Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Every Heart Breaks
At one time or another
When love has played out
In a disappointing way
It's only natural to
Retreat in pain
Once in a while
Every Heart breaks
When love has played out
In a disappointing way
It's only natural to
Retreat in pain
Once in a while
Every Heart breaks
#breakup
#heartbroken
#hurt
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It doesn't matter
I would tell you how i feel
But it doesn't matter
To be here in this moment
But it doesn't matter
To feel like my heart is being torn from my chest
But it doesn't matter
To be screaming on the inside not wanting to experience this death
But it doesn't matter
I could tell you how much you sharing your life with me has meant
But it doesn't matter
How the thought of living without you feels like a fate worse than death
But it doesn't matter
I can reveal to you that I am scared moreso than I have ever been in my life
But it doesn't...
But it doesn't matter
To be here in this moment
But it doesn't matter
To feel like my heart is being torn from my chest
But it doesn't matter
To be screaming on the inside not wanting to experience this death
But it doesn't matter
I could tell you how much you sharing your life with me has meant
But it doesn't matter
How the thought of living without you feels like a fate worse than death
But it doesn't matter
I can reveal to you that I am scared moreso than I have ever been in my life
But it doesn't...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#regret
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Embrace the solitude
Always wanting more and never getting it
Following your heart and you keep regretting it
Leads you to disappointment and you keep letting it
Never won a hand but you keep betting it
all...taking chances hoping someone will stay true
Making excuses for every hurtful thing they do
If you love them hard enough they cant help but love you
can't love yourself so you find someone else to give it to
Putting them on a pedestal they can't help but fall from
It's so dumb
But your mind's numb
There's the beat of a drum
In your chest
For a...
Following your heart and you keep regretting it
Leads you to disappointment and you keep letting it
Never won a hand but you keep betting it
all...taking chances hoping someone will stay true
Making excuses for every hurtful thing they do
If you love them hard enough they cant help but love you
can't love yourself so you find someone else to give it to
Putting them on a pedestal they can't help but fall from
It's so dumb
But your mind's numb
There's the beat of a drum
In your chest
For a...
#breakup
#despair
#heartbroken #loneliness
#heartbroken #loneliness
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The dream is over
The years and the moments are all that remain
Thought it hurts there wont be more, I shouldn't complain
Pieces and fragments are still better than losing it all
Watching the cracks in my world as it all starts to fall
Should have and could haves abound and taunt me
And now the thoughts of what never could be
How clear its become only way too late
You told me how you felt and I refused to relate
Now its my turn to know how you felt for so long
And to see how ignoring it feels so wrong
Cant make ammends cuz we're past that point
And the...
Thought it hurts there wont be more, I shouldn't complain
Pieces and fragments are still better than losing it all
Watching the cracks in my world as it all starts to fall
Should have and could haves abound and taunt me
And now the thoughts of what never could be
How clear its become only way too late
You told me how you felt and I refused to relate
Now its my turn to know how you felt for so long
And to see how ignoring it feels so wrong
Cant make ammends cuz we're past that point
And the...
#heartbroken
#love
#regret #sadness
#regret #sadness
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The in between
The darkness is closing in
I hear it banging on the walls
Of my mind, my soul and everything within
Listening to the sound of my breath as it stalls
Everything comes rushing in at a pace thats hard to bear
Reaching for a hand but no one is there
Can anyone see me or do they just not care
Thinking of happy times I get lost in a stare
In between worlds I refuse to let go
Grasping at ghosts as my hand slips through
How could I ever possibly not know
From the beginning it was only you
The whole time its been you
I hear it banging on the walls
Of my mind, my soul and everything within
Listening to the sound of my breath as it stalls
Everything comes rushing in at a pace thats hard to bear
Reaching for a hand but no one is there
Can anyone see me or do they just not care
Thinking of happy times I get lost in a stare
In between worlds I refuse to let go
Grasping at ghosts as my hand slips through
How could I ever possibly not know
From the beginning it was only you
The whole time its been you
#death
#despair
#heartbroken #regret
#heartbroken #regret
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Again
The sadness rushes over me like being caught in the undertow
As I look in the eyes of someone i barely know
My best friend, my partner, my other half, my soul is gone
I am stuck in a chamber of torture as I watch her move on
I scream internally as my heart dies a slow death
Unwilling to accept that our love has taken its last breath
All the moments I should have cherished play out in my mind
As she turns her back and leaves me behind
This coldness I feel from her is impossible to comprehend
I tore down my walls for a...
As I look in the eyes of someone i barely know
My best friend, my partner, my other half, my soul is gone
I am stuck in a chamber of torture as I watch her move on
I scream internally as my heart dies a slow death
Unwilling to accept that our love has taken its last breath
All the moments I should have cherished play out in my mind
As she turns her back and leaves me behind
This coldness I feel from her is impossible to comprehend
I tore down my walls for a...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#loneliness #sadness
#loneliness #sadness
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In Disbelief
You must live in straight denial. As you stand there with a smile. You don't care about me, that's clear to see. So why do you refuse to let me be. I will never be what you want or need. No matter how much I bend or weave. I cannot believe what you have put me through. The whole time, knowing the pain you would ensue. You planned all this from day one. There was not a dammed thing I could have done. I am so tired of being under your control. I think hurting me is your only real goal. Go find someone or something else to take up your time. I no longer wish to call you mine!
#heartbroken
#breakup
#emotional #hurt
#emotional #hurt
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Safety Bubble
Within this safe bubble
I remain
Nursing my
Wounded heart
After you walked
Away from me
I remain
Nursing my
Wounded heart
After you walked
Away from me
#heartbroken
#breakup
#suffering
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IF I'D WALK AWAY
If the time has come
For me to walk away
To leave you my love
Will you not save
The tears that flow
I have on display
When I turn to leave
On this darkest day
When the sun won't rise
And the winter comes
As a river still flows
From the saddest eyes
If the time has come
For me to walk away
Will you leave a smile
Could you pause awhile
In the setting sun
And I leave you a kiss
For now there is none
As I leave you with this
Knowing you warmed the heart
Of a very troubled fool
Who's lost...
For me to walk away
To leave you my love
Will you not save
The tears that flow
I have on display
When I turn to leave
On this darkest day
When the sun won't rise
And the winter comes
As a river still flows
From the saddest eyes
If the time has come
For me to walk away
Will you leave a smile
Could you pause awhile
In the setting sun
And I leave you a kiss
For now there is none
As I leave you with this
Knowing you warmed the heart
Of a very troubled fool
Who's lost...
#love
#hope
#heartbroken
#disappointment
#bittersweet
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4 Comments
The Bible, a savior and a broken heart!
On I wish I knew just what to say ,
To help u ease your pain.
Spending too much time alone
Can make a man insane.
I know that you are broken,
And I know just how u feel ...
I know that it will take some time,
Before u start to heal...
I've spent lots of hours,
All alone and torn apart.
I still have scars that bleed sometimes
Deep inside my heart.
I didn't want to meet you..
Didn't want to take a chance.
Wasn't looking for a new friend
Or even fake romance.
I seldom make much effort,
Cuz I don't...
To help u ease your pain.
Spending too much time alone
Can make a man insane.
I know that you are broken,
And I know just how u feel ...
I know that it will take some time,
Before u start to heal...
I've spent lots of hours,
All alone and torn apart.
I still have scars that bleed sometimes
Deep inside my heart.
I didn't want to meet you..
Didn't want to take a chance.
Wasn't looking for a new friend
Or even fake romance.
I seldom make much effort,
Cuz I don't...
#sadness
#loneliness
#rejection #heartbroken
#rejection #heartbroken
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FOREVER
Forever is a word for fools,
a word that describes a time
that will never come.
Always is a word for dreamers,
a word that describes wishes
and forgets reality.
Never is a word that forgets
what we don't know about tomorrow.
As for me, I'm a fool forever,
who dreams of always
having you to love,
and never forgets that all my tomorrows are nothing without you.
a word that describes a time
that will never come.
Always is a word for dreamers,
a word that describes wishes
and forgets reality.
Never is a word that forgets
what we don't know about tomorrow.
As for me, I'm a fool forever,
who dreams of always
having you to love,
and never forgets that all my tomorrows are nothing without you.
#love
#heartbroken
#emptiness #bittersweet
#emptiness #bittersweet
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11 Comments
wait
smiling sideways you talk out of both sides of your mouth
I'm very intelligent I saw only what I wanted about you
yeah I got the bigger picture
you're only happy when I'm sad
secreting yourself you lust for someone else
a cruel bitch in heat
it wasn't good enough for me to be nice to her
she had to insult me and rub shit in my face
God forbid I stand up for myself that's crazy
burning with regret
your depression is evident
what did she deny you?
that's one of her games she brags about it
she's a thief wanting to...
I'm very intelligent I saw only what I wanted about you
yeah I got the bigger picture
you're only happy when I'm sad
secreting yourself you lust for someone else
a cruel bitch in heat
it wasn't good enough for me to be nice to her
she had to insult me and rub shit in my face
God forbid I stand up for myself that's crazy
burning with regret
your depression is evident
what did she deny you?
that's one of her games she brags about it
she's a thief wanting to...
#love
#heartbroken
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1 Comment
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