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Too Long Gone
Too long gone
A personal, gaping void
So much to say
So many words
Drifting on the bitter smoke
His ill luck thrives
Seems here to stay
And catastrophes abound
The wind blowing him to breakage
The crack of rust resounds
He still whispers to the wind
"Enough. I will prevail.
I have wavered. I have sinned.
But take heed: I will not fail."
A personal, gaping void
So much to say
So many words
Drifting on the bitter smoke
His ill luck thrives
Seems here to stay
And catastrophes abound
The wind blowing him to breakage
The crack of rust resounds
He still whispers to the wind
"Enough. I will prevail.
I have wavered. I have sinned.
But take heed: I will not fail."
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Re. Too Long Gone
30th May 2020 10:43pm
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30th May 2020 11:09pm
Re. Too Long Gone
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30th May 2020 10:47pm
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30th May 2020 11:15pm
I hope you see me more frequently. I feel lost without DUP. Thank you for your kindness, Sky_dancer.
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30th May 2020 11:04pm
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30th May 2020 11:18pm
Re. Too Long Gone
30th May 2020 11:29pm
I love you Thomas hold true my friend...
great write and so good to see you back ❤
great write and so good to see you back ❤
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30th May 2020 11:49pm
And it's so good to be back, Brenda, and I hope for a lengthier stay. With your encouragement it might well be possible. Thank you!
Re. Too Long Gone
30th May 2020 11:40pm
But take heed: I will not fail.
Good Man Sir Crow!!!
You are felt here in our town Citizen Crow...
Needed Always!!!
This Write like so many of Yours has much heart!!!
Good Man Sir Crow!!!
You are felt here in our town Citizen Crow...
Needed Always!!!
This Write like so many of Yours has much heart!!!
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Re: Re. Too Long Gone
30th May 2020 11:52pm
I'm going to try for more emotional content, less frivolity. Thank you my friend.
Re: Re. Too Long Gone
31st May 2020 00:13am
Whatever You Write I follow Crow!!!
But I will say, I've never known You to Write without heart or reason-self-love and self-pain...we crave and we must express however we can.
But I will say, I've never known You to Write without heart or reason-self-love and self-pain...we crave and we must express however we can.
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Re. Too Long Gone
30th May 2020 11:53pm
Great to read you writes again, Crow. All the best, despite life's turbulences. Josh.
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31st May 2020 00:23am
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31st May 2020 00:30am
Oh my, this a a powerful and inspiring write. I feel fortunate to have stumbled my way here. It’s just what I needed today. Thank you
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31st May 2020 1:08am
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31st May 2020 2:33am
Welcome back dear Crowfly. Yes, don't give up and curl away somewhere....fight on. Stay Safe.
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31st May 2020 2:39am
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31st May 2020 3:09am
I have missed you, crowfly. It’s not the same when you’re gone. This is an intimate and steadfast piece. Bravo!
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31st May 2020 2:29pm
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31st May 2020 4:50pm
Welcome back my friend! Please continue sharing, "So many words
Drifting on the bitter smoke." I am inspired and emboldened by your words.
Drifting on the bitter smoke." I am inspired and emboldened by your words.
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Re. Too Long Gone
31st May 2020 11:33pm
Dearest Crow, your name on the top of my update list, puts a smile on my face. It has been far too long, very missed indeed.
This peculiar piece resonates in my current state of mind. Far too many words.
--B
This peculiar piece resonates in my current state of mind. Far too many words.
--B
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Anonymous
1st Jun 2020 3:43am
Hey Crow........great to always seeing you come back to us........very heart tugging ink........glad you’re back......have missed you.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re. Too Long Gone
1st Jun 2020 9:58pm
Crowfly...My Dear Friend....
This piece is truly a tribute to your inner strength of spirit....with words that flow from your very soul!
I am ever soo glad that You have returned to DU! Your poetry has always brought a welcomed, bright beacon of humor and enjoyment to all of us who are gifted by Your talent!!! You have been truly missed!
Welcome Back!!! May You grace us, with your presence for many weeks to come!!!
Keep Safe! Be Well! (((HUGS)))
Enchantress
Welcome Back!
This piece is truly a tribute to your inner strength of spirit....with words that flow from your very soul!
I am ever soo glad that You have returned to DU! Your poetry has always brought a welcomed, bright beacon of humor and enjoyment to all of us who are gifted by Your talent!!! You have been truly missed!
Welcome Back!!! May You grace us, with your presence for many weeks to come!!!
Keep Safe! Be Well! (((HUGS)))
Enchantress
Welcome Back!
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Re. Too Long Gone
1st Feb 2021 5:38pm
"He still whispers to the wind
"Enough. I will prevail.
I have wavered. I have sinned.
But take heed: I will not fail."
~Ah, my precious, strong, A-fukinmazing Warlock.. those last lines make me so proud to love you! aaand-- you are tearing up your witch with shinee eyes, darlin, but i Commend you always on the pour. you know i know, we know.
so much maulins, T2.. feel me blowin magick n healin wishes southernly to reach you♡♡
~T
"Enough. I will prevail.
I have wavered. I have sinned.
But take heed: I will not fail."
~Ah, my precious, strong, A-fukinmazing Warlock.. those last lines make me so proud to love you! aaand-- you are tearing up your witch with shinee eyes, darlin, but i Commend you always on the pour. you know i know, we know.
so much maulins, T2.. feel me blowin magick n healin wishes southernly to reach you♡♡
~T
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