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a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
The last time,
i thought
i wouldn't notice much
that the air you breathed
was tempered with
distinct
surrender
.. and a dazzling
brightness dimmed,
i muse,
as a honoring
or a bit
of darkened
foreshadowing
My reticence—
(a reserve
of much too polite)
forgetting to say
what I knew
I should have
but didn't.
This time,
though
my redemption
is now tempered
in that
remembered
surrender
again,
aching
with your
loss,
more sweet
than
bitter
as now—
you know.
Written by
Bluevelvete
Published 6th Apr 2021
Author's Note
© Blu2021
Missing friends new and old.... see you soon. 🌹
Missing friends new and old.... see you soon. 🌹
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Anonymous
- Edited 9th May 2021 8:45pm
6th Apr 2021 3:26am
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Re: Re. dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
6th Apr 2021 4:13am
Yes, it's soulful, sweet and sometimes avoided... 'if onlys' are in abundance for me to write... it seems I shy away from being forthright, at times. Learning growing, evolving... I'm a work in progress...for sure. My thanks for your generous list add and your thoughtful sentiments, Claude. I appreciate you and so enjoy your creative positivity.
You're always welcomed here, my new friend
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
-S
You're always welcomed here, my new friend
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
-S
Anonymous
- Edited 9th May 2021 8:45pm
6th Apr 2021 4:30am
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Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
Dear, Lady Blue❣❣ Another beautifully written, melancholy piece that, for some reason, plunges my heart into despair fearing that I am a new friend now missed. I'm right here unmoving and unchanged.
I love the cadence if this stanza,
"my redemption
is now tempered
in that
remembered
surrender"
Do what you need to do to be right with yourself🐻💋🐻🐻💋🐻
I love the cadence if this stanza,
"my redemption
is now tempered
in that
remembered
surrender"
Do what you need to do to be right with yourself🐻💋🐻🐻💋🐻
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Re: Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
6th Apr 2021 5:36am
No worries , BB... You're good.
It was my NoPoo from today, kinda reworked a bit. and it's loosely based in reality but mostly just poetic musings.....Ty for reading, we're all good,my friend. Everyone gets busy, life, work, family etc... and sex is sexy and will always triumph over 'redemption'... of course... I'm so aware.
Again, much thanks for stopping by!
-🐇
It was my NoPoo from today, kinda reworked a bit. and it's loosely based in reality but mostly just poetic musings.....Ty for reading, we're all good,my friend. Everyone gets busy, life, work, family etc... and sex is sexy and will always triumph over 'redemption'... of course... I'm so aware.
Again, much thanks for stopping by!
-🐇
Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
6th Apr 2021 5:39am
Missing ... The holes in my heart and soul yearning to be filled? yeah ... beautiful write ... Bless and love ...
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Re: Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
6th Apr 2021 8:49am
Your comments are so heartfelt... Ohhh my dearest FeNyX... you will heal... time has that magic within... I am so grateful for your thoughtful comments and your cherished support. Your visits leave me smiling, ear to ear.
Ty for taking the time
Much love and respect,
🌹
x
-B
Ty for taking the time
Much love and respect,
🌹
x
-B
Anonymous
- Edited 28th May 2021 4:45am
6th Apr 2021 5:43am
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Re: Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
Hi, Ru
You're absolutely spot on. I wonder how much art has been created on just the premise of 'if only'? Too much to even count, I bet.. it's endless, I'm sure. Your visit brightens my mood, demeanor and even lightens my stressors. Thank you for sharing your thoughtfulness
Always a pleasure ✨
xoxo
💙✨🖤
You're absolutely spot on. I wonder how much art has been created on just the premise of 'if only'? Too much to even count, I bet.. it's endless, I'm sure. Your visit brightens my mood, demeanor and even lightens my stressors. Thank you for sharing your thoughtfulness
Always a pleasure ✨
xoxo
💙✨🖤
Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
6th Apr 2021 6:53am
Re: Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
6th Apr 2021 8:51am
You're a very kind person, Francisco and I thank you wholeheartedly for the poem of the month nomination. I was utterly shocked!
I appreciate your continued support, truly.
🌹
x
I appreciate your continued support, truly.
🌹
x
Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
Beautiful piece gorgeous
The world of "If only"
One of my most visited haunts, fleeting moments slipped through my fingers leaving the bitter taste of regret.
Love and light
Ron xx
The world of "If only"
One of my most visited haunts, fleeting moments slipped through my fingers leaving the bitter taste of regret.
Love and light
Ron xx
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Re: Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
6th Apr 2021 9:09am
My bravest knight,
Your solidarity pulls taught on my heartstrings. A gentle reminder that your soul can be lightened - by knowing that there are untold amounts of joy you helped spread through your writing. Bringing readers excitement, desire and happiness via erotica, is an expertise you can take comfort in, imo. I thank you so much for reading, your amazing open and honest remarks, the list add and your constant supportive nature.
Much love from across the pond ✨ 🌊
🌹
xo
-B
Your solidarity pulls taught on my heartstrings. A gentle reminder that your soul can be lightened - by knowing that there are untold amounts of joy you helped spread through your writing. Bringing readers excitement, desire and happiness via erotica, is an expertise you can take comfort in, imo. I thank you so much for reading, your amazing open and honest remarks, the list add and your constant supportive nature.
Much love from across the pond ✨ 🌊
🌹
xo
-B
Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
6th Apr 2021 7:53pm
Re: Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
6th Apr 2021 9:54pm
Your comments move me, KP. I think there's something about your particular approval that really affects me, so I really do appreciate you visiting as well as your generous list add.
Sincerely,
and in kindness,
-S
🌹
Sincerely,
and in kindness,
-S
🌹
Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
7th Apr 2021 3:35am
Oh Susan this resonated deep my the chambers of my heart. I have lost so many friends and family to the grim reaper. Your poem was the perfect expression of the feeling of loss. You got it exactly right. I felt this through and through.
Xo
John
Xo
John
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Re: Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
7th Apr 2021 4:23am
My heartfelt thanks, John
You perfectly state my intended feelings via your own comments! Wow! I actually do enjoy this one completely, too. It's definitely the deepest part of me that I accessed, here I normally don't go THAT deep and 'm overwhelmed you picked up on it. I am amazed and sincerely appreciative 🙏
Thank you so much for everything, my friend
🌹
x
You perfectly state my intended feelings via your own comments! Wow! I actually do enjoy this one completely, too. It's definitely the deepest part of me that I accessed, here I normally don't go THAT deep and 'm overwhelmed you picked up on it. I am amazed and sincerely appreciative 🙏
Thank you so much for everything, my friend
🌹
x
Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
17th May 2021 6:08pm
Blue, you really have a gift for putting things in perspective with an abundance of word choices in any subject matter. This was delightful as it was captivating. For a second I could imagine flipping through the pages of your poetry book.
Thank you for sharing.
Thank you for sharing.
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Re: Re. a dazzling surrender of redemptive light.
17th May 2021 6:18pm
Hi Walter :)
I am so grateful for your thoughtful comments and opinions. I sometimes get really down on myself which translates to a harsh personal view of my writing skills. Your comments today, came at just the right time; lifting my dark mood. Thanks for unwittingly being that little bit of sunshine for me today.
I am so thankful!
Warmest regards,
🌹-💙
xo
B
I am so grateful for your thoughtful comments and opinions. I sometimes get really down on myself which translates to a harsh personal view of my writing skills. Your comments today, came at just the right time; lifting my dark mood. Thanks for unwittingly being that little bit of sunshine for me today.
I am so thankful!
Warmest regards,
🌹-💙
xo
B