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Oasis
I’ve never sat so close to a flame
and felt less heat than its shadow implies
I’ve never felt such fullness in emptiness
I didn’t need a new scar to help me realize
You are a mirage
an oasis bleeding crystal clear water
sparkling in the distance of my desert
but I see you disappear
Cut too close and I watch you vanish
Pacing back and forth to try to find the line
Where do you go?
All I know is that you do.
and felt less heat than its shadow implies
I’ve never felt such fullness in emptiness
I didn’t need a new scar to help me realize
You are a mirage
an oasis bleeding crystal clear water
sparkling in the distance of my desert
but I see you disappear
Cut too close and I watch you vanish
Pacing back and forth to try to find the line
Where do you go?
All I know is that you do.
Author's Note
I think I hate myself so much that I can’t picture someone else genuinely loving me, caring for me, or even considering me. I’m tired.
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Re. Oasis
23rd Mar 2020 11:18am
wizardmoters, firstly, this is a wonderful piece of poetry in all the ways that poetry matters ( to me ). I honestly have no critique, as I feel it reads perfectly as is. I love the metaphor you selected, and feel it's very powerfully apt.
That being said, and in reference to your author's note, it's something most humans experience, until they experience someone who truly loves them. It's from that contrast of not feeling worthy from love that we appreciate just how much we are, and deserving of such.
Your time will come. Keep walking the line.
That being said, and in reference to your author's note, it's something most humans experience, until they experience someone who truly loves them. It's from that contrast of not feeling worthy from love that we appreciate just how much we are, and deserving of such.
Your time will come. Keep walking the line.
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23rd Mar 2020 10:01pm
thank you so much for the thoughtful comment, and thank you for reading :)
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24th Mar 2020 1:07am
I know what you mean. Our perspective colors everything we experience. It can be very difficult to let anyone close.
Your poem is intriguing and I find myself running over it again, thinking about the nuances of meaning of the metaphors. It is rather organic in its expression and emotion. It's beautiful.
Your poem is intriguing and I find myself running over it again, thinking about the nuances of meaning of the metaphors. It is rather organic in its expression and emotion. It's beautiful.
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30th May 2020 8:19am
Wow ... the power of this ... bold ... vulnerable ... perfectly blended ...
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27th Sep 2020 2:47am
Excellent and expressive poetry, wizard. That author's note makes me want to cry... I hate that you feel that way :(
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16th Jan 2021 10:53pm
Absolutely wonderful! I happened upon u as you were listed as online :) wow happy I did your pen is quite skilled wizardsmotors🤗
Write on ✍️
Zazzles
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Write on ✍️
Zazzles
Listed 👍🏻
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Re. Oasis
The idea of pursuing what you want and not getting it because it's no longer there or attainable happens a lot.
For some unjustifiable reason the seven friends remind me of the seven dwarfs.
As a skeptic there is love but each person decides whether to accept or reject it.
With all due respect to the author's note those sentiments cannot be true.
It would be impossible and implausible for your exquisite features not to cast a spell on the right man.
Wielding your powers with such unassuming modesty and the magic of your wizardry.
For some unjustifiable reason the seven friends remind me of the seven dwarfs.
As a skeptic there is love but each person decides whether to accept or reject it.
With all due respect to the author's note those sentiments cannot be true.
It would be impossible and implausible for your exquisite features not to cast a spell on the right man.
Wielding your powers with such unassuming modesty and the magic of your wizardry.
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8th Oct 2021 4:59pm
Dear, Wizard
This is such a timely poem. In this day aand age of cyber relationships that person on the other end of the line, on that other screen is essentially a mirage and subject to disappearing in a blink. It's hard to recognize true permanance. I know that I hunger for palable, tangible things. The first two lines describe so well the way I feel sometimes. I really like this passage, "I’ve never felt such fullness in emptiness." To me this gives me comfort because it seems Taoist in nature...the art of becoming nothing.
Your Author's comment breaks my heart because it's not true and your poetry is proof. I understand the comment completely because I often feel the same way.
Bravissima Wizard Goddess❣🌹
This is such a timely poem. In this day aand age of cyber relationships that person on the other end of the line, on that other screen is essentially a mirage and subject to disappearing in a blink. It's hard to recognize true permanance. I know that I hunger for palable, tangible things. The first two lines describe so well the way I feel sometimes. I really like this passage, "I’ve never felt such fullness in emptiness." To me this gives me comfort because it seems Taoist in nature...the art of becoming nothing.
Your Author's comment breaks my heart because it's not true and your poetry is proof. I understand the comment completely because I often feel the same way.
Bravissima Wizard Goddess❣🌹
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12th Nov 2021 6:48pm
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13th Jan 2022 10:51pm
You love yourself that others must attract to you to love you to the point that you get wings to go off the ground and fly in the sky high to look down with beautiful oasis. Love your shadow to love others.
I love your expression and contrast in it.
KS
I love your expression and contrast in it.
KS
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19th Jan 2022 7:03am
I am so taken away on an incredible high after reading this. Your metaphors are perfect and your words flow so beautifully. You have absolute true talent. I look forward to reading more of your poems.
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25th Jan 2022 5:08am
This is definitely my favorite comment I have ever received on one of my poems. So sweet. Thank you!! ☺️
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30th Jan 2022 4:07am
He probably went to the international date line! That is where you may find him.
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21st Feb 2022 6:52am
Provoking imagery which harkens the most dire circumstances in which one can be surrounded by the desert. Sting's "Something the Boy Said", springs to, even with the much different motif found in the song.
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24th Sep 2022 6:45am
Wizardmotors,
I felt every breath of ah speaking ah feeling though this u ah typed. And, it ah cashes out upon the ah screen so ah bad, I ah had to ah favorite list this one ah lady! 👍🌷🍑🌈🤍👍🤜🤛💋🥥👅🍹🍹🍹🍹🌽
I felt every breath of ah speaking ah feeling though this u ah typed. And, it ah cashes out upon the ah screen so ah bad, I ah had to ah favorite list this one ah lady! 👍🌷🍑🌈🤍👍🤜🤛💋🥥👅🍹🍹🍹🍹🌽
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27th Sep 2022 3:08am
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11th Oct 2022 6:48pm
This was impressive, each line provides a picture and emotion.
As I was reading, I felt as you were in love and the object of your affection was distant and maybe even obtuse. Causing you doubt that the feeling is mutual. And then I read your author's note, the added confusion to the relationship that somehow you were to blame for their distance.
As I was reading, I felt as you were in love and the object of your affection was distant and maybe even obtuse. Causing you doubt that the feeling is mutual. And then I read your author's note, the added confusion to the relationship that somehow you were to blame for their distance.
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Re. Oasis
25th Oct 2022 10:13am
"Where do you go?
All I know is that you do"
Wow. Such a perfect, poignant way to express the distance between you and the one you love. This poem goes to my RL! I loved every image-laden line. Thanks for sharing!
Mundus
All I know is that you do"
Wow. Such a perfect, poignant way to express the distance between you and the one you love. This poem goes to my RL! I loved every image-laden line. Thanks for sharing!
Mundus
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14th Feb 2023 2:33am