Heartbroken by Top Critiquers Poems
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heartbroken by top critiquers poems. Poems written by members who have given lots of feedback to other poets this month.
For Mira
It’s a funeral. It’s a loss. That’s why there are no words.
There’s nothing documented between
Aardvark
And
Zyzzyva
That can fill the void
Of you
In my life,
Nor frame
My utter
Devastation
Nothing
That will unwound you, but
The day is long and
Boring, so
I fucking dance,
Kick up my
Heels,
Amidst
The dim
Procession
I fuck stupid
I, stupid fuck
I, Exilis
I fuck things up
Hey,...
There’s nothing documented between
Aardvark
And
Zyzzyva
That can fill the void
Of you
In my life,
Nor frame
My utter
Devastation
Nothing
That will unwound you, but
The day is long and
Boring, so
I fucking dance,
Kick up my
Heels,
Amidst
The dim
Procession
I fuck stupid
I, stupid fuck
I, Exilis
I fuck things up
Hey,...
#heartbroken
#confessional
#TruthOfLife #IMissYou
#TruthOfLife #IMissYou
921 reads
33 Comments
Beautiful Echoes Of Yesterday

#relationships
#heartbroken
#lover
#sensual
#passion
397 reads
13 Comments
Where are you?
This kills me again
And you are as beautiful as the first dew
and it still remains on my heart
And on my heart it stays…
heavy as the whole world
I know it will stop soon
I know that it will stop quickly
and you will disappear somewhere
You know I'm sick
We used to laugh like children
And you are the most beautiful to me
like that first kiss
which cinched my fate
All my signals are wrong,
they lead me to ruin
They are leading me to disaster
And around me the remnants of our love
My...
And you are as beautiful as the first dew
and it still remains on my heart
And on my heart it stays…
heavy as the whole world
I know it will stop soon
I know that it will stop quickly
and you will disappear somewhere
You know I'm sick
We used to laugh like children
And you are the most beautiful to me
like that first kiss
which cinched my fate
All my signals are wrong,
they lead me to ruin
They are leading me to disaster
And around me the remnants of our love
My...
#love
#heartbroken
#breakup
451 reads
17 Comments
Dodging Bullets
It was after the two-hour wait and the ensuing letter
That I read the words out loud
As proof of a broken contract
In front of all the guests
Not to so much as to smear or slander
But rather for the reality to settle in everyone’s mind
Especially my own
What should have been the happiest day
Was now a shock and awe moment
Perhaps dodging bullets should also be celebrated
Hell, it’s another chance at life
I rather feel the pain now than spend months
Maybe even years
Invested in something that would’ve broken me even more ...
That I read the words out loud
As proof of a broken contract
In front of all the guests
Not to so much as to smear or slander
But rather for the reality to settle in everyone’s mind
Especially my own
What should have been the happiest day
Was now a shock and awe moment
Perhaps dodging bullets should also be celebrated
Hell, it’s another chance at life
I rather feel the pain now than spend months
Maybe even years
Invested in something that would’ve broken me even more ...
#heartbroken
#LifeChangingMoment
121 reads
4 Comments
Totally sad
A beautiful day in Darmstadt
As the young couple sought a quiet place
In the nearby wood.
In the shade. Discreet.
They walked along a narow path.
Around the bend Martha noticed a bunched up white sheet
Splashed with a lot of red wine.
Mark looked closer, saw long brown hair entertwined with branches
The body of a young woman
Mark puked, Martha screamed.
Police were called.
Turned out that the young lady, by the name of Anna Göldi Mayer
Was part of a sect, killed by her lover as a sacrifice and in penitence
To his god Besha. ...
As the young couple sought a quiet place
In the nearby wood.
In the shade. Discreet.
They walked along a narow path.
Around the bend Martha noticed a bunched up white sheet
Splashed with a lot of red wine.
Mark looked closer, saw long brown hair entertwined with branches
The body of a young woman
Mark puked, Martha screamed.
Police were called.
Turned out that the young lady, by the name of Anna Göldi Mayer
Was part of a sect, killed by her lover as a sacrifice and in penitence
To his god Besha. ...
#dark
#heartbroken
47 reads
2 Comments
Peleth Undomiel (co-written with Ken)
They say a mortal life
Lasts a hundred years at most
A mere blink of an eye
Compared to the time I’ve had with you
I’ve taught you from a child
And watched you turn into
A woman that excels
At everything you do
So how do I then
Do what I now must do
Let go of the one heart
That I’ve protected through and through
Please Tell me my child
There’s something I don’t see
What to do to To reverse or change these events
That pulls you away from me
I’ve fought the darkest...
Lasts a hundred years at most
A mere blink of an eye
Compared to the time I’ve had with you
I’ve taught you from a child
And watched you turn into
A woman that excels
At everything you do
So how do I then
Do what I now must do
Let go of the one heart
That I’ve protected through and through
Please Tell me my child
There’s something I don’t see
What to do to To reverse or change these events
That pulls you away from me
I’ve fought the darkest...
#sadness
#father
#children
#heartbroken
#rhyming
510 reads
6 Comments
Really Real Really
The half life
of emotion
Fades,
Nothingness
results:
When I
take
the
Time
to
Feel,
To test
reality,
to
see
If
It
Is
Real
of emotion
Fades,
Nothingness
results:
When I
take
the
Time
to
Feel,
To test
reality,
to
see
If
It
Is
Real
#sadness
#heartbroken
#emptiness
268 reads
4 Comments
Deer's Blood
One night dying of
Broken Heart
So I did something crazy
I drank deer's blood
It gave me superpowers
Like strength, speed,
Mind manipulation,
ability to enter dreams
Which I use to
make women happy
and making sure
that they are
ready to fight
the system to
create a better
society that's
Equal and Fair
To Everyone
Broken Heart
So I did something crazy
I drank deer's blood
It gave me superpowers
Like strength, speed,
Mind manipulation,
ability to enter dreams
Which I use to
make women happy
and making sure
that they are
ready to fight
the system to
create a better
society that's
Equal and Fair
To Everyone
#women
#men
#heartbroken
#LifeGoals
#CallToAction
150 reads
9 Comments
"GUNNA"!!
Gunna, tell on you cause, I'm gunna testify!
Why?
Cause I'm gunna cooperate!!
Cause if not, I'm gunna go to jail!
So I'm gunna do probation, and free myself from this label 🏷 once none as "YSL"!!
Gunna, gunna, gunna, hey 👋 gunna go you know me, gunna, and I'm gunna tell!!
"Gunna"
Re!!
Why?
Cause I'm gunna cooperate!!
Cause if not, I'm gunna go to jail!
So I'm gunna do probation, and free myself from this label 🏷 once none as "YSL"!!
Gunna, gunna, gunna, hey 👋 gunna go you know me, gunna, and I'm gunna tell!!
"Gunna"
Re!!
#loneliness
#heartbroken
#shame
#frustration
#disappointment
85 reads
9 Comments
Delta Dawn
greetings celestial faith
the garden groans and I with her
she has blossomed in winter
no less than a miracle
watch her shine
shimmering dalliance, a dahlia
with her own love to give
flourishing hope she dances stem on wind
delicate petals, so beautiful in her natural state
budding truth in the shadow of doubt
nectar of the Gods, a serum to cure memory
innocence deceived, such a long road it's been
tiny lover of man
a woman of need lest you forget her
challenging the thickets for placement
pushing...
the garden groans and I with her
she has blossomed in winter
no less than a miracle
watch her shine
shimmering dalliance, a dahlia
with her own love to give
flourishing hope she dances stem on wind
delicate petals, so beautiful in her natural state
budding truth in the shadow of doubt
nectar of the Gods, a serum to cure memory
innocence deceived, such a long road it's been
tiny lover of man
a woman of need lest you forget her
challenging the thickets for placement
pushing...
#love
#heartbroken
74 reads
3 Comments
Once lost

#heartbroken
#FeelingLost
540 reads
3 Comments
Ice Knife
it used to be
i’d wake to your heart beat
should of been easy to see
but I was in love, in love
with the way you were using me
guess it’s true what they say
the more beautiful the girl
the sharper her fangs
Hunnie, you’re a savage
maybe that’s why I need you
confusing the moment
for a scent that would last forever
tearing me limb from limb
I can’t simply let go
nor will I stick around
the very thought is a ice knife
thinking you put a curse on me
feeling it harder when I’m alone
over...
i’d wake to your heart beat
should of been easy to see
but I was in love, in love
with the way you were using me
guess it’s true what they say
the more beautiful the girl
the sharper her fangs
Hunnie, you’re a savage
maybe that’s why I need you
confusing the moment
for a scent that would last forever
tearing me limb from limb
I can’t simply let go
nor will I stick around
the very thought is a ice knife
thinking you put a curse on me
feeling it harder when I’m alone
over...
#rejection
#heartbroken
#UnrequitedLove #IMissYou
#UnrequitedLove #IMissYou
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