Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Whispers Of Validation
A gifted lover who uses emotions as a bargaining chip.
Tenacious in his grieving of a relationship that had so much potential.
A thick black book what holds the libido of lovers clinged together at a most unholy hour is his collection of conquests.
She would gladly borrow virginity if it meant a commitment on his part.
I've looked into the eyes of a promise I never meant and I can feel it's consequences creeping up as I prepare for the end of this journey.
Tenacious in his grieving of a relationship that had so much potential.
A thick black book what holds the libido of lovers clinged together at a most unholy hour is his collection of conquests.
She would gladly borrow virginity if it meant a commitment on his part.
I've looked into the eyes of a promise I never meant and I can feel it's consequences creeping up as I prepare for the end of this journey.
#rejection
#heartbroken
#emptiness
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"Secretedly..."
I have my own definition
For this word, Secretedly
That makes perfect sense to me...
It's when someone has skeletons
In their secret private closet
Has kept them for a long while hiding them
Still to this very day, doing it
Secretedly, unashamedly so...
Carelessly thinking no one could know...
Some secrets aren't meant
For any or everyone
Because if known, I'm sure a hundred percent
It'd shock and disgust
All individuals mental
Have them deciding this person
Has definitely some screws loose, to be
Harboring...
For this word, Secretedly
That makes perfect sense to me...
It's when someone has skeletons
In their secret private closet
Has kept them for a long while hiding them
Still to this very day, doing it
Secretedly, unashamedly so...
Carelessly thinking no one could know...
Some secrets aren't meant
For any or everyone
Because if known, I'm sure a hundred percent
It'd shock and disgust
All individuals mental
Have them deciding this person
Has definitely some screws loose, to be
Harboring...
#sadness
#rejection
#heartbroken
#confusion
#disappointment
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Weeds
She waited faithless for the end of life
last chocolate lonely
destiny ordained like melting ice
lost in sadness as the days swirled by
in a humdrum haze of chores
before her slow walk to the store
then the window's cruel boredom
aimlessly counting passers by
forgetting how to form a smile
until the last of the light wrought sleep
bringing respite for tears inside
all hope hushed from dreams
drowned in the dust of long ago
when the weeds began to grow
her poison of tomorrow
as certain as emptied time
last chocolate lonely
destiny ordained like melting ice
lost in sadness as the days swirled by
in a humdrum haze of chores
before her slow walk to the store
then the window's cruel boredom
aimlessly counting passers by
forgetting how to form a smile
until the last of the light wrought sleep
bringing respite for tears inside
all hope hushed from dreams
drowned in the dust of long ago
when the weeds began to grow
her poison of tomorrow
as certain as emptied time
#loneliness
#heartbroken
#unicorns
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Constellation
CONSTELLATION
For a time I existed as a god.
Her being the sweetest of ambrosia.
Her being the goddess in my eyes,
my heart and soul, her temple
of which I sang by her immortal song.
A gentle and eternal hand.
The raging storms would cease.
The tumultuousness of the seas
would ease into a peaceful sleep.
She.....energy.
The lightning, beautiful,
forking across an endless sky,
lighting up the night,
night to day,
let us revel in her splendor!
In the palm of my hand I once...
For a time I existed as a god.
Her being the sweetest of ambrosia.
Her being the goddess in my eyes,
my heart and soul, her temple
of which I sang by her immortal song.
A gentle and eternal hand.
The raging storms would cease.
The tumultuousness of the seas
would ease into a peaceful sleep.
She.....energy.
The lightning, beautiful,
forking across an endless sky,
lighting up the night,
night to day,
let us revel in her splendor!
In the palm of my hand I once...
#sadness
#love
#heartbroken #bittersweet
#heartbroken #bittersweet
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The pain of love

#heartbroken
#erotic
#BDSM
#sacrifice
#DomesticViolence
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Some people don't deserve freedom; and Nicholas Hopkins is so clearly amongst them!
By Stanley Collymore
Nicholas Hopkins simply has the
attitude, demeanour, character
and obvious lack of genuine
intelligence self-evidently of someone
who clearly isn't going to either make
much out of his own unquestionably
pathetic life or actually get anything
quite significant out of life generally.
A rather typically, sickening state of
affairs undoubtedly amounting to a
distinctively perverse tragedy as he
callously and crucially undoubtedly
quite irresponsibly simply bumbles ...
Nicholas Hopkins simply has the
attitude, demeanour, character
and obvious lack of genuine
intelligence self-evidently of someone
who clearly isn't going to either make
much out of his own unquestionably
pathetic life or actually get anything
quite significant out of life generally.
A rather typically, sickening state of
affairs undoubtedly amounting to a
distinctively perverse tragedy as he
callously and crucially undoubtedly
quite irresponsibly simply bumbles ...
#sadness
#grief
#heartbroken
#despair
#emptiness
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YOUR TAINTED LOVE
Upon our meeting and first becoming aqainted,
had no idea your love was going to be so very tainted.
let down my guards and invited you all the way in,
I had thought for sure your love I could possibly win.
I came with so much innocence and pure devotion,
you brought so much silence and loads of commotion.
but still I believed, refusing myself to see all your lies,
you will never know how very much this girl cries.
Crying for what I thought was care and true love,
I used to think you were an angel that came from above. ...
had no idea your love was going to be so very tainted.
let down my guards and invited you all the way in,
I had thought for sure your love I could possibly win.
I came with so much innocence and pure devotion,
you brought so much silence and loads of commotion.
but still I believed, refusing myself to see all your lies,
you will never know how very much this girl cries.
Crying for what I thought was care and true love,
I used to think you were an angel that came from above. ...
#love
#forgiveness
#heartbroken
#disappointment
#bittersweet
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UNANSWERED QUESTIONS
Do you ever wish you could wake up with me there?
Or I turned and walked away, would you even care?
Do you ever want or need me so bad, and wish to call?
Or have you forgotten me and don't think of me at all?
Does our memories ever cross over into your mind?
Or were they and I just a waste of your energy and time?
Do you ever still feel any kind of strong desire for me?
Or did or do I merely just satisfy a sexual want or need?
Can I make you laugh, if you'd allow me to even try?
But, tell me please, have I ever made you sad or cry? ...
Or I turned and walked away, would you even care?
Do you ever want or need me so bad, and wish to call?
Or have you forgotten me and don't think of me at all?
Does our memories ever cross over into your mind?
Or were they and I just a waste of your energy and time?
Do you ever still feel any kind of strong desire for me?
Or did or do I merely just satisfy a sexual want or need?
Can I make you laugh, if you'd allow me to even try?
But, tell me please, have I ever made you sad or cry? ...
#love
#heartbroken
#confusion #bittersweet
#confusion #bittersweet
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Pain is an old friend you invite for tea
Doing the right thing is known to hurt.
It's demonstrated in shows, movies, even books.
Nothing quite replicates it.
This pain is not something that can be read or seen.
The many nights awake, shaking with tears.
Mornings with heavy eyes and a shaken frame.
It may have been right.
But it still hurts.
It hurts and hurts and nothing can change that.
It's just there.
You can make deals with your pain, you can even beg it for forgiveness.
It will laugh, and hold you tighter.
The past...
It's demonstrated in shows, movies, even books.
Nothing quite replicates it.
This pain is not something that can be read or seen.
The many nights awake, shaking with tears.
Mornings with heavy eyes and a shaken frame.
It may have been right.
But it still hurts.
It hurts and hurts and nothing can change that.
It's just there.
You can make deals with your pain, you can even beg it for forgiveness.
It will laugh, and hold you tighter.
The past...
#love
#heartbroken
#breakup
#suffering
#hurt
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A Liar
The thing I detest truly seriously undeniably
Is an individual that can lie effortlessly
Lying just to be...
Lying just to me...
Lying just to keep..
Lying so deeply
They don't know it inevitably
Turns the one they're lying to into an enemy...
Not knowing
Not realizing
Not innerstanding
All the repercussions
All the destructions
All the stressings
It's only causing...
And determinedly
They keep on elaborating
To the lies that have already
Been exposed by ones truthfully
Trying to get me to see and...
Is an individual that can lie effortlessly
Lying just to be...
Lying just to me...
Lying just to keep..
Lying so deeply
They don't know it inevitably
Turns the one they're lying to into an enemy...
Not knowing
Not realizing
Not innerstanding
All the repercussions
All the destructions
All the stressings
It's only causing...
And determinedly
They keep on elaborating
To the lies that have already
Been exposed by ones truthfully
Trying to get me to see and...
#sadness
#anger
#hate
#heartbroken
#disappointment
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Scars
In the darkness of despair, my life unfurled,
Lost and disappointed, in a lonely world.
Love, elusive as a whisper in the breeze,
I yearned for its touch, to put my heart at ease.
But love became a treacherous game,
A bittersweet journey, filled with heartbreak and shame.
In the depths of sorrow, I learned to cope,
With tears as my companions, a soul adrift in hope.
I wandered through the valleys of my own despair,
Through the raging storms, my heart stripped bare.
Each step I took, etched with scars so deep,
A fragile spirit,...
Lost and disappointed, in a lonely world.
Love, elusive as a whisper in the breeze,
I yearned for its touch, to put my heart at ease.
But love became a treacherous game,
A bittersweet journey, filled with heartbreak and shame.
In the depths of sorrow, I learned to cope,
With tears as my companions, a soul adrift in hope.
I wandered through the valleys of my own despair,
Through the raging storms, my heart stripped bare.
Each step I took, etched with scars so deep,
A fragile spirit,...
#grief
#heartbroken
#despair
#emptiness
#fear
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REMEMBERING YET FORGETTING
Forget the one that you once knew,
Remember that he the one that left you.
Forget the way he played your song,
Remember that you cried all night long.
Forget ways you memorized his walk,
Remember that he is not there to talk.
Forget the things he use to say,
Remember he has gone away.
Forget the way he held your hand,
Remember you could barely stand
Forget ways he took away your fears,
Remember nothing stopped your tears.
Forget how you wanted him forever,
Remember he said he loved you never.
Forget...
Remember that he the one that left you.
Forget the way he played your song,
Remember that you cried all night long.
Forget ways you memorized his walk,
Remember that he is not there to talk.
Forget the things he use to say,
Remember he has gone away.
Forget the way he held your hand,
Remember you could barely stand
Forget ways he took away your fears,
Remember nothing stopped your tears.
Forget how you wanted him forever,
Remember he said he loved you never.
Forget...
#love
#heartbroken
#disappointment #bittersweet
#disappointment #bittersweet
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