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wanted to smell pleasure
the train speed
was gaining
I was being pushed
from behind
his breathing
was hurting my back
my soft moans and
shivering paws
was making marks
on the glass.
n at the end
the brook
came to play
on my chubby thigh...
was gaining
I was being pushed
from behind
his breathing
was hurting my back
my soft moans and
shivering paws
was making marks
on the glass.
n at the end
the brook
came to play
on my chubby thigh...
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Re. wanted to smell pleasure
23rd Mar 2024 7:43am
A dramatic putting of the ever frantic moments before imminent ejaculation - "the brook came to play on my chubby thigh"
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25th Mar 2024 4:06am
Re. wanted to smell pleasure
23rd Mar 2024 12:09pm
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25th Mar 2024 4:06am
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25th Mar 2024 4:07am
Re. wanted to smell pleasure
23rd Mar 2024 1:53pm
Re. wanted to smell pleasure
24th Mar 2024 3:17pm
Choo, choo train is running
Faster down the track
Locomotive steaming
Forward and then back
Power steam is pulsing
To drive the wheels around
The whistle now is blowing
Release is quickly found
Faster down the track
Locomotive steaming
Forward and then back
Power steam is pulsing
To drive the wheels around
The whistle now is blowing
Release is quickly found
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Re: Re. wanted to smell pleasure
25th Mar 2024 4:05am
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25th Mar 2024 8:07am
Re. wanted to smell pleasure
24th Mar 2024 5:09pm
She was given what she got...!
Peaches and cream scent. I like the brook can be two streams merged together.
Peaches and cream scent. I like the brook can be two streams merged together.
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Re. wanted to smell pleasure
Choo Choo while you are enjoying orgasmic bliss over and over again. Keep on writing.
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Re. wanted to smell pleasure
4th Apr 2024 3:37am
Re: Re. wanted to smell pleasure
4th Apr 2024 3:46am
Re. wanted to smell pleasure
4th Apr 2024 1:00pm
I love the train reference in that it sets the rhythm with pulse pounding anticipation, and the use of some strong anchoring words like pushed, hurting, and shivering really bring it to life as you finish with an imaginative metaphor. I really liked this poem.
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Re: Re. wanted to smell pleasure
4th Apr 2024 3:56pm
Thank you very much for coming by n reading me... N credit goes to my artist.. : )
Re. wanted to smell pleasure
6th Apr 2024 2:22am
Lovely word play.
"n at the end
the brook
came to play
on my chubby thigh'
Fia xoxo
"n at the end
the brook
came to play
on my chubby thigh'
Fia xoxo
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6th Apr 2024 2:47am
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6th Apr 2024 5:45pm
Re. wanted to smell pleasure
9th Apr 2024 4:03am
your ink captures the intensity and urgency of a charged, intimate encounter.
your poem is a powerful and unflinching exploration of physical intimacy, capturing the raw, unrestrained nature of desire and passion. your language and imagery creates a truly immersive and visceral reading experience.
your poem is a powerful and unflinching exploration of physical intimacy, capturing the raw, unrestrained nature of desire and passion. your language and imagery creates a truly immersive and visceral reading experience.
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9th Apr 2024 12:22pm
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