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in our summer years
you left me in the dark without even a goodbye
my heart cried
and before the tears could dry on my face
you were on to the next lover
I no longer amused you
our love turned cold
while I still shared a bed with you
so you reached for another
I felt you leave inside me
your true presence no longer there
in our marriage disavowed
you took no blame for the pain you caused
I looked in your eyes
and saw another woman there
dancing in your soul and lighting up your face
I smiled with you
while you smiled for someone else
my trust broken when you walked out
later I saw you together
with the woman, who captured your attention
she looked like me at a younger age
and I knew you were trying to find us once more
in our youth so much in love
you were going back home
to our happy place
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Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 12:46pm
This piece is sad and many will relate, but need to reread to see the tightness. Nice
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Re: Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 12:47pm
thank you graciously dearest I IS Me for the love on this write...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 12:57pm
she looked like me at a younger age
and I knew you were trying to find us once more- that just cuts right there. Saddened and painful
and I knew you were trying to find us once more- that just cuts right there. Saddened and painful
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14th Nov 2018 1:13pm
Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 12:58pm
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14th Nov 2018 1:14pm
Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 1:37pm
This piece tied my heart into a knot.
Well written and laid out despite how i felt reading it.
Well written and laid out despite how i felt reading it.
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Re: Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 1:44pm
thank you dearest Tallen for feeling this deeply my apologies for the pain...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 1:42pm
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14th Nov 2018 1:44pm
Re. in our summer years
Anonymous
14th Nov 2018 1:57pm
Beautiful write my sweet one. Very painful. How sad that we should suffer for something that should cause only happiness. Love to you dearest. J
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Re: Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 2:00pm
thank you graciously dearest Juvenalis for such a loving comment...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹
Re. in our summer years
Anonymous
14th Nov 2018 3:50pm
Crimmy! That is brilliantly sad! Wow! My heart hurt with you on that one!
If it's autobiographical, someone's an idiot, because you're fantastic!!
Great write!
Love,
Matthew.
If it's autobiographical, someone's an idiot, because you're fantastic!!
Great write!
Love,
Matthew.
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Re: Re. in our summer years
15th Nov 2018 11:03am
thank you dearest Matthew for feeling this write... while all my poems have level of truth woven in this is a work of fiction...
I deeply appreciate you,..
love Brenda 🌹
I deeply appreciate you,..
love Brenda 🌹
Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 4:04pm
"later I saw you together
with the woman, who captured your attention
she looked like me at a younger age
and I knew you were trying to find us once more
in our youth so much in love
you were going back home
to our happy place"
... that's at one and the same time both a very gracious and painfully insightful comment. I can feel it in my soul.
with the woman, who captured your attention
she looked like me at a younger age
and I knew you were trying to find us once more
in our youth so much in love
you were going back home
to our happy place"
... that's at one and the same time both a very gracious and painfully insightful comment. I can feel it in my soul.
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Re: Re. in our summer years
15th Nov 2018 11:05am
thank you dearest Josh for feeling those lines so deeply while this is a work of fiction I guess it's kind of how I feel... like we were better at a younger age...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 4:39pm
Re: Re. in our summer years
15th Nov 2018 11:05am
Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 6:58pm
Always ironic how and why people just don't quite make it..we contract certain ones and not others...who probably were a better fit..I don't know. I hear ya. Liked of course
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Re: Re. in our summer years
15th Nov 2018 11:07am
thank you beautiful Nari for feeling this write while it's a work of fiction, for the most part, I sometimes wonder if we weren't a better fit in our younger years...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re: Re. in our summer years
15th Nov 2018 12:29pm
Re: Re. in our summer years
15th Nov 2018 12:34pm
yeah, you're probably right it's taken us a long time to really know each other...
thank you beautiful for your insight...
love Brenda 💕
thank you beautiful for your insight...
love Brenda 💕
Re. in our summer years
14th Nov 2018 9:00pm
Youth is overrated. If he moved on to a younger version he's a fool. There's nothing like a woman of experience. Still another superb write, Brenda.
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Re: Re. in our summer years
15th Nov 2018 11:08am
thank you dearest Sir Crow perhaps you are right and I'm the one being foolish thinking we were better in our younger years...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹