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Longing
Summer has (almost) come:
windows open, air moving through curtains
billowing like astral clouds in a hurry
to get somewhere.
Shutter-speed quick,
comet flash, streak across
blow-foam walls,
lighting the atmosphere for one nanosecond,
and then the darkness returns
to wrap me in its sweet, breathy embrace.
The deep sounds, the night sounds, have me longing
for Autumn, for that time when death
settles into us, and magic weaves her fingers
around the best of what I am.
windows open, air moving through curtains
billowing like astral clouds in a hurry
to get somewhere.
Shutter-speed quick,
comet flash, streak across
blow-foam walls,
lighting the atmosphere for one nanosecond,
and then the darkness returns
to wrap me in its sweet, breathy embrace.
The deep sounds, the night sounds, have me longing
for Autumn, for that time when death
settles into us, and magic weaves her fingers
around the best of what I am.
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Re. Longing
12th May 2022 3:49am
Amazing how we long for we don't have. Of course for some people Summer is toooooo hot and Winter toooooo cold. But I agree with you in regard to Autumn and witches.
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Re: Re. Longing
12th May 2022 3:55am
Summer is the one season that I do not particularly enjoy. But she needs to rage so I get it. But give me Autumn always.
Thanks for stopping in, Viking.
Thanks for stopping in, Viking.
Re. Longing
12th May 2022 3:59am
Re: Re. Longing
12th May 2022 4:14am
Ummm....thank you? Lol I love nature, so it's pretty easy for me to write about. Thanks, abetter!
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Re: Re. Longing
12th May 2022 4:33am
Summer is too hot for me as well.
It’s me. The photo is about five years old. I think I was 40? Maybe 39.
It’s me. The photo is about five years old. I think I was 40? Maybe 39.
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Re. Longing
12th May 2022 5:38am
Dear E,
All praise and hail Autumn! Each stanza has a beautiful image painted within. While I hate to rush time I’m thinking pumpkins then Christmas. Lovely piece. H🌷
PS love the avatar pic!
All praise and hail Autumn! Each stanza has a beautiful image painted within. While I hate to rush time I’m thinking pumpkins then Christmas. Lovely piece. H🌷
PS love the avatar pic!
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Re: Re. Longing
2nd Jun 2022 4:22am
It’s isn’t even officially Summer yet and I’m already dismayed at 94 degree temps. Like seriously, girl just can’t even wait her turn.
I need cool air and leafy decaying smells. *sigh* I guess it wouldn’t be quite as magical if it were autumn all year long.
I need cool air and leafy decaying smells. *sigh* I guess it wouldn’t be quite as magical if it were autumn all year long.
Re. Longing
12th May 2022 10:20am
Well rendered Eerie...
Completely immersive...
(I am more of a fall person as well...)
Twas hot & humid round here today...
I employed mindfulness & made magic of it, however...
Went moon gazing on the other side of midnight...
Mmm... Channeling the energies of the universe.
(Your avatar is real cool... The braids are antennas.
I too wear braids... At least pre Corona I did... [not a fashion statement]
I been laying low...)
Completely immersive...
(I am more of a fall person as well...)
Twas hot & humid round here today...
I employed mindfulness & made magic of it, however...
Went moon gazing on the other side of midnight...
Mmm... Channeling the energies of the universe.
(Your avatar is real cool... The braids are antennas.
I too wear braids... At least pre Corona I did... [not a fashion statement]
I been laying low...)
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Re: Re. Longing
2nd Jun 2022 4:26am
Moon gazing is indeed quite magical. As I’ve told Honoria, I’m already over the hot weather. If it weren’t for my garden I’d swear off summer altogether.
Re. Longing
12th May 2022 3:15pm
Beautiful ink .. summer has come to rest her heavy heat upon us .. such is her Nature .. although I don't like to wish time away .. cooler Temps are always appreciated... we pretty much went from Winter to summer making the transition even more difficult.
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Re: Re. Longing
2nd Jun 2022 4:28am
It always happens that way though. We never seem to have a proper spring or fall. Although winters have been pretty mild in my neck of the woods, compared to how I remember it as a child.
Re. Longing
13th May 2022 6:15am
Hi Eerie,
So so lovely to read. Your opening few lines just set the tone for me of
movement. Loved it!!!
So so lovely to read. Your opening few lines just set the tone for me of
movement. Loved it!!!
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Re: Re. Longing
2nd Jun 2022 4:29am
Re. Longing
14th May 2022 2:09am
Oh, I do love this poem! It expresses so much of the feelings that I have about the autumn likewise. I used to say, back when I was a teenager, that if it could be autumn all year around, perhaps alternating a bit with only the nicest days of spring, then I would be content all year around. Being strongly pagan in my beliefs, the Samhain season always calls to me very intensely, and there is a certain magic to things in the autumn that feels somewhat absent in certain other times of the year. The fall colors always make me feel like I am in a magical world, too, and it is something that for me is not even equaled by the spring blossoms, which are but a close second to autumn's leaves in terms of beauty. Your poem is simply magnificent! I will be certain to read through your others next. Keep up the beautiful work! :D
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Re: Re. Longing
2nd Jun 2022 4:32am
There is magic in autumn. No doubt about that. Spring usually produces the same for me until about now when the weather is starting to become ridiculous in the heat department. I wasn’t made for summer heat.
Re. Longing
27th Jun 2022 6:49pm
It's one of the reasons I why fall is my favorite (the crisp, clear cool air always reminds me of my freshman year in college). Now where I live, summer average is 106, so it's become my least favorite.
That last stanza packs so much, both metaphorically and spiritually.
Great spill
That last stanza packs so much, both metaphorically and spiritually.
Great spill
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Re. Longing
11th Jul 2022 8:55pm
Your poem has inspired me to write a D&D spell. Thank you for the charge.
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