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Deserted People
Stretching miles of open highway beckon
cactus flowers and needles dotting landscape
we bake nonetheless under sizzling sun
Smoke from the oven dents upon my hood
red ocher, purple and white, craggy formations, tailpipe
we tore that sucker off back a few miles ago
Sands blow ominous billows like smoke
wipers broke hidden engine issue and a windshield crack
sunsets turn pink to twinkling black skies
Pale moon waxing offering comfort, howling coyote
flashlight without batteries, tire dropping down, we pray
stars wink and fall, ones very wish disappears somewhere over cactus shadows
By Souladareatease
1st April 2020
Narrative Poem
Word Play
Stretching miles of open highway beckon
cactus flowers and needles dotting landscape
we bake nonetheless under sizzling sun
Smoke from the oven dents upon my hood
red ocher, purple and white, craggy formations, tailpipe
we tore that sucker off back a few miles ago
Sands blow ominous billows like smoke
wipers broke hidden engine issue and a windshield crack
sunsets turn pink to twinkling black skies
Pale moon waxing offering comfort, howling coyote
flashlight without batteries, tire dropping down, we pray
stars wink and fall, ones very wish disappears somewhere over cactus shadows
By Souladareatease
1st April 2020
Narrative Poem
Word Play
Published 18th May 2022
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18th May 2022 10:36am
18th May 2022 2:19pm
18th May 2022 3:38pm
Oh, this imagery is captivating! I felt I was apart of that journey. This is a beautiful piece of prose. This is almost a descriptive narrative, giving you just enough to fill in the blanks.
19th May 2022 00:37am
18th May 2022 10:41pm
What talent.... *sigh*
I had to read it twice, it was so moving and like a breath of fresh air...🍃
I love how he really basks in such smartly crafted descriptiveness... So clever!! I am in awe of how he came up with the most beautiful ways of 'idea accentuating' without being overly wordy or too busy... It makes for stunning reading. I truly aspire and learn heartily from his example, as that's my total wheelhouse... I just love that style.... - 💞
Thank you for sharing him with us, it's incredibly awesome and meaningful to still be wowed by and introduced to poems I've not read before... Keep 'em coming, dear Grace .... They deserve the daylight!
🌹 - (hugs)
-B
I had to read it twice, it was so moving and like a breath of fresh air...🍃
I love how he really basks in such smartly crafted descriptiveness... So clever!! I am in awe of how he came up with the most beautiful ways of 'idea accentuating' without being overly wordy or too busy... It makes for stunning reading. I truly aspire and learn heartily from his example, as that's my total wheelhouse... I just love that style.... - 💞
Thank you for sharing him with us, it's incredibly awesome and meaningful to still be wowed by and introduced to poems I've not read before... Keep 'em coming, dear Grace .... They deserve the daylight!
🌹 - (hugs)
-B
19th May 2022 00:44am
Hugs dear Blue. Not a day goes by...but then again I will always remember him as he was. And will always be .
Thank you for always being with me. I'm sure Gabe would've loved to connect with you...and he is in a way, through words.
🌹
Thank you for always being with me. I'm sure Gabe would've loved to connect with you...and he is in a way, through words.
🌹
28th May 2022 9:44pm
You paint a beautiful, sorrowful milieu, haunted by his presence and absence. It's good to see your writing sweetheart.
5th Jun 2022 4:29pm
8th Jun 2022 4:44pm
Oh I see at the bottom of course. He was such a beautiful spirit and so talented.
