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To be one with someone and then to be with none. I went through that. Good read MrAlptraum.

Glad you could relate. :)
Thanks, Grace.

I really love this! To finally tear down all those walls and let someone in, just to be left with nothing but ruble. Heart wrenching.

Glad you loved it Rachel, I only liked it a bit. :P
Thank you for your thoughts!

I love this, so simple yet hard hitting. :)

Only one thing regarding flow. With the last phrase, I'd have it exactly the same was the one above, so instead of...
"You're everywhere inside of me
and nowhere."

"You're everywhere inside of me
and nowhere to be seen."
Would be harder hitting, and further emphasise what you're saying. IMO it just feels like you cut off the ending.

Peace, Indie

Well, Miss Indie(so many capitals),
Originally I had it almost exactly how you just wrote it, but I kicked it around a bit and preferred it this way. A little more emphasis on the 'nowhere'.
It was short and maybe a little too much edam but I liked it.
Thanks for your keen eye and nice words.

that was extraordinary; both the reading and the poem itself.

Why thank you Ophi. Thought my voice was a bit dark for such a poem. Glad you liked it.

I have to agree with Oph.

Simply perfect. The audio compliments it beautifully.

Perfect's a bit extravagant, but thank you violet.

I must say, I really liked this writing but I loved it with the reading and have re visited it more than once ;) well done

Thank you Milky. Glad you liked it. Don't listen to it too much though, I'll believe you really liked it then. :)

Goodness. That's a vocal instrument to treasure there.

I can only echo what others have said really. It's a little gem. Short and sweet. Hard hitting in all the right places. The repetition of certain words adds an air of certain impact. Well done.

Thank you, Missy. Thought you'd like the audio.
So again thank you for the compliments!

OMG, you should record death metal!

\m/

That's exactly what the girlfriend says. \m/ :-?

Haha, she's right!
 
\m/ = devil horns

I know what \m/ means. :? = a nonsensical emoticon(in my world only).

What a great little poem, gracing me with pure substance.

wow check this relic out getting attention. kinda wierd but here we are.

glad you liked it