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Beauty Definer Soul Magnifier
LISTEN!
you worthwhile
piece of fine art
ON YOUR KNEES!
and suck on, nay savor
each and every compliment
given you by your Master
OBEY!
your innate goddess tendencies
I will WHIP you
into such a frenzy
of self admiration
I COMMAND
that every morning, without fail,
you rise from your bed,
look in the mirror
and praise
the day you were born
ON YOUR FEET!
you kind, compassionate soul
FEAR ME!
when I say
if you ever cower at
or deign to give credence to
the opinions other's have of you
you will
SUFFER MY WRATH!!
Well I'll be extremely disappointed
And you will betray
the true nature
and purpose of your existence.
*"SO LET IT BE WRITTEN,
SO LET IT BE DONE!!"
*Said by the pharaoh Ramses II, played by Yul Brynner, in the film "The Ten Commandments"
you worthwhile
piece of fine art
ON YOUR KNEES!
and suck on, nay savor
each and every compliment
given you by your Master
OBEY!
your innate goddess tendencies
I will WHIP you
into such a frenzy
of self admiration
I COMMAND
that every morning, without fail,
you rise from your bed,
look in the mirror
and praise
the day you were born
ON YOUR FEET!
you kind, compassionate soul
FEAR ME!
when I say
if you ever cower at
or deign to give credence to
the opinions other's have of you
you will
SUFFER MY WRATH!!
Well I'll be extremely disappointed
And you will betray
the true nature
and purpose of your existence.
*"SO LET IT BE WRITTEN,
SO LET IT BE DONE!!"
*Said by the pharaoh Ramses II, played by Yul Brynner, in the film "The Ten Commandments"
Published 30th Jan 2021
Author's Note
By no means is this a condemnation of the BDSM lifestyle. The piece was born out of a discussion about the lifestyle wherein it was unanimously agreed that I would make a thoroughly inept, comical dom. So I thought I"d riff on that premise and spin my domination style to better suit my raison d'être.
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30th Jan 2021 12:18pm
30th Jan 2021 8:00pm
Dear K, you are awesome to say so. I enjoyed writing this and that you enjoyed the reading validates my efforts. 💖🙏
Dearest B,
I didn't realize that I could smile this wide, until I read your poem this morning. I am loving this! There is something to be said for knowing yourself well enough to know your own strengths and weaknesses. ;) This awesome poetic stroke of genius simply highlights the fact that you're as motivational, kind hearted and attracted to feminine beauty as you are. To dominate in your distinct purpose of goddess worship and all it's splendor, well, yes please! .... like BT said... you nailed it!
😉 hahahaha.... I thoroughly enjoyed this, from beginning to end!
So well penned.
Much love with a lot of giggles,
🌹
xo
B
I didn't realize that I could smile this wide, until I read your poem this morning. I am loving this! There is something to be said for knowing yourself well enough to know your own strengths and weaknesses. ;) This awesome poetic stroke of genius simply highlights the fact that you're as motivational, kind hearted and attracted to feminine beauty as you are. To dominate in your distinct purpose of goddess worship and all it's splendor, well, yes please! .... like BT said... you nailed it!
😉 hahahaha.... I thoroughly enjoyed this, from beginning to end!
So well penned.
Much love with a lot of giggles,
🌹
xo
B
30th Jan 2021 8:08pm
Dear Blue, i a elated, euphoric, and pretty damn happy that you enjoy this piece so thoroughly. You inspire me to new heights. I am doubly pleased that you widely displayed your beautiful, sexy smile and that you, perhaps laughed...one of my biggest turn-ons. 🐻💋💋💋💋🐻
30th Jan 2021 11:43pm
I'm gonna get in line now for this sub. position before it gets too long. :))
Enjoyed this read very much.
Enjoyed this read very much.
31st Jan 2021 2:09am
Well hot damb it's around the block...wsjt, wait...no, sorry that's for falafels. GET IN HERE, NOW! 😄 I am pleased on high that you enjoy this piece...your words of encouragement are priceless to me.
31st Jan 2021 1:37am
First, your formatting is perfect. Sorry if I get all wet and mushy over formatting but my own impatience makes me appreciate it so much. Second, you have such a beautiful heart and soul that shines through in your writing. Any woman would be absolutely blessed to feel being cherished so. It does not matter what other proclivities exist to be loved so completely is a gift rarely received. 🌺🌸🌹💋
31st Jan 2021 6:35am
Wow, Kristina this is so beautiful❣️❣️ Thank you for complimenting the formatting...I actually spent a while trying to get that right. I am touched deeply by your last two sentences. You're amazing, BD🌹
31st Jan 2021 7:19am
I love the way this works pointing at how ridiculous most porn writing fantasises BDSM.
True goddess worship.
Richard
True goddess worship.
Richard
31st Jan 2021 6:24pm
Thank you very much, Richard. Yes, the language of porn tends to be rather simple and formulaic. I am pleased that you enjoy this piece. Thank you for the kind words od encouragement.
31st Jan 2021 4:52pm
I already know your talented pen. I agree with Richard , erotic poetry should be more about the imagination,rather than explicit guttural descriptions of unclothed sex on a page.
The idea of dominance from a distance is very achievable, because, it really depends on the sub, their ability to commit to their own selfish “need” to be objectified and or beaten
Or ignored with punishment, let’s face it, the sub is the true Dom, speaking solely from professional experience. if the slave gets the beating he wants or the objectification he or she may seek and the Dom provides, well then who’s really calling the shots!
Very well written B
Hugs
Jackie xo
The idea of dominance from a distance is very achievable, because, it really depends on the sub, their ability to commit to their own selfish “need” to be objectified and or beaten
Or ignored with punishment, let’s face it, the sub is the true Dom, speaking solely from professional experience. if the slave gets the beating he wants or the objectification he or she may seek and the Dom provides, well then who’s really calling the shots!
Very well written B
Hugs
Jackie xo
31st Jan 2021 6:35pm
Thank you very much, Jackie, for your kind words and your insights into the BDSM world. To me the perfect sub is ham &swiss with a hint of mustard & mayo with a pickle on hhe side. And dom, well the comic stylings of Dom DeLuise. 😄
