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Sanctity
There was something sacred
about the sex we had
our bodies anointed with sweat
when you over me
skin on skin
we were two beautiful beings
sculpting love
with our limbs
Your body moving upon mine
like waves crashing against the land
Your breaths' whispers
like songs of yearning
echoing in conch shells
to return to the sea. . . untamed and wild
Ripples of ecstasy ebbing and flowing
moving high and low
as we went devouring each other
the sweetness of our lips and mouth
tasted salt
salt - reminiscent of the sea
together You and Me
constructing... deconstructing
rising and falling
the ever flow
Of love from me to you
from you to me
while we made love
just like the sea
...by the sea
about the sex we had
our bodies anointed with sweat
when you over me
skin on skin
we were two beautiful beings
sculpting love
with our limbs
Your body moving upon mine
like waves crashing against the land
Your breaths' whispers
like songs of yearning
echoing in conch shells
to return to the sea. . . untamed and wild
Ripples of ecstasy ebbing and flowing
moving high and low
as we went devouring each other
the sweetness of our lips and mouth
tasted salt
salt - reminiscent of the sea
together You and Me
constructing... deconstructing
rising and falling
the ever flow
Of love from me to you
from you to me
while we made love
just like the sea
...by the sea
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Re. Sanctity
6th Sep 2022 4:26pm
This is a beautiful piece of erotica and we love how you incorporated nature into it. There is a reason where couples vacation at the beach. The sites and sounds are an aphrodisiac in themselves, tight work Lady
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6th Sep 2022 9:30pm
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6th Sep 2022 4:27pm
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6th Sep 2022 9:31pm
I'm so glad you loved it... I was wondering if I should post it... Thanks for your kind support, dear Ron 😊🌹
Re. Sanctity
6th Sep 2022 4:39pm
Wow, art and love poem
Super erotic and lovely painting
Very impressive
BIG LIKE
Super erotic and lovely painting
Very impressive
BIG LIKE
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Re: Re. Sanctity
6th Sep 2022 9:33pm
Thanks a lot, dear PS. So happy that you liked both my poem as well as art work. It's such a big honour getting such great response from an awesome artist 😊😊😊🌹
Re. Sanctity
6th Sep 2022 6:41pm
Dear ID,
Very eloquent write. Your analogous approach between love and nature was great. Your artwork is equally great. I enjoyed its support of your poem. Elegant, and lovely. H🌷
Very eloquent write. Your analogous approach between love and nature was great. Your artwork is equally great. I enjoyed its support of your poem. Elegant, and lovely. H🌷
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Re: Re. Sanctity
6th Sep 2022 9:34pm
Thanks a bunch, dear Honoria. Love your very encouraging words of appreciation. I'm all over the moon now. 😊😊😊
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Re: Re. Sanctity
6th Sep 2022 9:35pm
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6th Sep 2022 7:37pm
I agree with I IS ME's comment that the sounds and sights of the beach can be an aphrodisiac (hence the popularity of seaside honeymoons and marital holidays) and your poem fits into the atmosphere.
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6th Sep 2022 9:36pm
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6th Sep 2022 10:53pm
Lovey use of ocean/salt/wet metaphor, which grows stronger with each repetition until in the end a tsunami washes over the landscape of love.
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7th Sep 2022 10:19am
Thanks a lot for sharing your lovely thoughts on this piece. I very much appreciate you stopping by. Much thanks 😊🥀
Re. Sanctity
8th Sep 2022 00:09am
I love how the erotic wording was completely related to the sea life. What a beautiful way to look at it. Thanks for sharing this.
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8th Sep 2022 4:08pm
So glad you liked this piece of mine😊
Thank you so much for stopping by n leaving kind comments🥀 I'm really honoured by the reading list add 😊
Thank you so much for stopping by n leaving kind comments🥀 I'm really honoured by the reading list add 😊
Re. Sanctity
8th Sep 2022 5:34pm
Just wow InDreamz, an erotic masterpiece. The art is gorgeous and compliments it so perfectly. It's hard to even think of a comment that could express the beauty of your words. Your words flow like the ocean as far as the eye can see and deeper than seems possible. The sea theme is so beautiful. I could smell the purity of the salt in the air. The purest love that brings the most amazing intimacy you could ever experience. Hear the waves crashing and feel the sand caressing the feet and bodies. The cold water turning to steam as it embraces hot bodies, experiencing every contrast of sensations imaginable. The whispering song of the breath. Constructing and deconstructing, that truly represents this incredible coming together of bodies and soul. You can be anything together, go anywhere... Drowning in each other forever. I am totally in awe of the astounding beauty of this. It is truly magnificent.
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9th Sep 2022 3:01pm
Sorry for the late reponse but i needed time to let that incredibly fascinating review by you to sink in... I read.. reread.... If there is a way I would add your comments to my reading list.... You are not only gorgeous but highly intelligent... You so get me... my thoughts... My poetry.... I'm so just in awe of you... Your analysis is more beautiful than my poem is....
Thank you so much, amazing Kristina ❤ Such high praise coming from a poetess of your calibre is a great honour for me🥀Your each word means a lot to me... Thanks a tonne, sweet poetess🥰
Thank you so much, amazing Kristina ❤ Such high praise coming from a poetess of your calibre is a great honour for me🥀Your each word means a lot to me... Thanks a tonne, sweet poetess🥰
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9th Sep 2022 5:02pm
Your response was definitely worth the wait. :) It is a gift in itself especially if I could put a smile on your beautiful face during a difficult time. 'I would add your comments to my reading list' I absolutely love that. I have never thought of that, it's such a cool idea. But I disagree, my analysis is not more beautiful than the poem and it only exists because of it. :)
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9th Sep 2022 11:06pm
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10th Sep 2022 8:46am
Hoi hoi
From the first letter to the last: lovely and moving poetry.
Beautiful art work too!
Oh…, what can I say that hasn’t been said already?
Thank you!
Kind regards, Gus
From the first letter to the last: lovely and moving poetry.
Beautiful art work too!
Oh…, what can I say that hasn’t been said already?
Thank you!
Kind regards, Gus
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10th Sep 2022 3:12pm
Thank you graciously for your fantastic review... So grateful to you 🌹
Very much appreciate you gracing my page with your kind presence. 😊
Very much appreciate you gracing my page with your kind presence. 😊
Re. Sanctity
20th Sep 2022 8:51pm
That was great. Romance and the sea. Erotic and spiritual, natural without vulgar.
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20th Sep 2022 9:14pm
Wow! So wonderful to see this piece added to your reading list! That's certainly a great honour! Thank you so much for your fantastic review... I'm so over the moon now... Much thanks ❤
Re. Sanctity
11th Oct 2022 9:55pm
Every time I read a poem that I wrote, it makes me travel with my imagination to represent all the seasons and try to imagine the dynamics of each line.
Read your poem, I wrote these lines :
"It's under the softness of your hand
That my body woke up this morning.
It's under the warmth of your fingers
That my den have found this excitement.
It's under the warmth of your tongue,
That my prick has taken on this mango taste.
It's under the stiffness of my manhood,
That pleasure sprung from your femininity.”
A kiss for you queen of sweet poetry
Read your poem, I wrote these lines :
"It's under the softness of your hand
That my body woke up this morning.
It's under the warmth of your fingers
That my den have found this excitement.
It's under the warmth of your tongue,
That my prick has taken on this mango taste.
It's under the stiffness of my manhood,
That pleasure sprung from your femininity.”
A kiss for you queen of sweet poetry
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12th Oct 2022 6:24pm
Great to know that my poem prompted you to pen something so poetic....
Thank you so much for your sweet words, dear poet 🌹
Thank you so much for your sweet words, dear poet 🌹
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12th Oct 2022 6:34pm
I am honored to read your poems, which put me in a state of spiritual ecstasy
I wait for a new poem from you every day.
I have published poems, some of which I wrote old and some new
I am honored that you had the time to read it and give your opinion on what I wrote
Greetings to you, Queen of Poems
I wait for a new poem from you every day.
I have published poems, some of which I wrote old and some new
I am honored that you had the time to read it and give your opinion on what I wrote
Greetings to you, Queen of Poems
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Re. Sanctity
26th Oct 2022 10:23pm
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27th Oct 2022 1:22pm
Thanks a lot, dear poetess 💕
It's been so kind of you to explore my work and leave such encouraging feedback. Thanks a lot 🙏🌹❤
It's been so kind of you to explore my work and leave such encouraging feedback. Thanks a lot 🙏🌹❤
Re. Sanctity
20th Sep 2023 10:02am
👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 absolutely incredible 👏 and very passionately expressed beautiful ink spill queen 👸!!
Please 🙏 keep on writing ✍ ok 👌 peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always 💖
Please 🙏 keep on writing ✍ ok 👌 peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always 💖
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Re. Sanctity
23rd Jan 2024 7:15pm
Beautiful. The wording and the message is breathtaking. Fantastic!
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Re. Sanctity
15th Feb 2024 4:42pm
Sounds like it was a magical night.. I'll think of this poem next time I go by the ocean.
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15th Feb 2024 4:59pm
Oh I'm flattered ....thank you graciously for reading my work.much appreciated 😊
Re. Sanctity
19th May 2024 6:57pm
Gorgeous piece, and your art is amazing, so complimentary. I love the way you start this poem... "There was something sacred about the sex.." because it sets the tone of your piece thematically and also establishes a strong recurrent alliteration that you use throughout. The ocean and lovemaking are frequently used analogously in poetry, but you've brought freshness and novelty to that association. You've captured the essence of the emotional connection that is so often missing with 'love making' - it's a masterful piece of work.
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4th Jun 2024 9:08pm
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Anonymous
18th Aug 2024 3:53pm
Wow 💥💥💥❤️
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Re. Sanctity
25th Aug 2024 5:17pm
Have just reread this poem today. Favourite chunks:
skin on skin
we were two beautiful beings
sculpting love
with our limbs
as we went devouring each other
the sweetness of our lips and mouth
tasted salt
salt - reminiscent of the sea
together You and Me
skin on skin
we were two beautiful beings
sculpting love
with our limbs
as we went devouring each other
the sweetness of our lips and mouth
tasted salt
salt - reminiscent of the sea
together You and Me
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25th Aug 2024 5:20pm
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6th Oct 2024 4:13am
I think I read this one of yours before. I didn't review it perhaps, but I think I read it. I really enjoyed the imagery interwoven into the type of sex you limn within. The ending ended it so well, "just like the sea, by the sea". Very poetic poem and rich in feeling. Again, I think I read this one before. But that shows that it lingers on in my mind. tyfs as always
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6th Oct 2024 10:37am