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encamped
after the campfire dies
the forest has a way of baptizing
your thoughts—its obsidian font
revealing you are the captor
of your own shadow world—
your fears a prisoner
5:00 am
we all want a good story to tell—
when dawn illuminates
the foothills of a cook stove
utensil, you'll improvise
the landscape of food
the river
sliding against the bank
its black water a snake—
stealthy; lightning slicing
its underbelly—the rain
shouting, hightail it
origin
we all have a desire
to commune with our origin—
the mountain opens wide its heart
says, enter into this safe cavern—
the one that birthed you first
green thumb
see, we all want our lives
to be immaculate; to communicate
to know how to seed Love—
but, more importantly, how to weed
fear so our roots won't choke
~
the forest has a way of baptizing
your thoughts—its obsidian font
revealing you are the captor
of your own shadow world—
your fears a prisoner
5:00 am
we all want a good story to tell—
when dawn illuminates
the foothills of a cook stove
utensil, you'll improvise
the landscape of food
the river
sliding against the bank
its black water a snake—
stealthy; lightning slicing
its underbelly—the rain
shouting, hightail it
origin
we all have a desire
to commune with our origin—
the mountain opens wide its heart
says, enter into this safe cavern—
the one that birthed you first
green thumb
see, we all want our lives
to be immaculate; to communicate
to know how to seed Love—
but, more importantly, how to weed
fear so our roots won't choke
~
Written by
Ahavati
(Tams)
Published 11th Jul 2019
Author's Note
For Josh's "A Set of Five Short Poems" Competition: https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10886/
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. encamped
11th Jul 2019 6:45pm
This is no where near mundane; Camping is always exciting!!
& don't get me started with telling You why i treat weeding as a form of zen meditation ; )
Love You 5 choices here - nature based, what's not to love?
& don't get me started with telling You why i treat weeding as a form of zen meditation ; )
Love You 5 choices here - nature based, what's not to love?
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Re: Re. encamped
17th Jul 2019 8:01pm
Thank you, Tallen! Weeding is a form of meditation to me as well. All garden work is. Well, some, anyway! LOL!
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Anonymous
- Edited 11th Jul 2019 6:57pm
11th Jul 2019 6:46pm
I enjoy this muchly, especially 5 and most of all 4 - I LOVE being underground.
1 entices the imagination to participate, while 3 is quite explosive imagery that pops on its own.
2 ... makes me hungry for simple comfort foods and the peaceful quiet before birds start singing.
📝❤
1 entices the imagination to participate, while 3 is quite explosive imagery that pops on its own.
2 ... makes me hungry for simple comfort foods and the peaceful quiet before birds start singing.
📝❤
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Re: Re. encamped
17th Jul 2019 8:02pm
Caves are one of the most exciting things to explore. My bucket list includes many locations of them, particularly Vietnam.
Nothing like comfort food nor the peace and quiet of early morning.
Thank you. 📝❤
Nothing like comfort food nor the peace and quiet of early morning.
Thank you. 📝❤
Re. encamped
11th Jul 2019 8:50pm
The river is stunning. I am glad it is central, supporting the flow of the read. Thank you.
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17th Jul 2019 8:03pm
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- Edited 8th May 2020 8:45pm
11th Jul 2019 9:44pm
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17th Jul 2019 8:04pm
Re. encamped
11th Jul 2019 10:12pm
Like the camping theme and the way being in Nature reaches otherwise semi-comatose parts of ourselves. Good luck in the comp.
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Re: Re. encamped
17th Jul 2019 8:04pm
Thank you for hosting such an interesting comp, Josh! I really enjoyed entering this one!
Re. encamped
11th Jul 2019 11:00pm
Deep, you tied everything into a nice mystical essence, great finish.
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17th Jul 2019 8:05pm
Re. encamped
12th Jul 2019 00:08am
That's what i call a "breakthrough poom.
(just don't ask me what that means)
bra'vo !
(just don't ask me what that means)
bra'vo !
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- Edited 9th Apr 2022 5:45am
12th Jul 2019 2:29am
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Re: Re. encamped
17th Jul 2019 8:05pm
Re. encamped
O Sage, a wonderful ode to the great outdoors and camping - illuminated a part of me and my entire childhood communing with nature on any of the family outings I was so fortunate to be a part of, starting when I was two years old.
Thank you, I’ll be daydreaming for days because of this. And best of luck in the comp. x
🐾
Update: I have room now to add this.🐅
Thank you, I’ll be daydreaming for days because of this. And best of luck in the comp. x
🐾
Update: I have room now to add this.🐅
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Re: Re. encamped
17th Jul 2019 8:07pm
Thanks, Jade! And for the RL Honor.
It would be wonderful if all children would learn the importance of communing with nature to lure them from the concrete jungles and virtual tablets!
It would be wonderful if all children would learn the importance of communing with nature to lure them from the concrete jungles and virtual tablets!
Re. encamped
12th Jul 2019 4:57pm
Okay, okay you my dear just totally floored me!!
I’m deeply in love with this ink!!! Yup yup truly 😊
I’m deeply in love with this ink!!! Yup yup truly 😊
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Re: Re. encamped
17th Jul 2019 8:08pm
Thanks, PoeticOne. I am so happy to see you returning regularly, my friend. Your much appreciated.
Re. encamped
15th Jul 2019 5:27am
a rejuvenation ...amidst the serene beckoning & giving in to the Nature her truth & beauty- that's within & around..that needs a (re)birthing a resurfacing from all the hardened fears of cemented urbanities one had sedimented for long ...feeling the soothing life-warmth of a womb calling us back & nascent light streaming in golden for an awakening...each part of the whole poem ..is an imediate calling to the soul..in your poetic beauty & purpose! Thanks Ahavati my friend...best fr the comp.:) x
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Re: Re. encamped
17th Jul 2019 8:10pm
Thank you, Uma, as always, for that beautiful interpretation. One of the reasons I love your comments is because of the beauty lodged within your heart and soul. That beauty gets filtered through love and your interpretations are always pure.
Thank you for blessing my work with both your love and time. It's truly appreciated, my friend. 📝❤
Thank you for blessing my work with both your love and time. It's truly appreciated, my friend. 📝❤
Re. encamped
Brava! I was willingly made to reflect on my experiences in the Sierra's camping, fishing, hiking...a truly spiritual time. I miss dearly those mountains. My favorite passage "to know how to seed Love—
but, more importantly, how to weed "
but, more importantly, how to weed "
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Re: Re. encamped
17th Jul 2019 8:14pm
Sii, Gahddess! The mountains are a wondrous experience of both grandeur and immense power! One rarely forgets the experience of communing with them.
Knowing a poem connects, or brings back a part of a readers spiritual experience is a blessing to know. I think of all the classic poets who died before ever having experienced such, and am all the more grateful for those poets such as yourself. 📝❤
Knowing a poem connects, or brings back a part of a readers spiritual experience is a blessing to know. I think of all the classic poets who died before ever having experienced such, and am all the more grateful for those poets such as yourself. 📝❤
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- Edited 17th Jan 2020 4:45am
17th Jul 2019 2:37am
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That's a 'Wow' response in and of itself, wizkatfood! Thank you. Much appreciated! Love your name, btw!
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Re. encamped
11th Oct 2019 10:07pm
An inventive poetic suite. The links are well-forged from first to last.
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11th Oct 2019 10:09pm