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Don't ask
Don’t ask how I’m doing.
I’m better than fine
I’m kicking ass
achieving goals
leading the charge
creating beauty
smiling with pride
at the fruit of my efforts
and also
Suffering the hurts
of lives lost too soon
empathically bleeding
from this pit in my chest
weary of strength
and desire to serve
ungrateful, resentful
and above all
so very, deeply alone
Although both stories are true
I know which one you’d rather hear
It’s the only one I’ll tell.
I’m better than fine
I’m kicking ass
achieving goals
leading the charge
creating beauty
smiling with pride
at the fruit of my efforts
and also
Suffering the hurts
of lives lost too soon
empathically bleeding
from this pit in my chest
weary of strength
and desire to serve
ungrateful, resentful
and above all
so very, deeply alone
Although both stories are true
I know which one you’d rather hear
It’s the only one I’ll tell.
Written by
brokentitanium
(k.)
Published 3rd Jan 2021
| Edited 5th Jan 2021
Author's Note
So many friends and others around me have suffered incredible (non COVID-related) losses this year. I've had it so good, and yet...
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Re. Don't ask
Your poem is just so wonderfully written k.... I loved it's openness and it moved me deeply...Ty for sharing it as well as your poignant author's notes, too. I am hoping there are brighter days ahead in 2021, for you and those you hold dear.
*hugs
xo
🌹
B
*hugs
xo
🌹
B
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5th Jan 2021 2:15am
Thanks for your kindness, Blue - and for the RL add. It was one of those sad, weary days, but I'm much better now. 🙂❤
Re. Don't ask
4th Jan 2021 00:07am
These are challenging times
Stay vigilant is all you can too
Everyone knows someone not so lucky
Quality sentiment and ink
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Stay vigilant is all you can too
Everyone knows someone not so lucky
Quality sentiment and ink
Like
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5th Jan 2021 2:16am
Re. Don't ask
4th Jan 2021 1:59am
On target recognizing the human condition. Excellent.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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5th Jan 2021 2:18am
It's a little bit of everything, isn't it...
Thanks for your comment, and the hugs!
k
Thanks for your comment, and the hugs!
k
Re. Don't ask
4th Jan 2021 2:42pm
I have to remind myself, often, to not play the “they have it worse so I should t feel bad” game. Just because someone has it worse than you doesn’t invalidate your feelings.
Maybe you didn’t need to hear that. Maybe I just needed to say it to myself again.
❤️
Maybe you didn’t need to hear that. Maybe I just needed to say it to myself again.
❤️
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5th Jan 2021 2:21am
I totally agree. The hard thing is that I feel bad on their behalf, but it's not appropriate to seek comfort from the ones who have it worse....
That's why I vent it here. Thanks for your grace and support. ❤
That's why I vent it here. Thanks for your grace and support. ❤
Re. Don't ask
Dear Titanium, i love the complete portrait you painted. Because I have an almost innate aversion to rose-colored glasses, I am interested in knowing both sides. I recall the absolute tragedy that occured in yiur community and I would imagine that will disrupt the peace of mind for a long while land even the highest tree climbed cannot assuage that kind of grief. I'm with you sister❤
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5th Jan 2021 2:25am
Thanks, GW. The air just feels pretty heavy here sometimes, but our sense of community is remarkable. I count myself very lucky, and having supportive friends here makes it even better. ❤
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5th Jan 2021 2:57am
Re. Don't ask
5th Jan 2021 1:32am
The first and second halves have an effectively evocative counterpoint about them. We carry on for those who cannot. 💖🙏
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5th Jan 2021 2:27am
Indeed we do, Daniel. ❤
Thanks so much for your kind comment and understanding.
Thanks so much for your kind comment and understanding.
Re. Don't ask
5th Jan 2021 7:12am
Dear K,
So I’m not asking. I’m just going to send a hug. So many facets to each individual with some shinier than others at times. I find it’s always such a relief when the heaviness lifts and for a few minutes joy prevails. Your write captures both sides of the coin simultaneously and that can be so difficult to do when not feeling cheery yet you’ve done it marvelously. H🌷
So I’m not asking. I’m just going to send a hug. So many facets to each individual with some shinier than others at times. I find it’s always such a relief when the heaviness lifts and for a few minutes joy prevails. Your write captures both sides of the coin simultaneously and that can be so difficult to do when not feeling cheery yet you’ve done it marvelously. H🌷
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5th Jan 2021 11:43am
In hindsight, I was wishing for a different title for this... I do want people to ask how I am, but the fact is they aren't always expecting all sides of the answer! Anyway, it was written in a particular melancholy moment so I'll leave it alone...
Thank you for your kind support of all my facets! ❤
Thank you for your kind support of all my facets! ❤
Re. Don't ask
BTitanium, this intense emotional poignant write echos in my mind. You character is intact and expressed beautifully with this heart warming verse. Your compassion for others conflicting with your own happiness is a testament to your completeness as a beautiful soul, displayed wonderfully in poetry. Beautiful!
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8th Jan 2021 7:18pm
Thank you, Feet! That is a very kind comment. I appreciate your visit and the RL add.
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Anonymous
- Edited 11th Jan 2021 11:29am
11th Jan 2021 11:28am
I was reading a poetry book the other day in which the writer is asked what are they going to do when they finally make it big, to which they reply “allow myself the gift of feeling safe enough to be small”.
We live in a world where vulnerability is seen as weakness sometimes. But what I love about poetry as a whole, is that there is this community of people who are saying Y’know what... vulnerability is a virtue. Personally, I love it when people are real with me. Especially in writing.
If you feel like your world is breaking, don’t push that away. It’s not weakness. It’s purity. Know it. Own it.
Thank you for sharing this thought provoking little mirror, Squee.
-M
We live in a world where vulnerability is seen as weakness sometimes. But what I love about poetry as a whole, is that there is this community of people who are saying Y’know what... vulnerability is a virtue. Personally, I love it when people are real with me. Especially in writing.
If you feel like your world is breaking, don’t push that away. It’s not weakness. It’s purity. Know it. Own it.
Thank you for sharing this thought provoking little mirror, Squee.
-M
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11th Jan 2021 2:41pm
(ohmygosh you really ARE going to keep calling me that! LOL)
Thank you for taking the time to comment. I agree with all that you've said. There is a time to be strong for those who need it, though, which is why I love having this place to come and fall apart - to own my vulnerability, as you put it. I'm so grateful for all of you here.
k
Thank you for taking the time to comment. I agree with all that you've said. There is a time to be strong for those who need it, though, which is why I love having this place to come and fall apart - to own my vulnerability, as you put it. I'm so grateful for all of you here.
k
Re. Don't ask
22nd Jan 2021 11:06pm
The dual life - outward persona and your inner thoughts.
Reminds me of when someone asks, "How are you?" - and their reaction if it isn't, "Great" or something positive along those lines.
Reminds me of when someone asks, "How are you?" - and their reaction if it isn't, "Great" or something positive along those lines.
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23rd Jan 2021 2:36am
Exactly. You nailed it. It's wonderful when you have people you can answer fully... the rest of them only get the happy story. Thanks for stopping by to read and comment!
Re. Don't ask
19th Nov 2022 3:42pm
Many things can be true at the same time
I like how you got
straight to the root of the matter
Much respect
I like how you got
straight to the root of the matter
Much respect
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19th Nov 2022 7:46pm
Thanks so much! Wow, you're way back in the archives here... really appreciate you visiting. 😊
❤️k
❤️k