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Winter's Prose
In autumn's glow, the world begins to rest
And amber leaves descend in weathered flight
The summer's heat now finds a gentler quest
As chilly winds chase the lingering light
The trees, donning their robes of ember gold
Stand sentinel against the waning sun
Their branches reach with tales of seasons old
While shadows stretch as days are nearly done
The air is crisp, a breath of frost and pine
As harvests yield their bounty to the earth
The twilight hours in muted hues align
And nightfall's calm descends with tranquil mirth
In autumn’s arms, we find a soft repose
A fleeting peace before the winter's prose
And amber leaves descend in weathered flight
The summer's heat now finds a gentler quest
As chilly winds chase the lingering light
The trees, donning their robes of ember gold
Stand sentinel against the waning sun
Their branches reach with tales of seasons old
While shadows stretch as days are nearly done
The air is crisp, a breath of frost and pine
As harvests yield their bounty to the earth
The twilight hours in muted hues align
And nightfall's calm descends with tranquil mirth
In autumn’s arms, we find a soft repose
A fleeting peace before the winter's prose
Written by
Ahavati
(Tams)
Published 9th Sep 2024
Author's Note
Struggling attempt at a Sonnet ( hopefully ) imitating MidnightSonneteer and Rew for the "Imitation is the sincerest form of Battery" comp by HadesRising, also for MsLaCarte, who seems to have disappeared from these hallowed pages. . .dammit.
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Re. Winter's Prose
9th Sep 2024 00:07am
so very beautiful I liked the idea of the trees dressed just such a beautiful piece 💕
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9th Sep 2024 00:31am
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9th Sep 2024 00:38am
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9th Sep 2024 00:28am
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9th Sep 2024 00:31am
If you're referring to counting syllables on my fingers, then yes! I am! As far as the emphasis - I was totally lost and merely guessed! lolol
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9th Sep 2024 00:37am
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9th Sep 2024 00:41am
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9th Sep 2024 00:42am
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9th Sep 2024 00:51am
Close enough.
It's best to think of metering syllables as a suggestion rather than a Nazi policy:)
It's best to think of metering syllables as a suggestion rather than a Nazi policy:)
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Re. Winter's Prose
9th Sep 2024 00:34am
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It felt more like blood, sweat and tears, but thank you, my friend. And for the RL Honor. <3
Re. Winter's Prose
9th Sep 2024 1:48am
It's autumn already. How time flies. I feel it in your poem, Ahavati. Makes me shiver a bit. 🙂
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Re: Re. Winter's Prose
9th Sep 2024 2:19pm
Thank you, Grace. Time does fly indeed, and it was a very cool 58° this morning! I loved it! <3
Re. Winter's Prose
9th Sep 2024 3:03am
This is a lovely write, Tams. I think you did quite well with this attempt at a sonnet. Into the list it belongs. Appreciate you.
DL
DL
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Re: Re. Winter's Prose
9th Sep 2024 2:20pm
Thanks, Damian! "Attempt" is definitely the right word! I swear most forms give me a headache! Thank you for the RL honor, much appreciated.
Re. Winter's Prose
9th Sep 2024 5:33am
Dear A,
Well done! Great subject, lovely meter. So many pretty autumn images I throughly enjoyed this uplifting write and wish you all the best for this comp.
H🌷
Well done! Great subject, lovely meter. So many pretty autumn images I throughly enjoyed this uplifting write and wish you all the best for this comp.
H🌷
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Re: Re. Winter's Prose
9th Sep 2024 2:21pm
Thank you, Honoria! <3 I am an autumn baby and love this time of year. Thank you for the RL honor. xo
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9th Sep 2024 8:06pm
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10th Sep 2024 00:09am
Re. Winter's Prose
15th Sep 2024 12:06pm
I really enjoyed this dense and formal poem, it shows a more classical side to your work. The imagery was exquisite.
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Re: Re. Winter's Prose
15th Sep 2024 12:17pm
Thanks, Mr. Karswell. It's a discipline but expands a poet's ability. Your notations are appreciated.
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20th Sep 2024 3:43am
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20th Sep 2024 12:17pm
Thank you somuch, Jackie! and for the RL Honor. Deeply appreciated as you are. xo
Re. Winter's Prose
24th Sep 2024 10:47pm
A beautiful tribute to the season. Imagery is excellent. It is a lovely sonnet. And you know how much I love a rhyme:) I truly appreciate the last line...A fleeting peace before the winter's prose. The seasons change far too quickly now.
Bless,
Mel
Bless,
Mel
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24th Sep 2024 11:59pm
Thank you so much, Mel. Yes, you are definitely a rhyme master, so I deeply appreciate your observations on this piece.
The holiday season approacheth!
xo
The holiday season approacheth!
xo
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30th Sep 2024 2:33pm
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1st Oct 2024 7:01pm
Amazing work Ahavati, worthy of a 1st place win in the comp. And yes, MS is a master at that form.
Congrats on the win.
Congrats on the win.
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2nd Oct 2024 00:08am
Thank you very much, Wally! Your observations are greatly appreciated and thank you for the RL honor. xo
Re. Winter's Prose
12th Oct 2024 10:02am
Such a beautiful piece :) I love reading you. Reading you really helps me grow as a poet myself. I truly admire your gift. This is so easy to literally see and experience :)
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12th Oct 2024 3:35pm
Re. Winter's Prose
A sonnet! Very good. I have tried on occasions to write a sonnet with a structure such as this, and it’s not at all straightforward. So I congratulate you on a good write. Pentameter throughout too, I do believe, although my scansion skill doesn’t extend to knowing if it’s iambic or no. The end rhyme scheme gives the impression of happening naturally, which is good and difficult to achieve. Good autumnal/winteryimagery. My only minor nitpick would be the lack of punctuation, but the lacking is consistent throughout; so it’s all good :)
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23rd Oct 2024 10:58pm
Thanks, SeaCat! Yep, I probably should've gone with the punctuation, being that a sonnet is a traditional form; however, I'm so used to writing free verse it never occurred to me to add it! Good catch and I'm happy you enjoyed the imagery.