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Once upon a time in the
Triple
Double
Uuuuuuu
Branded me an outlaw
but I bet you never saw this coming
Be quick on the draw, Sonny
Be quick on the draw
Itchy trigger fingered
Marshal's phantom limbed
long arm of the law
aimed to put me in my place
---take this cowboy down
dead
center of town
but when shooting me in the back-
-fired in his own face
Published 17th Nov 2019
| Edited 2nd Nov 2021
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17th Nov 2019 9:21am
A feel of the Old West in the 21st century. Well done.
Everyone take cover. Johnny's in town.
Everyone take cover. Johnny's in town.
17th Nov 2019 11:47am
The World Wide Web has been the new Wild Wild West for a few decades now. Thanks, Wally!
duh, didn't get the world wide web/wild wild west (3 wubble-yews) lightbulb immediately but that really WAS down to me and not you (i was getting mixed up with wars and wrestling and allsorts which confused me reading your poem).
now it all makes sense and i see i just needed to be a bit more awake when reading you, mister! not properly awake yet and feeling super dopey. sorry!
k, now it makes sense, matching up with its title, the tale of morality takes front and centre. love how 'draw' applies to both the gunslinger thang and your own drawing talents, and how too many see themselves as some kind of law enforcement but their badges are not only dirty but imaginary.
now it all makes sense and i see i just needed to be a bit more awake when reading you, mister! not properly awake yet and feeling super dopey. sorry!
k, now it makes sense, matching up with its title, the tale of morality takes front and centre. love how 'draw' applies to both the gunslinger thang and your own drawing talents, and how too many see themselves as some kind of law enforcement but their badges are not only dirty but imaginary.
17th Nov 2019 7:19pm
Ahh, the www isn't very obvious. You gets it mostly. The middle italics are meant to place emphasis on legit law enforcers exercising "over-reach" in their reputedly deputedly duties.
Thanks for the read, butters!
Thanks for the read, butters!
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17th Nov 2019 10:04pm
oh, oh.....now he's trying a "spook out" tactic.
Careful. You don'wanna Scare Me To Death....or do you?
Careful. You don'wanna Scare Me To Death....or do you?
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