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"Mini Me"
A term of endearment,
pride in the one who carries
my face, my hair, my sarcasm...
I will never insult you
with this term again
For you have been a force
since the day you first
kicked my ribs
active and fierce
owning your mind and our hearts
laying down laws
You are storm and vinegar
bluntness and bubbles
sparkles and daggers
kindness and secrets
a mystery of poise and grace...
Even from your smallest moments,
you have never been 'mini',
and my beautiful sunshine,
you are so,
so much more
than me.
pride in the one who carries
my face, my hair, my sarcasm...
I will never insult you
with this term again
For you have been a force
since the day you first
kicked my ribs
active and fierce
owning your mind and our hearts
laying down laws
You are storm and vinegar
bluntness and bubbles
sparkles and daggers
kindness and secrets
a mystery of poise and grace...
Even from your smallest moments,
you have never been 'mini',
and my beautiful sunshine,
you are so,
so much more
than me.
Author's Note
Anyway, she's taller than me now so I guess I'm the mini...
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Re. "Mini Me"
26th Jun 2020 2:36am
Powerful, BT! this is an absolutely wonderful poem ( though by it's contents I would contend they are indeed a mini-me )! I am serious. The expression of this observation truly touched me. In many ways, I believe it's a maternal letting go yet keeping an eye on, per se.
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26th Jun 2020 2:45am
Thank you. There's been a lot of letting go lately... sometimes I'm more ready than others.
Re. "Mini Me"
26th Jun 2020 2:46am
Dear B,
A very sweet write and charming descriptive of your “mini” from inception to young adult. Very touching. Always an awesome wonder watching these little beings evolve into themselves with traces of family in the mix.
Really lovely. H🌷
A very sweet write and charming descriptive of your “mini” from inception to young adult. Very touching. Always an awesome wonder watching these little beings evolve into themselves with traces of family in the mix.
Really lovely. H🌷
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26th Jun 2020 2:49am
Thank you! The privilege of helping kids launch into life is utterly humbling.
Thanks for the love on this!
Thanks for the love on this!
Re. "Mini Me"
26th Jun 2020 2:49am
beautiful poetess such an awesome poem for your child
so descriptive she sounds like a force of nature
I love this ❤
so descriptive she sounds like a force of nature
I love this ❤
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26th Jun 2020 2:59am
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28th Jun 2020 4:26pm
Re. "Mini Me"
26th Jun 2020 6:02pm
This is really beautiful and endearing. Love it. Your daughter sounds amazing and I am sure reading this must be such a joy for her. ❤
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28th Jun 2020 4:28pm
Re. "Mini Me"
28th Jun 2020 3:01am
Awww, brokentitanium... I can tell you have SO much love for your daughter ❤️
That is a beautiful thing, truly. It's so sweet and endearing, and shines with the love you hold for her. You're pretty great too, ya'know? She wouldn't be here without you! 😁
Lovely writing, and a beautiful 'dedication'... I bet she wanted to give you a big hug after reading this 😛
That is a beautiful thing, truly. It's so sweet and endearing, and shines with the love you hold for her. You're pretty great too, ya'know? She wouldn't be here without you! 😁
Lovely writing, and a beautiful 'dedication'... I bet she wanted to give you a big hug after reading this 😛
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Re: Re. "Mini Me"
28th Jun 2020 4:30pm
Thank you! She hasn't read it. Relationships with teenagers are... complicated. But I should probably find a way to show her. Thanks for the encouragement. 😊
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28th Jun 2020 4:55pm
I understand :)
Even if she can't fully appreciate it now, I'm confident that one day she will.
Even if she can't fully appreciate it now, I'm confident that one day she will.
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Re. "Mini Me"
28th Jun 2020 6:48am
I'm wondering is this about an alter ego or a sibling or sth else? Whatever it is I admired the paradoxes and the interesting muse and fab descriptions. Kudos !!
Plz pleez do read and comment on my newest poem too.
Plz pleez do read and comment on my newest poem too.
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