Heartbroken by Top Critiquers Poems
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heartbroken by top critiquers poems. Poems written by members who have given lots of feedback to other poets this month.
Unable To Forget
I had a vision of her walking across heaven
Realizing this while in the pits of a fiery lake
My time’s broken it’s always half past eleven
On the night I committed that crucial mistake
Hell is designed to torment the human mind
By violating emotions that’ll never truly heal
Damnation a cruel device when love is blind
Without any light left darkness will slowly kill
God did not want her pain to forever flow
He erased our history underneath a sunset
In her smile happiness has a cosmic glow
She’ll never remember I’m...
Realizing this while in the pits of a fiery lake
My time’s broken it’s always half past eleven
On the night I committed that crucial mistake
Hell is designed to torment the human mind
By violating emotions that’ll never truly heal
Damnation a cruel device when love is blind
Without any light left darkness will slowly kill
God did not want her pain to forever flow
He erased our history underneath a sunset
In her smile happiness has a cosmic glow
She’ll never remember I’m...
#heartbroken
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Fading Away Our Love (collab with Fia Naturie)
I knew the end
Before it has started
A cold wind
Freezes my heart
And the pain tears us apart
Always weeping
inside my chest
I had to tell him
I couldn't string this along
Our two hearts were once one
Now only emptiness
I call home
Our time will fade
The end of all today
A blackened sun
Shines my next day
As the stars come out
I want to be with you
But the next day
Realization shows through
We were no good together
You know this to be true
Nothing harder ...
Before it has started
A cold wind
Freezes my heart
And the pain tears us apart
Always weeping
inside my chest
I had to tell him
I couldn't string this along
Our two hearts were once one
Now only emptiness
I call home
Our time will fade
The end of all today
A blackened sun
Shines my next day
As the stars come out
I want to be with you
But the next day
Realization shows through
We were no good together
You know this to be true
Nothing harder ...
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#relationships
#sadness
#tragedy
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13 Comments
Our song made me hide in a taco joint
You called me
your beloved
as your misty
body broke my
reservations
and my granite soul
melted
at your tender
generosity
and the honest way
you wanted me to heal
my heart.
my whole fucking heart
I need you
I walked Savannnah
and found a taco joint
in the middle of a suburb
and our song came on
the muzac speaker
some 1990s
ballad with quavering
voices singing trite
notes to words
that somehow
became a vow
...
your beloved
as your misty
body broke my
reservations
and my granite soul
melted
at your tender
generosity
and the honest way
you wanted me to heal
my heart.
my whole fucking heart
I need you
I walked Savannnah
and found a taco joint
in the middle of a suburb
and our song came on
the muzac speaker
some 1990s
ballad with quavering
voices singing trite
notes to words
that somehow
became a vow
...
#heartbroken
#IMissYou
#love
205 reads
7 Comments
insulted rain~with the talented Indie
intrepid need insults my intelligence
and I succumb to the grief it causes
inside a raging storm of feeling
angry lust insinuates love elsewhere
such a grand feeling
to be titled so
when it usually brings devastating pain
soul stitches threatening to unravel, our love on the line
hurtful knowledge, to love is to hurt
thoughts of us, keep plaguing me
memories of days in the sun
laughing, you're my best friend
Would you recognise my true face
if you could see the scathing aura of my pain?
Or would you call...
and I succumb to the grief it causes
inside a raging storm of feeling
angry lust insinuates love elsewhere
such a grand feeling
to be titled so
when it usually brings devastating pain
soul stitches threatening to unravel, our love on the line
hurtful knowledge, to love is to hurt
thoughts of us, keep plaguing me
memories of days in the sun
laughing, you're my best friend
Would you recognise my true face
if you could see the scathing aura of my pain?
Or would you call...
#heartbroken
#love
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6 Comments
When it's not love no more
Through this life we all will go through somethings, that are necessary for you to understand, that love is a two way street of give and take. For you have to learn how to navigate, through the process of the nonsense of the hurt and pain. That surely will come with confusion and displacement of what, love really is to the deepness of the truth of the heart. ❤️ For sure what you would you rather have in your own life, for wouldn't you want a relationship with a positive, commitment and real consistency to be able to share your life with for better or worse. As it is true that...
#bittersweet
#disappointment
#heartbroken
#regret
#sadness
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Sixes and Sevens
This was the year they should have been walking across stage
Caps and gowns with smiles and cheers all around
This was supposed to be the year they were going to graduate
Instead
We still reel over what happened on that dreadful day
This was the summer they were supposed to spread their wings
Off to adventures, like falling in love or going away on vacation
Some would have been heading to college for higher education
Instead
We’re left wondering with what could have been
No parent should ever have to bury a child ...
Caps and gowns with smiles and cheers all around
This was supposed to be the year they were going to graduate
Instead
We still reel over what happened on that dreadful day
This was the summer they were supposed to spread their wings
Off to adventures, like falling in love or going away on vacation
Some would have been heading to college for higher education
Instead
We’re left wondering with what could have been
No parent should ever have to bury a child ...
#grief
#heartbroken
#memorial
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Mamas Don't
Text
Mama, please don’t leave
Daddy is having a hard time.
He said he can’t look at me
He cries all the time
Text
Mamas don’t usually go
You left me here, just me
Daddy is so angry
I just don’t understand this though
Text
Mama, Why don’t you come home?
Daddy has been gone
He leaves me here a lot on my own
I didn’t ask to be alone
Mama's Text
Baby girl, I’m sorry to say
I didn’t want to tell you when I left that day
I set your...
Mama, please don’t leave
Daddy is having a hard time.
He said he can’t look at me
He cries all the time
Text
Mamas don’t usually go
You left me here, just me
Daddy is so angry
I just don’t understand this though
Text
Mama, Why don’t you come home?
Daddy has been gone
He leaves me here a lot on my own
I didn’t ask to be alone
Mama's Text
Baby girl, I’m sorry to say
I didn’t want to tell you when I left that day
I set your...
#despair
#grief
#heartbroken
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24 Comments
~You are my Golden Spring..
https://youtu.be/6xlMbWc52VI?feature=shared
1.
you bring over this aching
soul .. those very memories
of that youngly budding in
metallic copperish gleams..
the very first sight, in our
rendezvous
of love..
in this eventual eve .. that’s
in some bearing of a seeded
petrichor.. of a rain to be.. you
come and go through my heart
.. leaving just the wetting
tears
why is this...
1.
you bring over this aching
soul .. those very memories
of that youngly budding in
metallic copperish gleams..
the very first sight, in our
rendezvous
of love..
in this eventual eve .. that’s
in some bearing of a seeded
petrichor.. of a rain to be.. you
come and go through my heart
.. leaving just the wetting
tears
why is this...
#heartbroken
#love
#lyrics #ValentinesDay
#lyrics #ValentinesDay
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6 Comments
it may not always be so; (after ee cummings )
it may not always be so; these stone
walls lining castle ruins, where these
fortresses of our heart seem invincible-
in love, their towering turrets a standard’s
base upon these dusty ramparts-
witnessing architecture wed landscape-
supporting our unyielding faith.
it may not always be so; victors
come and go; wars fought and lost-
as much as they are won; should
another champion capture your heart
as I myself have done, your attention
a profession of new-found love-
then, shall it...
walls lining castle ruins, where these
fortresses of our heart seem invincible-
in love, their towering turrets a standard’s
base upon these dusty ramparts-
witnessing architecture wed landscape-
supporting our unyielding faith.
it may not always be so; victors
come and go; wars fought and lost-
as much as they are won; should
another champion capture your heart
as I myself have done, your attention
a profession of new-found love-
then, shall it...
#sadness
#love
#heartbroken #lover
#heartbroken #lover
1066 reads
20 Comments
My Saudade
the pendulum swings
the metronome moves
my heart bleeds for you
my anarchist artist
missing us, and
all what once was
passion destruction
maybe just an illusion
yearning for intimacy
i suppress my urge
preventing myself
from calling you
when solitude
submerges
me and
nothing
matters
anymore
for you, my love
you stripped me bare
and forced me to wear
nothing but vulnerability
for you and only you
i got down on all fours ...
the metronome moves
my heart bleeds for you
my anarchist artist
missing us, and
all what once was
passion destruction
maybe just an illusion
yearning for intimacy
i suppress my urge
preventing myself
from calling you
when solitude
submerges
me and
nothing
matters
anymore
for you, my love
you stripped me bare
and forced me to wear
nothing but vulnerability
for you and only you
i got down on all fours ...
#heartbroken
#love
867 reads
20 Comments
A Love Story
Love ferociously.
Just don't attach.
It's attachment that causes the pain, not the love.It's the desire to own,to keep, that waters the seeds and feeds the weeds of our own discontent.Our own broken heart.
How stupid are we?
Go ahead attach, attach to anything and when detachment arrives we will ache for days,weeks, months and years.Our lives will dissolve in a torrent of tears.We couldn't see that our attachment was stronger than our love.
We are all stupid!
Love, true love, never can and never will be taken from us, even if the...
Just don't attach.
It's attachment that causes the pain, not the love.It's the desire to own,to keep, that waters the seeds and feeds the weeds of our own discontent.Our own broken heart.
How stupid are we?
Go ahead attach, attach to anything and when detachment arrives we will ache for days,weeks, months and years.Our lives will dissolve in a torrent of tears.We couldn't see that our attachment was stronger than our love.
We are all stupid!
Love, true love, never can and never will be taken from us, even if the...
#heartbroken
#love
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11 Comments
What Am I Waiting For?
Waiting for someone,
Who doesn't talk.
Hiding behind,
Writer's block.
I'll brew you up,
Like chicken stock.
I'll be waiting for you;
Watching the clock.
If clocks could watch,
And watches can clock....
I'd add them to my,
Wifi Hotspot.
Open to the public.
I kid you not.
Unfamiliar faces,
And connecting the dots.
I know you well,
But I don't know your thoughts.
Just expressions of strangers,
While I'm on the clock.
You hide in my mind,
As I carefully...
Who doesn't talk.
Hiding behind,
Writer's block.
I'll brew you up,
Like chicken stock.
I'll be waiting for you;
Watching the clock.
If clocks could watch,
And watches can clock....
I'd add them to my,
Wifi Hotspot.
Open to the public.
I kid you not.
Unfamiliar faces,
And connecting the dots.
I know you well,
But I don't know your thoughts.
Just expressions of strangers,
While I'm on the clock.
You hide in my mind,
As I carefully...
#heartbroken
#IMissYou
#loneliness
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4 Comments
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