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Between Hurricanes
There's nothing romantic
about dying together.
There are those minutes
where one goes first,
leaving the other to suffer
the agony of what they loved most
is gone.
Staring at the corpse
of love removed,
and then waiting their turn.
Morbid then; I'd want you
to die before me.
Your pain would cease first
and it would bleed into me,
as I held you tightly.
I'd then die doubly weighted,
with our goodbyes
and emotions turmoiled.
And that's okay.
I'd cross my arms
over my chest
and hold you inside myself.
So when I see you again,
the abundance would pour
back into you,
for our second life.
Like these times between visits.
This one, between hurricanes.
-It's okay, I promised you
God doesn't want me yet.
I saw you off, with a star,
the brightest one, on the left.
It's to show me
what I have to live for.
During this "another test",
I focus on what's to come.
But isn't every day a hurricane
when you're not with me?
Yes.
Two days of aftermath...
My neighborhood is a din
of saws and hammers.
Some locations have
no drinking water.
Some, flooded,
with bad water.
There was devastation, and deaths.
So we watch for our neighbors
to open their front doors.
Peeking out, as their sighing blends
with the last traces of wind.
Our flat smiles acknowledging
we made it yet again.
A neighbor and I
meet in the road,
taking turns surveying
the surrounding damage.
I guess we'll be busy a bit.
Yes, but right now
we're just catching our breath.
She asked about you
and I told her that you're safe;
Went home three days ago.
I didn't want to explain,
that I wasn't ready
to lose you to a hurricane.
So it was best to lose you
to the typical circumstance
of your faraway life,
for another while.
I gave you a star,
but it's for me
to focus on.
Like a light on the horizon.
It shines through everything.
As the sun here gets shy
and the moon gets scared,
as earth tears itself apart;
Unfortunate that
they don't have the strength
of my heart.
~~~
Author's Note
Two hurricanes in about a month's time. The Milton one was worse here. A little damage to my place, and to my truck. But those are repairable.
A ten day visit with Del, literally in between the storms. And hey, Del, what's that shiny thing on your finger?! What!
I love you!
A ten day visit with Del, literally in between the storms. And hey, Del, what's that shiny thing on your finger?! What!
I love you!
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Re. Between Hurricanes
OMG, I spotted that right away. Congratulations. (This is the time I am bouncing around)
Okay now that I have calmed down. The poem shows how much you care even with all the devastation around you. It does not distract the heart.
Okay now that I have calmed down. The poem shows how much you care even with all the devastation around you. It does not distract the heart.
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 1:46am
Thank you Fia.
With all the negative in the world, it's best to hold tightly to what is positive. And that's what I do!
With all the negative in the world, it's best to hold tightly to what is positive. And that's what I do!
Re. Between Hurricanes
21st Oct 2024 2:09am
Powerful write, Styxian. Congrats to you and Del. I'm glad you guys are ok, and that you weathered the storm. Into the list this belongs. Appreciate you.
DL
DL
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 1:49am
Thank you, DL.
I've dealt with lots of adversity over my years. It's time to have some reward! She's that.
Nothing bad will last, when we think positive. Life is good!
I've dealt with lots of adversity over my years. It's time to have some reward! She's that.
Nothing bad will last, when we think positive. Life is good!
Re. Between Hurricanes
21st Oct 2024 2:13am
First of all, let me say that I’m glad both of you are safe and still with us.
Secondly, CONGRATS to both of you! Your covert announcement made my night. I couldn’t be happier for you guys.
Your poem tore at my heart, Styxian.
Nobody wants to think of death, especially the death of the person who occupies your heart. When faced with circumstances like Milton you’re forced to see things for what they are and how fortunate the two of you are to have found each other.
Cool title, btw. I think it’s perfect.
Secondly, CONGRATS to both of you! Your covert announcement made my night. I couldn’t be happier for you guys.
Your poem tore at my heart, Styxian.
Nobody wants to think of death, especially the death of the person who occupies your heart. When faced with circumstances like Milton you’re forced to see things for what they are and how fortunate the two of you are to have found each other.
Cool title, btw. I think it’s perfect.
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 1:57am
It's much appreciated, Mary.
So many people suffered much worse than I did. So I don't complain for my minor issues. But, it was a hell of a storm(Milton). (Helene wasn't too bad for this area, but it messed up North Carolina bad).
I have a couple of elderly neighbors who refused to evacuate, one is from Poland and she is a stubborn woman! I felt compelled to stick around for them too.
Del is the sunshine that will always succeed.
So many people suffered much worse than I did. So I don't complain for my minor issues. But, it was a hell of a storm(Milton). (Helene wasn't too bad for this area, but it messed up North Carolina bad).
I have a couple of elderly neighbors who refused to evacuate, one is from Poland and she is a stubborn woman! I felt compelled to stick around for them too.
Del is the sunshine that will always succeed.
Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:11am
That you stayed for your neighbors…
To me,
That
Says everything about your character.
Del may be the sunshine, but you are the rays. At this point, you’re part of each other, equally blinding in your altruism.
Have a fantastic night.
To me,
That
Says everything about your character.
Del may be the sunshine, but you are the rays. At this point, you’re part of each other, equally blinding in your altruism.
Have a fantastic night.
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 3:43am
Well hell, wow. That's quite a comment.
They're both older widows. One is from Poland, and still doesn't trust hardly anyone American.
The other is from England. Both have very thick accents. Both are ornery as hell. And they also do not currently get along. Lol. They both live alone and feed the stray cats, etc. I think they're trying to bribe the cats to like them better than the other one. Lol.
The rest of the street was deserted during Milton. I felt obligated to keep an eye out for looters, and also to assist my foreign neighbors! One called me like seven times during the storm, just to talk to someone. It's cool.
One day I'm going to be old as them. I hope I have at least one neighbor who has empathy.
Thank you Mary. That was awesome of you...
They're both older widows. One is from Poland, and still doesn't trust hardly anyone American.
The other is from England. Both have very thick accents. Both are ornery as hell. And they also do not currently get along. Lol. They both live alone and feed the stray cats, etc. I think they're trying to bribe the cats to like them better than the other one. Lol.
The rest of the street was deserted during Milton. I felt obligated to keep an eye out for looters, and also to assist my foreign neighbors! One called me like seven times during the storm, just to talk to someone. It's cool.
One day I'm going to be old as them. I hope I have at least one neighbor who has empathy.
Thank you Mary. That was awesome of you...
Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 3:47am
Re. Between Hurricanes
21st Oct 2024 2:18am
Hey sweetie!!
I have a gigantic smile on my face.
You used the pic!!
hahaha
I did just barely miss the storm but my time with you was magic.
It went by so fast.
Too fast!!
The way you tied this together with my visit and the hurricane - fantastic writing:)
Neither of us is going anywhere for a long time. I just found you!
We got some loving and writing to do my love.
I love you too:)
I have a gigantic smile on my face.
You used the pic!!
hahaha
I did just barely miss the storm but my time with you was magic.
It went by so fast.
Too fast!!
The way you tied this together with my visit and the hurricane - fantastic writing:)
Neither of us is going anywhere for a long time. I just found you!
We got some loving and writing to do my love.
I love you too:)
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:03am
You are the greatest total of a woman in the entire world. You were before I met you. I'm the lucky guy who gets to cherish that fact, and to remind you. Every day.
Re. Between Hurricanes
21st Oct 2024 2:20am
wowee congratulations dearest Styxian and Adelphina on your nuptials and weathering the storms thrown at you my husband was just talking about how he doesn't want to live alone if I went first he would be heartbroken it's beautiful your love for this lovely lady...❤️
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:06am
Thanks a bunch!
The thing is, of course the surviving one will be heartbroken. I never want to break Del's heart. So I guess she has to go first! Is that bad?
In the meantime, her and I have plenty of life to live. It's already a blast.
The thing is, of course the surviving one will be heartbroken. I never want to break Del's heart. So I guess she has to go first! Is that bad?
In the meantime, her and I have plenty of life to live. It's already a blast.
Re. Between Hurricanes
21st Oct 2024 3:15am
OMG you guys are a fucking fairy tale and I am SO here for it!!! 😃🥳💫 There's beauty and hope and love in the world after all... I couldn't be happier for you. Just WOW. ❤️❤️
Wonderful writing, as always....
And I'm glad you're ok. The storms didn't come up my way this time, we've had a very quiet season.
Congratulations again!!! Damn. 😊
❤️k
Wonderful writing, as always....
And I'm glad you're ok. The storms didn't come up my way this time, we've had a very quiet season.
Congratulations again!!! Damn. 😊
❤️k
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:11am
Hey you! Thank you for that.
I never stop believing in the good of people, number one. Maybe most just get overly cautious and let love pass them by. Neither Del or me were "looking" either. It was our humor that broke the ice, etc. People have to be happy to be in love. And we are definitely that.
And fuck Milton. I wasn't going to die by anything named Milton! I couldn't have that on my grave stone!
I never stop believing in the good of people, number one. Maybe most just get overly cautious and let love pass them by. Neither Del or me were "looking" either. It was our humor that broke the ice, etc. People have to be happy to be in love. And we are definitely that.
And fuck Milton. I wasn't going to die by anything named Milton! I couldn't have that on my grave stone!
Re. Between Hurricanes
Anonymous
21st Oct 2024 3:37am
Wow, that ending. So beautiful. Glad everything is at least mostly okay.
And congratulations to both of you. Awesome couple.
And congratulations to both of you. Awesome couple.
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:17am
The ending is my favorite part. If nothing else, I'm stubborn and resilient!
And I really appreciate the "awesome couple" line. Because we are! We have so much goofiness and playful attitudes, it makes life much easier to deal with. Wit is a huge turn on. She's my match!
Lol
And I really appreciate the "awesome couple" line. Because we are! We have so much goofiness and playful attitudes, it makes life much easier to deal with. Wit is a huge turn on. She's my match!
Lol
Re. Between Hurricanes
21st Oct 2024 5:11am
Dear S,
So many things to be thankful for, not least of which your safety. I’d comment on the poem but the picture and the news have overridden that. You do realize there will need to be live footage of whatever you plan when you plan it. We’re all going to need to be part of the ceremony. I wish you both every happiness and decades of poetry and wonderfulness. Best wishes and congratulations! H🌷😘❤️
So many things to be thankful for, not least of which your safety. I’d comment on the poem but the picture and the news have overridden that. You do realize there will need to be live footage of whatever you plan when you plan it. We’re all going to need to be part of the ceremony. I wish you both every happiness and decades of poetry and wonderfulness. Best wishes and congratulations! H🌷😘❤️
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:26am
Thank you H.
Actually, I have a really crazy plan for the wedding...LOL. Del said okay, as long as we do it proper on the first anniversary. Fair enough! So we will see if it goes that way.
And, I'm thankful every day. One of my sayings is "Assume the good". Things just happen sometimes. How we recover is what makes us who we are.
She's truly a blessing. I guess I have DUP to thank for that.
And people like you, who encourage consistently, which kept me from leaving DUP. Yes really.
So thank you!
Actually, I have a really crazy plan for the wedding...LOL. Del said okay, as long as we do it proper on the first anniversary. Fair enough! So we will see if it goes that way.
And, I'm thankful every day. One of my sayings is "Assume the good". Things just happen sometimes. How we recover is what makes us who we are.
She's truly a blessing. I guess I have DUP to thank for that.
And people like you, who encourage consistently, which kept me from leaving DUP. Yes really.
So thank you!
Re. Between Hurricanes
21st Oct 2024 6:55am
very beautiful poem...your love stands firm even in the midst of a storm...your love for Del is very transparent and profound. I am happy that two people can still love so deeply, which is hardly possible in this era...i felt your emotion through your words..your words touched my heart... i pray that you both stay together forever and all your wishes come true...
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:34am
Aww what a great comment, Dimpy.
Love is out there for everyone. I think though, that people become too guarded and don't take the chances, even when they feel that the value is there.
Our values gives us our integrity.
And my wish already came true. Now it's time to work on that forever part.
Thank you for the sweet comment.
Love is out there for everyone. I think though, that people become too guarded and don't take the chances, even when they feel that the value is there.
Our values gives us our integrity.
And my wish already came true. Now it's time to work on that forever part.
Thank you for the sweet comment.
Re. Between Hurricanes
21st Oct 2024 1:36pm
Goosebumps !
Running down my legs as I read this powerful statement of loss and love.
True love
Sometimes best second time around.
Congratulations 🎊
Just WOW
BIGGEST LIKE
RL AWARD
Running down my legs as I read this powerful statement of loss and love.
True love
Sometimes best second time around.
Congratulations 🎊
Just WOW
BIGGEST LIKE
RL AWARD
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:47am
Hey thanks dude!
Who would have predicted this, when her and I joined DUP. Not us! Life has its funny turns sometimes. It helps that her and I both are brave souls.
Thank you Gary. Take it easy!
Who would have predicted this, when her and I joined DUP. Not us! Life has its funny turns sometimes. It helps that her and I both are brave souls.
Thank you Gary. Take it easy!
Re. Between Hurricanes
21st Oct 2024 3:59pm
'' Morbid then; I'd want you
to die before me.
Your pain would cease first
and it would bleed into me,
as I held you tightly.
I'd then die doubly weighted,
with our goodbyes
and emotions turmoiled. ''
The epitome of love.
This entire deliverance...epic
Much respect Naaj
to die before me.
Your pain would cease first
and it would bleed into me,
as I held you tightly.
I'd then die doubly weighted,
with our goodbyes
and emotions turmoiled. ''
The epitome of love.
This entire deliverance...epic
Much respect Naaj
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:50am
His you doing Naaj?
I really appreciate that comment. I know my theme gets repetitive frequently, in this regard. But, it's kinda obvious why! But I do try to add some unique spin to it. So thanks for the feedback.
I keep trying to write stuff worth reading.
I really appreciate that comment. I know my theme gets repetitive frequently, in this regard. But, it's kinda obvious why! But I do try to add some unique spin to it. So thanks for the feedback.
I keep trying to write stuff worth reading.
Re. Between Hurricanes
21st Oct 2024 7:49pm
There is so much in this that speaks of the most beautiful, selfless aspects of love. This kind of love is the dream. Congratulations to you both! 💍🎉
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:55am
Hiya Willow.
I only know how to love all in. It took her to allow me to get it right. It's pretty great to write about my actual reality and not just creative myths.
And thank you for the props. Writing means a lot to me. It's my walker for my wobbly life. If it can bring some joy to others, then that's the bonus.
I hope you are well and kicking some ass!?
I only know how to love all in. It took her to allow me to get it right. It's pretty great to write about my actual reality and not just creative myths.
And thank you for the props. Writing means a lot to me. It's my walker for my wobbly life. If it can bring some joy to others, then that's the bonus.
I hope you are well and kicking some ass!?
Re. Between Hurricanes
22nd Oct 2024 2:39pm
You do write the most beautiful love poems. Congratulations on your engagement.
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 2:57am
Maybe by writing about it, it helps steer it home. Like a wish?
I thank you sincerely for that, btw.
I thank you sincerely for that, btw.
Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 00:11am
Congratulations! I told her I wanted pics of the nuptials! This is a beautiful write, Styxian. Looks like she was the Eye of the Storm bringing calmness to it all.
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
23rd Oct 2024 3:02am
Ha! Her, calm? She's a hoot! We both have a playful nature, so life is easy on our psyche.
Like I told Honoria, I have a crazy idea for the wedding. So we will see what happens. All I know is the future is awesome!
Thank you for the kind words, too. I appreciate the support of my writing, and stuff!
Like I told Honoria, I have a crazy idea for the wedding. So we will see what happens. All I know is the future is awesome!
Thank you for the kind words, too. I appreciate the support of my writing, and stuff!
Re. Between Hurricanes
24th Oct 2024 1:42pm
As someone who lives in The Netherlands and has only seen tornados on television, I can only imagine how scary and devastating it is. Makes you think about the fragility of life - and death...
What a brilliant piece this is, a true love poem. That third stanza is simply stunning, made me take pause.
Also: you guys are enaged??? CONGRATS you TWO (you should see the smile on my face)
What a brilliant piece this is, a true love poem. That third stanza is simply stunning, made me take pause.
Also: you guys are enaged??? CONGRATS you TWO (you should see the smile on my face)
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Re. Between Hurricanes
27th Oct 2024 1:51am
???? Where'd you go?
Well I appreciate your awesome commnet. And hopefully you return...
Well I appreciate your awesome commnet. And hopefully you return...
Re. Between Hurricanes
3rd Nov 2024 00:31am
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
WHAT?!
Just.... EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!
Styx? My bro?! You did the thing?
Oh right, the poem. It was gorgeous, but not half as gorgeous as your FIANCE?! OMG! OMG! OMG!
Congrats. If anyone deserves the depth of love, the challenges and beauty and chaos of it alll.. it's you two.
Glad you made it.
From more than the hurricane, my brother. Glad you made it.
WHAT?!
Just.... EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!
Styx? My bro?! You did the thing?
Oh right, the poem. It was gorgeous, but not half as gorgeous as your FIANCE?! OMG! OMG! OMG!
Congrats. If anyone deserves the depth of love, the challenges and beauty and chaos of it alll.. it's you two.
Glad you made it.
From more than the hurricane, my brother. Glad you made it.
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Re: Re. Between Hurricanes
10th Nov 2024 8:55pm
Thanks you.
A couple of hurricanes have a way of bringing things into perspective. Live life in the direction of happiness, right?! It seems to have found us!
I hope you have faired well through the crazy mother nature temper!
A couple of hurricanes have a way of bringing things into perspective. Live life in the direction of happiness, right?! It seems to have found us!
I hope you have faired well through the crazy mother nature temper!