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foolish
the sun set on our love
the last I love you;
hung thick in the air between us
my heart spoke foolishly
I knew you no longer felt the same
it was more of a desperate plea
than a sentiment of affection
I wanted to call back time
make it freeze on our days in the sun
days where we were in love
it flowed easily between us
you knew my curves and valleys
worshipped at my peaks
I understood your shady pines
prickly undertones of your personality
there I rest my soul
where no one dare tread. save me
you were my safe haven
in your stoic silence
I found my salvation
today I cry for days past
I can't reclaim them
they slip through my hands
just dust blown away by the same silence
in the quiet dawn
vodka sunrises numb
the quiet din of a mourner
who's lost her way
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29th Aug 2018 10:09pm
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Re: Re. foolish
29th Aug 2018 10:12pm
thank you dearest Bender for feeling this one... yes we can't bring back days no matter how hard we try 💕
I deeply appreciate you...
love Brenda
I deeply appreciate you...
love Brenda
Re: Re. foolish
29th Aug 2018 10:16pm
Re. foolish
29th Aug 2018 11:12pm
A sad but lovely write, wishing to turn back the clock to lost love. This one brought some tears. Beautifully done, Lady Crim.
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Re: Re. foolish
29th Aug 2018 11:13pm
thank you dearest Sir Crow for feeling this one so deeply 💕
I appreciate you deeply...
love Crim
I appreciate you deeply...
love Crim
Re. foolish
29th Aug 2018 11:13pm
This just tugs at all the strings, if we could only turn hands of time and freeze it.
I have my share of regrets and moments which I relive every day.
I guess in some ways we move on but sadly, we carry those memories with us.
Hang on tight Brenda, it will be okay.
I have my share of regrets and moments which I relive every day.
I guess in some ways we move on but sadly, we carry those memories with us.
Hang on tight Brenda, it will be okay.
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Re: Re. foolish
29th Aug 2018 11:14pm
thank you beautiful Layla for sharing your own thoughts on regret no time can't be called back sadly 🌹
I appreciate your thoughts deeply...
love Brenda
I appreciate your thoughts deeply...
love Brenda
Re. foolish
30th Aug 2018 1:20am
I so often used to think if I could turn back time to when things were grand but then I realize all the people I've met since and my heart is starting to flicker again. I feel every bit of this one Brenda
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Re: Re. foolish
30th Aug 2018 7:26pm
thank you dearest Tim for a very wise comment you're right we are richer for the people we come across and the pain that makes us grow 💕
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda
Re. foolish
30th Aug 2018 2:06am
the time lost
moments lost
words that were not said
letters that were not written
they all come back to haunt us in time like these
moments lost
words that were not said
letters that were not written
they all come back to haunt us in time like these
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Re: Re. foolish
30th Aug 2018 7:26pm
Re. foolish
30th Aug 2018 7:15am
Well spun words of nostalgic longing. The path away is dark, ripe with moments as this to express. Take comfort that many of us understand <3
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Re: Re. foolish
30th Aug 2018 7:29pm
thank you beautiful Atomik One for understanding this one 🌹
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda
Re. foolish
30th Aug 2018 2:42pm
I feel your pain Crim...you went deep with this one...though you have turned something tragic
into something beautiful.
Dark Sun.
into something beautiful.
Dark Sun.
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Re: Re. foolish
30th Aug 2018 7:30pm
thank you dearest Dark Sun for feeling me so deeply 💕
I appreciate you very much...
love Crim
I appreciate you very much...
love Crim
Re: Re. foolish
31st Aug 2018 10:12pm
Re. foolish
4th Sep 2018 5:53am
The loss and sorrow are palpable and strong, I can feel your time-travel within. This is emotionally epic
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Re. foolish
6th Sep 2018 7:06pm
Sad, beautifully, and so relevant to any feeling, linear being. I was thinking yesterday, forgiveness is for sentients, the universe is relentless, only moves forward.
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