Heartbroken by Top Critiquers Poems
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heartbroken by top critiquers poems. Poems written by members who have given lots of feedback to other poets this month.
Really Real Really
The half life
of emotion
Fades,
Nothingness
results:
When I
take
the
Time
to
Feel,
To test
reality,
to
see
If
It
Is
Real
of emotion
Fades,
Nothingness
results:
When I
take
the
Time
to
Feel,
To test
reality,
to
see
If
It
Is
Real
#sadness
#heartbroken
#emptiness
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obsession
years after your return,
frozen memories thaw
in the warmth of your presence...
i tried to survive
many winters
on my own...all alone,
while...you were relishing
sweet fragrance of blossoming flowers;
blessings of summer showers,
with your beloved...
don't know why
i couldn't erase you
from my heart
the longing...yearning,
like snowflakes
freezing me in the cold...
even though you left me in lurch
yet...
yet i kept you locked in my soul...
and now...that she's left
leaving...
frozen memories thaw
in the warmth of your presence...
i tried to survive
many winters
on my own...all alone,
while...you were relishing
sweet fragrance of blossoming flowers;
blessings of summer showers,
with your beloved...
don't know why
i couldn't erase you
from my heart
the longing...yearning,
like snowflakes
freezing me in the cold...
even though you left me in lurch
yet...
yet i kept you locked in my soul...
and now...that she's left
leaving...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#hope
#love
#obsession
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What Am I Waiting For?
Waiting for someone,
Who doesn't talk.
Hiding behind,
Writer's block.
I'll brew you up,
Like chicken stock.
I'll be waiting for you;
Watching the clock.
If clocks could watch,
And watches can clock....
I'd add them to my,
Wifi Hotspot.
Open to the public.
I kid you not.
Unfamiliar faces,
And connecting the dots.
I know you well,
But I don't know your thoughts.
Just expressions of strangers,
While I'm on the clock.
You hide in my mind,
As I carefully...
Who doesn't talk.
Hiding behind,
Writer's block.
I'll brew you up,
Like chicken stock.
I'll be waiting for you;
Watching the clock.
If clocks could watch,
And watches can clock....
I'd add them to my,
Wifi Hotspot.
Open to the public.
I kid you not.
Unfamiliar faces,
And connecting the dots.
I know you well,
But I don't know your thoughts.
Just expressions of strangers,
While I'm on the clock.
You hide in my mind,
As I carefully...
#heartbroken
#IMissYou
#loneliness
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4 Comments
Where's Daddy?
No lumpenproletariat allowed,
or even old fashioned non-combatants,
to survive the new killing fields plowed
by techno-feudal targeting patents
designed for destruction block by block,
instead of soldiers duel by duel,
until depleting its carpet bomb stock
or the bombers run out of noxious fuel.
Yet still the algorithm looks for him
until the mission is declared complete
when something like a special cryptonym
sends troops to search each mortuary street,
since daddy may have eluded the bomb...
which made kibble out of the...
or even old fashioned non-combatants,
to survive the new killing fields plowed
by techno-feudal targeting patents
designed for destruction block by block,
instead of soldiers duel by duel,
until depleting its carpet bomb stock
or the bombers run out of noxious fuel.
Yet still the algorithm looks for him
until the mission is declared complete
when something like a special cryptonym
sends troops to search each mortuary street,
since daddy may have eluded the bomb...
which made kibble out of the...
#heartbroken
#shame
#despair
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6 Comments
Uncontained
I am uncontained
Soul leaking out through the cracks
Those cracks that are supposed to let the light in
And they do, so lovely at first -
But then it burns
Burns holes in my self-control
Illuminates the shady-shamey corners
….it should feel like freedom….
But instead it is an agonizing nakedness
Laid bare against my will
Sobbing, surrounded by strangers
Uncontained
Bits of me and bits of crazy
(I can’t tell which is which)
Pouring down my face
Splashing messy...
Soul leaking out through the cracks
Those cracks that are supposed to let the light in
And they do, so lovely at first -
But then it burns
Burns holes in my self-control
Illuminates the shady-shamey corners
….it should feel like freedom….
But instead it is an agonizing nakedness
Laid bare against my will
Sobbing, surrounded by strangers
Uncontained
Bits of me and bits of crazy
(I can’t tell which is which)
Pouring down my face
Splashing messy...
#depression
#heartbroken
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23 Comments
Creampie Lies

#anger
#heartbroken
#betrayal
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10 Comments
Just The Tip
(Ten thousand times)
_______________________
"We should talk about this"
"We've talked enough. It's time to heal"
"How?"
"I have an idea"
...
"Paring knives? You're stabbing me?"
"Not exactly. You get one"
"A knife fight?"
"No. We're going to stick each other with just the tips. See who
flinches the worst. Sit down...
_______________________
"We should talk about this"
"We've talked enough. It's time to heal"
"How?"
"I have an idea"
...
"Paring knives? You're stabbing me?"
"Not exactly. You get one"
"A knife fight?"
"No. We're going to stick each other with just the tips. See who
flinches the worst. Sit down...
#heartbroken
#breakup
#escape
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20 Comments
Seriously
Did you ever think
I will ever come back
Did you once contemplate
Our lives will ever be back on track
We have moved on my dear
Not from love we have had or the lack
Of trying, but from the time
Time we drifted apart or didn’t comeback
Did you ever think
I will ever beg again
Did you once remind yourself
Of the sorrow caused and the pain
I will never go back to that life
Now that I recall the misery and the chain
I locked myself inside a cell
I have been trying...
I will ever come back
Did you once contemplate
Our lives will ever be back on track
We have moved on my dear
Not from love we have had or the lack
Of trying, but from the time
Time we drifted apart or didn’t comeback
Did you ever think
I will ever beg again
Did you once remind yourself
Of the sorrow caused and the pain
I will never go back to that life
Now that I recall the misery and the chain
I locked myself inside a cell
I have been trying...
#breakup
#love
#heartbroken #relationships
#heartbroken #relationships
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4 Comments
overheard on the street
please don’t leave me ..”
#heartbroken
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1 Comment
Closing Time
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xGytDsqkQY8
Last drinks shouts the tender
drink em up
it's time to be out
I need to get home
so sip the last of your beer
slam down the last shots
head toward the outside
the chill of the night
fought off by the incoherence of
alcohols numb
the wisps of the smoke machine swirls
and clings like sad fog
to the crusted carpets
where booze and blood
bile and tears have stained my memories
with exquisite times and the haunted agony
of a thousand-thousand poets ...
Last drinks shouts the tender
drink em up
it's time to be out
I need to get home
so sip the last of your beer
slam down the last shots
head toward the outside
the chill of the night
fought off by the incoherence of
alcohols numb
the wisps of the smoke machine swirls
and clings like sad fog
to the crusted carpets
where booze and blood
bile and tears have stained my memories
with exquisite times and the haunted agony
of a thousand-thousand poets ...
#bittersweet
#frustration
#heartbroken
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3 Comments
wait
smiling sideways you talk out of both sides of your mouth
I'm very intelligent I saw only what I wanted about you
yeah I got the bigger picture
you're only happy when I'm sad
secreting yourself you lust for someone else
a cruel bitch in heat
it wasn't good enough for me to be nice to her
she had to insult me and rub shit in my face
God forbid I stand up for myself that's crazy
burning with regret
your depression is evident
what did she deny you?
that's one of her games she brags about it
she's a thief wanting to...
I'm very intelligent I saw only what I wanted about you
yeah I got the bigger picture
you're only happy when I'm sad
secreting yourself you lust for someone else
a cruel bitch in heat
it wasn't good enough for me to be nice to her
she had to insult me and rub shit in my face
God forbid I stand up for myself that's crazy
burning with regret
your depression is evident
what did she deny you?
that's one of her games she brags about it
she's a thief wanting to...
#love
#heartbroken
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1 Comment
Beautiful Echoes Of Yesterday

#relationships
#heartbroken
#lover
#sensual
#passion
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13 Comments
DU Poetry : Heartbroken by Top Critiquers Poems