bare against my will
Sobbing, surrounded by strangers
Uncontained
Bits of me and bits of crazy
(I can’t tell which is which)
Pouring down my face
Splashing messy...
#depression
#heartbroken
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23 Comments
Sister, Whatever You Need
Sister, Whatever You Need
Whatever you need
Whatever I can do
I want you to know
That I am here for you
If you want to talk
Or need a shoulder to cry on
I want you to know that
I am here for you to rely on
However lonely you feel
You are not alone
I am only as far away
As the nearest phone
So don't hesitate to call
No matter what you need
I rush to your side
With all Heaven's speed
Whatever you need
Whatever I can do
I want you to know
That I am here for you
If you want to talk
Or need a shoulder to cry on
I want you to know that
I am here for you to rely on
However lonely you feel
You are not alone
I am only as far away
As the nearest phone
So don't hesitate to call
No matter what you need
I rush to your side
With all Heaven's speed
#death
#heartbroken
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Dead Blooms
Departed are the hours I can wile away the pale moon
Now but wrinkle chin the coming eves of doom
And tea leaves have all but been strained
The wafting of my predicament In shadows
My wasted old bones laying midnight winds
My musing crone gives me the blessing and kisses of dead blooms
The frozen pond is thin the chill has left my quill
Leading me to my forgotten prose on the other side window sill
Silently my sighs and closing eyes cry at unfinished words
Departed are the hours I can wile away the pale moon
Now but wrinkle chin the coming eves of doom
And tea leaves have all but been strained
The wafting of my predicament In shadows
My wasted old bones laying midnight winds
My musing crone gives me the blessing and kisses of dead blooms
The frozen pond is thin the chill has left my quill
Leading me to my forgotten prose on the other side window sill
Silently my sighs and closing eyes cry at unfinished words
Departed are the hours I can wile away the pale moon
#dark
#emptiness
#heartbroken #sadness
#heartbroken #sadness
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