Heartbroken by Top Critiquers Poems
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heartbroken by top critiquers poems. Poems written by members who have given lots of feedback to other poets this month.
Unable To Forget
I had a vision of her walking across heaven
Realizing this while in the pits of a fiery lake
My time’s broken it’s always half past eleven
On the night I committed that crucial mistake
Hell is designed to torment the human mind
By violating emotions that’ll never truly heal
Damnation a cruel device when love is blind
Without any light left darkness will slowly kill
God did not want her pain to forever flow
He erased our history underneath a sunset
In her smile happiness has a cosmic glow
She’ll never remember I’m...
Realizing this while in the pits of a fiery lake
My time’s broken it’s always half past eleven
On the night I committed that crucial mistake
Hell is designed to torment the human mind
By violating emotions that’ll never truly heal
Damnation a cruel device when love is blind
Without any light left darkness will slowly kill
God did not want her pain to forever flow
He erased our history underneath a sunset
In her smile happiness has a cosmic glow
She’ll never remember I’m...
#heartbroken
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21 Comments
Mr. Woody
Distraught over the belief that his wife was having an affair, Poppa Woody of Canada cut off his own penis & testicles with a kitchen knife in 2016. Unfortunately for him, he lived. Mrs. Woody denied ever having an affair. Since Mr. Woody's sex life hasn't been the same, Mrs. Woody currently seeks men to fulfill her sexual wants and desires. Mr. Woody understands and excepts his wife's lifestyle!
#fiction
#heartbroken
#ignorance
#satirical
#sex
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4 Comments
insulted rain~with the talented Indie
intrepid need insults my intelligence
and I succumb to the grief it causes
inside a raging storm of feeling
angry lust insinuates love elsewhere
such a grand feeling
to be titled so
when it usually brings devastating pain
soul stitches threatening to unravel, our love on the line
hurtful knowledge, to love is to hurt
thoughts of us, keep plaguing me
memories of days in the sun
laughing, you're my best friend
Would you recognise my true face
if you could see the scathing aura of my pain?
Or would you call...
and I succumb to the grief it causes
inside a raging storm of feeling
angry lust insinuates love elsewhere
such a grand feeling
to be titled so
when it usually brings devastating pain
soul stitches threatening to unravel, our love on the line
hurtful knowledge, to love is to hurt
thoughts of us, keep plaguing me
memories of days in the sun
laughing, you're my best friend
Would you recognise my true face
if you could see the scathing aura of my pain?
Or would you call...
#heartbroken
#love
139 reads
6 Comments
Our song made me hide in a taco joint
You called me
your beloved
as your misty
body broke my
reservations
and my granite soul
melted
at your tender
generosity
and the honest way
you wanted me to heal
my heart.
my whole fucking heart
I need you
I walked Savannnah
and found a taco joint
in the middle of a suburb
and our song came on
the muzac speaker
some 1990s
ballad with quavering
voices singing trite
notes to words
that somehow
became a vow
...
your beloved
as your misty
body broke my
reservations
and my granite soul
melted
at your tender
generosity
and the honest way
you wanted me to heal
my heart.
my whole fucking heart
I need you
I walked Savannnah
and found a taco joint
in the middle of a suburb
and our song came on
the muzac speaker
some 1990s
ballad with quavering
voices singing trite
notes to words
that somehow
became a vow
...
#heartbroken
#IMissYou
#love
260 reads
7 Comments
Made just made for two
They say that what's in the darkness eventually, it's seen through the lights of day, for sure it holds true when things, in a relationship starts to feel different with no emotions or love 🤨 For the deepness of what love was, it wasn't no more, than empty moments of what is gone between two people once in love. But yet it's here and in full bloom, that it's over when the heart becomes, heavier and uncomfortable with inner pain that goes deeper than deep. Yet it was built on love and honor and respect, but even that slowly disappeared into, the deepness of the darkness. Replace by...
#bittersweet
#heartbroken
#hope
#love
#sadness
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~You are my Golden Spring..
https://youtu.be/6xlMbWc52VI?feature=shared
1.
you bring over this aching
soul .. those very memories
of that youngly budding in
metallic copperish gleams..
the very first sight, in our
rendezvous
of love..
in this eventual eve .. that’s
in some bearing of a seeded
petrichor.. of a rain to be.. you
come and go through my heart
.. leaving just the wetting
tears
why is this...
1.
you bring over this aching
soul .. those very memories
of that youngly budding in
metallic copperish gleams..
the very first sight, in our
rendezvous
of love..
in this eventual eve .. that’s
in some bearing of a seeded
petrichor.. of a rain to be.. you
come and go through my heart
.. leaving just the wetting
tears
why is this...
#heartbroken
#love
#lyrics #ValentinesDay
#lyrics #ValentinesDay
166 reads
6 Comments
choker
Poetry died
the day you left me:
you robbed me of
all my beautiful words
and lavished them
on some pretty girl.
You decorated her
with the stolen verses
that my heart
had sung for you.
Now all I do is paint-
paint myself with tears;
even the color is pale-
artless work on a broken canvas.
Why don't you take away
my pearly tear drops:
string them together
to make a choker;
a souvenir-
to gift her
when you choke her heart too!
.
the day you left me:
you robbed me of
all my beautiful words
and lavished them
on some pretty girl.
You decorated her
with the stolen verses
that my heart
had sung for you.
Now all I do is paint-
paint myself with tears;
even the color is pale-
artless work on a broken canvas.
Why don't you take away
my pearly tear drops:
string them together
to make a choker;
a souvenir-
to gift her
when you choke her heart too!
.
#betrayal
#breakup
#heartbroken #love
#heartbroken #love
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8 Comments
Mamas Don't
Text
Mama, please don’t leave
Daddy is having a hard time.
He said he can’t look at me
He cries all the time
Text
Mamas don’t usually go
You left me here, just me
Daddy is so angry
I just don’t understand this though
Text
Mama, Why don’t you come home?
Daddy has been gone
He leaves me here a lot on my own
I didn’t ask to be alone
Mama's Text
Baby girl, I’m sorry to say
I didn’t want to tell you when I left that day
I set your...
Mama, please don’t leave
Daddy is having a hard time.
He said he can’t look at me
He cries all the time
Text
Mamas don’t usually go
You left me here, just me
Daddy is so angry
I just don’t understand this though
Text
Mama, Why don’t you come home?
Daddy has been gone
He leaves me here a lot on my own
I didn’t ask to be alone
Mama's Text
Baby girl, I’m sorry to say
I didn’t want to tell you when I left that day
I set your...
#despair
#grief
#heartbroken
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24 Comments
My Saudade
the pendulum swings
the metronome moves
my heart bleeds for you
my anarchist artist
missing us, and
all what once was
passion destruction
maybe just an illusion
yearning for intimacy
i suppress my urge
preventing myself
from calling you
when solitude
submerges
me and
nothing
matters
anymore
for you, my love
you stripped me bare
and forced me to wear
nothing but vulnerability
for you and only you
i got down on all fours ...
the metronome moves
my heart bleeds for you
my anarchist artist
missing us, and
all what once was
passion destruction
maybe just an illusion
yearning for intimacy
i suppress my urge
preventing myself
from calling you
when solitude
submerges
me and
nothing
matters
anymore
for you, my love
you stripped me bare
and forced me to wear
nothing but vulnerability
for you and only you
i got down on all fours ...
#heartbroken
#love
883 reads
20 Comments
Sixes and Sevens
This was the year they should have been walking across stage
Caps and gowns with smiles and cheers all around
This was supposed to be the year they were going to graduate
Instead
We still reel over what happened on that dreadful day
This was the summer they were supposed to spread their wings
Off to adventures, like falling in love or going away on vacation
Some would have been heading to college for higher education
Instead
We’re left wondering with what could have been
No parent should ever have to bury a child ...
Caps and gowns with smiles and cheers all around
This was supposed to be the year they were going to graduate
Instead
We still reel over what happened on that dreadful day
This was the summer they were supposed to spread their wings
Off to adventures, like falling in love or going away on vacation
Some would have been heading to college for higher education
Instead
We’re left wondering with what could have been
No parent should ever have to bury a child ...
#grief
#heartbroken
#memorial
257 reads
9 Comments
Closing Time
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xGytDsqkQY8
Last drinks shouts the tender
drink em up
it's time to be out
I need to get home
so sip the last of your beer
slam down the last shots
head toward the outside
the chill of the night
fought off by the incoherence of
alcohols numb
the wisps of the smoke machine swirls
and clings like sad fog
to the crusted carpets
where booze and blood
bile and tears have stained my memories
with exquisite times and the haunted agony
of a thousand-thousand poets ...
Last drinks shouts the tender
drink em up
it's time to be out
I need to get home
so sip the last of your beer
slam down the last shots
head toward the outside
the chill of the night
fought off by the incoherence of
alcohols numb
the wisps of the smoke machine swirls
and clings like sad fog
to the crusted carpets
where booze and blood
bile and tears have stained my memories
with exquisite times and the haunted agony
of a thousand-thousand poets ...
#bittersweet
#frustration
#heartbroken
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3 Comments
Where's Daddy?
No lumpenproletariat allowed,
or even old fashioned non-combatants,
to survive the new killing fields plowed
by techno-feudal targeting patents
designed for destruction block by block,
instead of soldiers duel by duel,
until depleting its carpet bomb stock
or the bombers run out of noxious fuel.
Yet still the algorithm looks for him
until the mission is declared complete
when something like a special cryptonym
sends troops to search each mortuary street,
since daddy may have eluded the bomb...
which made kibble out of the...
or even old fashioned non-combatants,
to survive the new killing fields plowed
by techno-feudal targeting patents
designed for destruction block by block,
instead of soldiers duel by duel,
until depleting its carpet bomb stock
or the bombers run out of noxious fuel.
Yet still the algorithm looks for him
until the mission is declared complete
when something like a special cryptonym
sends troops to search each mortuary street,
since daddy may have eluded the bomb...
which made kibble out of the...
#heartbroken
#shame
#despair
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6 Comments
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