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2024
I know what my spirit says
Look how far you’ve come
and all you've done.
Still, shadows lick my feet.
I know I’m blessed.
But what I really wish
is for blessings to be commonplace.
An everyday occurrence
for each human to experience.
I've seen those suffering
while seeking direction
—gazing out the window
from an office cubicle
pretending to be content
with a noose around their neck.
Staring endlessly
into traversing clouds
beyond whatever assignment
is reminding them
their needs don’t matter
against the bottom line.
I want to disable the elevator
disconnect the Wi-Fi
apologize for the cruelty
of corporate greed
squeezing their life dry.
I want to look them in the eyes
so they can see the sincerity
and possibility of their desires
and the importance of Be-ing alive.
I want to rip the system apart
burn every faction of spite and hate
that divides us as a nation.
Serve deportation papers
to the shadows
tell them they’ve been dismissed
by our inner Light.
I want an apology
for every broken promise
made by our government
to the huddled masses
who arrived from teeming shores
for the American dream.
I want to dig up every grave
containing the remains
of our forefathers
and beat clarity
from their corpse’s lips
till all that's left
of their broken bones and teeth
is love, imprinted on the future
of this country.
I want to finish this life
—despite being a single drop
in an endless ocean—knowing
I was at least part of a multitude
of drops trying to make a difference.
Not just for myself but everyone else.
~
Look how far you’ve come
and all you've done.
Still, shadows lick my feet.
I know I’m blessed.
But what I really wish
is for blessings to be commonplace.
An everyday occurrence
for each human to experience.
I've seen those suffering
while seeking direction
—gazing out the window
from an office cubicle
pretending to be content
with a noose around their neck.
Staring endlessly
into traversing clouds
beyond whatever assignment
is reminding them
their needs don’t matter
against the bottom line.
I want to disable the elevator
disconnect the Wi-Fi
apologize for the cruelty
of corporate greed
squeezing their life dry.
I want to look them in the eyes
so they can see the sincerity
and possibility of their desires
and the importance of Be-ing alive.
I want to rip the system apart
burn every faction of spite and hate
that divides us as a nation.
Serve deportation papers
to the shadows
tell them they’ve been dismissed
by our inner Light.
I want an apology
for every broken promise
made by our government
to the huddled masses
who arrived from teeming shores
for the American dream.
I want to dig up every grave
containing the remains
of our forefathers
and beat clarity
from their corpse’s lips
till all that's left
of their broken bones and teeth
is love, imprinted on the future
of this country.
I want to finish this life
—despite being a single drop
in an endless ocean—knowing
I was at least part of a multitude
of drops trying to make a difference.
Not just for myself but everyone else.
~
Written by
Ahavati
(Tams)
Published 9th Dec 2023
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9th Dec 2023 5:47pm
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10th Dec 2023 4:16am
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I've been trying to think of what to say to you that wouldn't rip you a new asshole ( being a Scorpio that comes naturally to me regarding spiteful, vindictive behaviour ); however, this didn't bother me, and that was perplexing.
Here's the thing, you know I am not keen on Trump nor will ever vote for him. Yet, you get personal in the forum thread ( which I ignored ), shadowed me in the quote forum ( which I ignored ), now invade my personal space under the guise of liking a poem ( and it is a guise ).
I'm asking myself why that doesn't bother me. Then I realized that it's expected behaviour from those with your mindset ( disrespectful, seeking confrontation, etc ). It's all over the news daily from MAGA followers; therefore, it's not surprising.
Then I asked myself what I should do about it because boundaries. I view these personal profiles our homes and am very respectful while in them. Something you obviously lack. So, to prevent you from further embarrassing yourself with tactless behaviour, I feel its best to block you.
I have no doubt, given your past pattern of behaviour, that such will only increase during the 2024 election year. You're welcome in my forum threads and competitions; however, this place is my personal space, and being I've never mentioned Biden or any other candidate, you'll not be mentioning Trump again.
Not here, anyway.
Here's the thing, you know I am not keen on Trump nor will ever vote for him. Yet, you get personal in the forum thread ( which I ignored ), shadowed me in the quote forum ( which I ignored ), now invade my personal space under the guise of liking a poem ( and it is a guise ).
I'm asking myself why that doesn't bother me. Then I realized that it's expected behaviour from those with your mindset ( disrespectful, seeking confrontation, etc ). It's all over the news daily from MAGA followers; therefore, it's not surprising.
Then I asked myself what I should do about it because boundaries. I view these personal profiles our homes and am very respectful while in them. Something you obviously lack. So, to prevent you from further embarrassing yourself with tactless behaviour, I feel its best to block you.
I have no doubt, given your past pattern of behaviour, that such will only increase during the 2024 election year. You're welcome in my forum threads and competitions; however, this place is my personal space, and being I've never mentioned Biden or any other candidate, you'll not be mentioning Trump again.
Not here, anyway.
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12th Dec 2023 1:35pm
Daaaamn, that was the coldest beatdown I’ve seen since Enter the Dragon! Great response, Aha, wise and fair. xxx
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12th Dec 2023 6:00pm
It's really sad that people have been enabled to act in such an entitled way as to push themselves and their beliefs on others.
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9th Jan 2024 5:00pm
OMG...I just wrote my first comment on your poetry not ten minutes ago only to come across this elegant rebuke of that child of darkness. And you did it so smoothly, so beautifully. Me? I'm the rip-em-a-new-asshole type.
Once again you show me how to turn the other cheek while maintaining your integrity, your boundaries.
Lovely to know that being an old guy approaching 80 that I still have so much to learn and that when the student is ready, the teacher appears.
Rock on!
Once again you show me how to turn the other cheek while maintaining your integrity, your boundaries.
Lovely to know that being an old guy approaching 80 that I still have so much to learn and that when the student is ready, the teacher appears.
Rock on!
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9th Jan 2024 11:50pm
Thanks! I'm a fixed sign; it takes A LOT to push me to something like the above. Strike three and they're out. Though depending on the offense, it's been strike one before. Are you new? I haven't seen you around before. You may be 80 but your energy level is young and mind astute. Now I need to find this comment! I don't have a notification for any!
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10th Dec 2023 11:26pm
This is so passionate. Raw.
Love: "Still, shadows lick my feet."
Also: "I've seen those suffering
while seeking direction
—gazing out the window
from an office cubicle
pretending to be content
with a noose around their neck."
Feels like there's a show - Corporate America - and a partition separating from reality, and the partition can easily be toppled, revealing what's really there.
Love: "Still, shadows lick my feet."
Also: "I've seen those suffering
while seeking direction
—gazing out the window
from an office cubicle
pretending to be content
with a noose around their neck."
Feels like there's a show - Corporate America - and a partition separating from reality, and the partition can easily be toppled, revealing what's really there.
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12th Dec 2023 12:59pm
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12th Dec 2023 00:30am
The last couple of verses are great, and the poem as a whole is reminiscent of such great free verse poems on humanity and society as “Dinosauria, we” by Charles Bukowski. You really capture something of the human struggle for purpose and meaning here.
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16th Dec 2023 11:30pm
I feel the poem comes both from the splancha, the guts - as well as from the rational mind. It's a balanced mix where desire and pragmatism meet, hopefully in a holy and mutually supportive alliance. We need both and I like rhe way the poem captures this essential mix.
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3rd Jan 2024 10:03am
Exactly. The way our society has become it has taken the true meaning out of being alive.
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3rd Jan 2024 7:41pm
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9th Jan 2024 4:54pm
This poem says so much more than it seems to say which is a left-handed compliment or even a kind of definition of what poetry, really good poetry, is like. I read your comments on Alviola's fine poem the other day and I was struck with that shock of recognition they speak of: omg, a mentor, teacher, guide, example, spirit-filled, love on the loose.
You sing a song of love, dear Ahavati. And is not that the inner meaning of your name? TY.
You sing a song of love, dear Ahavati. And is not that the inner meaning of your name? TY.
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9th Jan 2024 11:52pm
Ah! Here's the comment! Alviola's poetry is one of the more unique offerings here at DU. It has the feel of an old master with a modernized touch. I really enjoy reading his whenever I have the time. I'm 64 and never stop learning! I am sure if I'm blessed to live to 80 I will still be learning each day.
Welcome to DU and thank you for sharing your observations!
Welcome to DU and thank you for sharing your observations!
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10th Jan 2024 2:38am
Been here over a thousand days but have been gone for the better part of a year dealing with a massive PTSD overload. My head is somewhat above water now and the poetry is beginning to flow again. I have close to 50 poems now, but nearly all of them need tweaking if not more.
Alviola is the real deal. Tremendous heart. He emailed me when I was in my doldrums, checking up on me. I consider him my brother.
Alviola is the real deal. Tremendous heart. He emailed me when I was in my doldrums, checking up on me. I consider him my brother.
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23rd Jan 2024 8:18am
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Anonymous
5th Feb 2024 2:04am
Wow Ahavati, so many great lines causing ripples of emotions. I see your talent keeps on flowing from within you. Great ink that has me at speechless. Good to see your beautiful smiling avatar. RL for me. Purple luv & hugs 💜
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6th Feb 2024 1:05am
Hey, Flowered One! So good to see you back around. Thanks so much for taking the time to comment. Purple luv & hugs right back a'cha, sweet lady! 💜