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The dance
The blade ripped along the seam of my dress, approaching my skin but never penetrating
My attire was now reduced to a garter belt and stockings
Guests’ gasps were silenced with lavish refills
Your glance summoned and the knife was traded for a rose
I freed the remains of the slashed garment binding my black spike heels
My flowing long hair was insufficient to cover the nudity
Delicate music commenced and the room accompanied us in dance after our first twirl
You whispered, “I always take what I want”
My attire was now reduced to a garter belt and stockings
Guests’ gasps were silenced with lavish refills
Your glance summoned and the knife was traded for a rose
I freed the remains of the slashed garment binding my black spike heels
My flowing long hair was insufficient to cover the nudity
Delicate music commenced and the room accompanied us in dance after our first twirl
You whispered, “I always take what I want”
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Re. The dance
17th Jan 2023 10:15pm
Re. The dance
17th Jan 2023 10:27pm
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18th Jan 2023 2:54am
Re. The dance
This is very provocative leaving the imagination to fill in the naughty bits. Your skill as a scribe is superb.
I had to come back and enjoy this write again.
I had to come back and enjoy this write again.
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Re: Re. The dance
18th Jan 2023 2:59am
Hi RFT,
Yes and there are many naughty bits for the imagination!
Wow, about the superb skills!
It’s a charging comment,
Thank you!
Yes and there are many naughty bits for the imagination!
Wow, about the superb skills!
It’s a charging comment,
Thank you!
Re. The dance
18th Jan 2023 00:01am
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18th Jan 2023 3:00am
Re. The dance
18th Jan 2023 5:54am
I echo ReallyFatTroll - "very provocative leaving the imagination to fill in the naughty bits". She sounds a woman of confidence to have that happen with an audience.
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Re: Re. The dance
18th Jan 2023 10:02pm
Hi Solomon!
Yes, I agree! Much confidence!
I’m exited you share the comment finding this provocative. I like suggesting enough where one’s imagination can fill in their own naughty bits! Thank you for your comment, and including in your reading list. 🙏
Yes, I agree! Much confidence!
I’m exited you share the comment finding this provocative. I like suggesting enough where one’s imagination can fill in their own naughty bits! Thank you for your comment, and including in your reading list. 🙏
Re. The dance
18th Jan 2023 7:07am
Dear NG,
There is a mesmerizing seduction in this write that captures the imagination and then the heart. By the last line I was ready to hand over all my worldly possessions for one more dance.
H🌷
There is a mesmerizing seduction in this write that captures the imagination and then the heart. By the last line I was ready to hand over all my worldly possessions for one more dance.
H🌷
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Re: Re. The dance
18th Jan 2023 10:06pm
Honoria hello!
I just want you to know I love all your comments! They always make me smile!
“Mesmerizing seduction,” thank you!
Handing over your worldly possessions! lol
Seriously, you light up the room!
Thank you!
I just want you to know I love all your comments! They always make me smile!
“Mesmerizing seduction,” thank you!
Handing over your worldly possessions! lol
Seriously, you light up the room!
Thank you!
Re: Re. The dance
18th Jan 2023 10:09pm
Yes, right!
I had a vampire type in mind but maybe for another write.
Thank you, Robert!
I had a vampire type in mind but maybe for another write.
Thank you, Robert!
Re. The dance
19th Jan 2023 4:29pm
So sexy,
Ah the blade so wants to penetrate. But can't blame it. ;)
Reduced to a garter belt and stocking,
I am sure that reduced others to maddening desire.
Lavish refills leading to an expression of affection.
The site of a naked goddess in black spike heels is irresistible.
Such a passionate dance with vivid imagery...
It's always so exciting when someone takes what they want,
giving you what you need...
Seductive and tempting indeed.
(a Vampire type, oooo I can definitely see that... mesmerizing you into doing anything,
and so ready to sink his teeth into you...)
Ah the blade so wants to penetrate. But can't blame it. ;)
Reduced to a garter belt and stocking,
I am sure that reduced others to maddening desire.
Lavish refills leading to an expression of affection.
The site of a naked goddess in black spike heels is irresistible.
Such a passionate dance with vivid imagery...
It's always so exciting when someone takes what they want,
giving you what you need...
Seductive and tempting indeed.
(a Vampire type, oooo I can definitely see that... mesmerizing you into doing anything,
and so ready to sink his teeth into you...)
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Re: Re. The dance
19th Jan 2023 5:22pm
Yes! I think this would reduce the on lookers to maddening desire! Solomon commented about confidence. Good point. I think she has the confidence, just as much as her suitor, more so in fact. As you observed, “Seductive and tempting indeed!” Can I offer you a refill? A provocative thank you!
Re. The dance
21st Jan 2023 7:03am
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22nd Jan 2023 2:25am
Hi DC!
Yes, a little fear and apprehension, but in the end, desire! Thank you so much!
Yes, a little fear and apprehension, but in the end, desire! Thank you so much!
Re. The dance
25th Jan 2023 8:06pm
That you don't try to cover up while you dance, displays your confidence. By peeling back your "layers" exposing you, the act also makes you realize you are comfortable within your own skin.
A trust, bond is between you both (allowing the knife so close). They are happy to show you off and you regal in being shown off.
A trust, bond is between you both (allowing the knife so close). They are happy to show you off and you regal in being shown off.
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25th Jan 2023 8:56pm
Hello Leo!
Wow, you said it perfectly!
Yes, there was an extreme confidence and an intense trust exuded in an appearingly surprising situation. So much so that the guests accepted it as well.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Very insightful!
Wow, you said it perfectly!
Yes, there was an extreme confidence and an intense trust exuded in an appearingly surprising situation. So much so that the guests accepted it as well.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Very insightful!
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13th Feb 2023 2:44am
Re. The dance
18th Feb 2023 3:19am
Envious as I find it hard to be concise in my attempts at poetry. The images in my brain are so very vivid.
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18th Feb 2023 11:48pm
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20th Feb 2023 7:30pm
Re. The dance
23rd Feb 2023 6:37pm
Loved the visual, the setting, the mood. It's a titillating preview of something more to come.
Great work.
Great work.
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24th Feb 2023 4:38am