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Bcause HomeSweet H o m....
poomfotoby:DanozaonFrAugu31,2012at10:35am
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[font=Georgia]no o n e came home
no one
sat to dinner (or a n y
sus'tainence),
so
'the home' kinda
p e rh aps
just evapor'ated as
brick'n'[font=Courier New]mortar
plasterboard
sh e e trock
d r ywall
will all
ways do when left
so
unattended.......
I (yeah, eye'aye!)
came
back to The Sea (o,thank g'odd
there was no
where Else to go begoing begone!)
to
finally 'see' it, it's finiteternity
gently(or not)
slapping 'my' broke
disconscious......thee 'one'
tha t
was never here
t'begin
wit[h][/font][/font]
mmmmmmmdkzk31aug2012nnnnnnn
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[font=Georgia]no o n e came home
no one
sat to dinner (or a n y
sus'tainence),
so
'the home' kinda
p e rh aps
just evapor'ated as
brick'n'[font=Courier New]mortar
plasterboard
sh e e trock
d r ywall
will all
ways do when left
so
unattended.......
I (yeah, eye'aye!)
came
back to The Sea (o,thank g'odd
there was no
where Else to go begoing begone!)
to
finally 'see' it, it's finiteternity
gently(or not)
slapping 'my' broke
disconscious......thee 'one'
tha t
was never here
t'begin
wit[h][/font][/font]
mmmmmmmdkzk31aug2012nnnnnnn
Published 31st Aug 2012
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Anonymous
1st Sep 2012 2:56am
"Slapping my 'broke'
disconscious"
oh, good one!!
disconscious"
oh, good one!!
1st Sep 2012 4:03am
1st Sep 2012 1:07pm
I like how the 'sh' of sheet following 'evapor'ated' conveys a quiet disintegration. All those letters scattered from each other are just like those odd pieces of wood or rope the tide drags up onto the sand; fragments of old fishing ships (I pick the good ones up and keep them). And it made me smile that you 'came back' to the sea, as if to say a long time ago that was where we started, and that's where it'll finish all adrift from any motionless idea of home.
1st Sep 2012 2:08pm
Love the way ye read this.
i
love hearin'bout what eye roted,
bcause i, as a myself, seem
t'be kindalike
disconscious of it, (whatever 'it' is)
thank ye for bein of 'the precious few'
who dare 'drop in' for a read of
'my' disconsciousness, let alone com'ent...
peace'n'blissings, dear
i
love hearin'bout what eye roted,
bcause i, as a myself, seem
t'be kindalike
disconscious of it, (whatever 'it' is)
thank ye for bein of 'the precious few'
who dare 'drop in' for a read of
'my' disconsciousness, let alone com'ent...
peace'n'blissings, dear
1st Sep 2012 5:13pm
And in addition to 'disconscious' (a wonderful term) we have 'finiteternity'
(even more). Yes, what Merda said. (One of my top fav writers here by the way.)
So disirrational I'm starting to have doubts about your diagnosis.
(Then it could just be those extra sodium and magnesium ions they got
floating around down there.) Profound stuff, though, I hasten to add:
not as profound as pimples. :)
(even more). Yes, what Merda said. (One of my top fav writers here by the way.)
So disirrational I'm starting to have doubts about your diagnosis.
(Then it could just be those extra sodium and magnesium ions they got
floating around down there.) Profound stuff, though, I hasten to add:
not as profound as pimples. :)
1st Sep 2012 7:27pm
"doubts about....diagnosis"
haha....
das goot one,too (thee ol'1-2punch)
glad these last few found a few marks...very rare for whatever-is-left-of-'me' indeed....
wit pimples ye gots thee eXtra profun'ditty of
when ye squeeze'em, they squirt
nexbesthing to e'jackle'atin'
haha....
das goot one,too (thee ol'1-2punch)
glad these last few found a few marks...very rare for whatever-is-left-of-'me' indeed....
wit pimples ye gots thee eXtra profun'ditty of
when ye squeeze'em, they squirt
nexbesthing to e'jackle'atin'
