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These Moments
At the moment
the dreaming songbirds hiccup
the first sunlight rises to wake me up
I stand amazed by the sun moon lake
Let the early breezes send unconscious air
nibble at my ignorant hair
With sunbeam beckoning
I wade into the bushy-green ocean
step on the over strewn fallen leaves
catch some of those flying foliage
build dreams with calling birds’ mirage
During the tranquil sphere
the spring woods come to be surreal
Soft wind gives gentle solace
Arbor trees offer pastel shades
Hazel logs pave wooden paths
Hidden birds sing in ravishing voices
Weeping willows put on jade green dresses
At the moment
I bask in the sifted sunlights
that shine through the supple twigs
flying my thoughts to the distance
thinking of your gracious stance
Let the swaying shadows
etch your words on the mossy pebbles
Under the dappled shades
I implant memories deep
by taking notes on foliage pages
for that I won’t forget or forsake
these moments, I
cast away worldly goods
indulge myself in the woods
the dreaming songbirds hiccup
the first sunlight rises to wake me up
I stand amazed by the sun moon lake
Let the early breezes send unconscious air
nibble at my ignorant hair
With sunbeam beckoning
I wade into the bushy-green ocean
step on the over strewn fallen leaves
catch some of those flying foliage
build dreams with calling birds’ mirage
During the tranquil sphere
the spring woods come to be surreal
Soft wind gives gentle solace
Arbor trees offer pastel shades
Hazel logs pave wooden paths
Hidden birds sing in ravishing voices
Weeping willows put on jade green dresses
At the moment
I bask in the sifted sunlights
that shine through the supple twigs
flying my thoughts to the distance
thinking of your gracious stance
Let the swaying shadows
etch your words on the mossy pebbles
Under the dappled shades
I implant memories deep
by taking notes on foliage pages
for that I won’t forget or forsake
these moments, I
cast away worldly goods
indulge myself in the woods
Author's Note
I went camping at Sun Moon Lake during Chinese New Year holiday. They were the moments I won't forget in my life.
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Re. These Moments
Anonymous
5th Mar 2018 3:02am
Hey Rose........sounds like a wonderful camping trip........you’re words took me there with you.......very visual and beautiful.......enjoyed very much.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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5th Mar 2018 3:00pm
It was the best camping ever I can promise. The site Sun Moon Lake is the Alice's wonderland. Glad you enjoyed reading this. Thank you beautiful flowergirl for the nice feedback.
luv & hugs xo :)
RoseJasmine
luv & hugs xo :)
RoseJasmine
Re. These Moments
5th Mar 2018 5:10am
a beautiful painting of your soulful interaction with the natural world...absolutely a joy to see this world through your eyes...well done Jasmine
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5th Mar 2018 3:04pm
It was so enjoyable having a chance to soak myself in the woods. Glad you love this share Lawrence. Thank you so much for the nice comment.
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. These Moments
5th Mar 2018 8:23am
"During the tranquil sphere
the spring woods come to be surreal
Soft wind gives gentle solace
Arbor trees offer pastel shades
Hazel logs pave wooden paths
Hidden birds sing in ravishing voices
Weeping willows put on jade green dresses'
such wonderful visuals...pulling the reader up the path to the garden paradise...in all forms
love
Jeff
the spring woods come to be surreal
Soft wind gives gentle solace
Arbor trees offer pastel shades
Hazel logs pave wooden paths
Hidden birds sing in ravishing voices
Weeping willows put on jade green dresses'
such wonderful visuals...pulling the reader up the path to the garden paradise...in all forms
love
Jeff
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5th Mar 2018 3:11pm
Dearest Jeff, glad you could see the visuals. They are trully surreal...you have to see it yourself one day. Your comment makes me smile. Thank you so much for the always support.
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine
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Rosejasmine, this is so beautiful and serene. It's an awe inspiring thing to consider our small size compared with a forest of trees. Your work has a Taoist feel to me...and I love those peaceful philosophies. Bravisima!
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5th Mar 2018 3:28pm
Wow, you remind me of that I do love the Taoist philosophies. I studied some of them when I was at school. Glad you could feel the beauty and serenity in this write. Love your philosophical insight when you comment. I am honored with the RL add.
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. These Moments
5th Mar 2018 12:40pm
Oh my lovely ... this is so beautiful. You took me there with you. I just got back from a ski trip to British Columbia and got to do some snowshoeing ... this so, so captured much of what I felt. I felt such a primal ... stir
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5th Mar 2018 3:44pm
Hey my lovely poetess...nice to see you after a long while...you're always sweet to me.
Wow, sounds like you had a wonderful winter trip, and will have some amazing experience to share...expect to read yours.
Glad I could share some beautiful moments with you. Thank you for the comment and the RL add. I am honored.
much love
RoseJasmine
Wow, sounds like you had a wonderful winter trip, and will have some amazing experience to share...expect to read yours.
Glad I could share some beautiful moments with you. Thank you for the comment and the RL add. I am honored.
much love
RoseJasmine
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5th Mar 2018 3:46pm
Back at you my beauty. I have been out of town a bit. Home of a little while ... I hope to pen some more poetry while I am. Always find your poetry so soothing
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5th Mar 2018 4:00pm
Re. These Moments
5th Mar 2018 2:31pm
Wonderful write.
"dreaming songbirds hiccup
the first sunlight rises to wake me up"- i want to take the workday off and go to the state birding park down the road now.
"I stand amazed by the sun moon lake
Let the early breezes send unconscious air
nibble at my ignorant hair"- like morning mother nature's brother jack frost pushing cold off the water with breath lulled to sleep.
sunbeams beckon could very well break the way i think
bushy green oceans too beautiful to look away
like a building being demolished with a wrecking ball crane.
"some of those flying foliage
build dreams with calling birds’ mirage"- and so let us be lost in these visions 'playing in the leaves of my childhood next to red 89' Chevy Astro vans.
Suns spheres golden gleaming in the sun
i really like the pastel shade
the swaying shadows
and that last lines sums it up very nice
"I cast away worldly goods
indulge myself in the woods"- i could quit my job and move to the woods for a few years, i'm cool with that.
well penned RoseJasmine
"dreaming songbirds hiccup
the first sunlight rises to wake me up"- i want to take the workday off and go to the state birding park down the road now.
"I stand amazed by the sun moon lake
Let the early breezes send unconscious air
nibble at my ignorant hair"- like morning mother nature's brother jack frost pushing cold off the water with breath lulled to sleep.
sunbeams beckon could very well break the way i think
bushy green oceans too beautiful to look away
like a building being demolished with a wrecking ball crane.
"some of those flying foliage
build dreams with calling birds’ mirage"- and so let us be lost in these visions 'playing in the leaves of my childhood next to red 89' Chevy Astro vans.
Suns spheres golden gleaming in the sun
i really like the pastel shade
the swaying shadows
and that last lines sums it up very nice
"I cast away worldly goods
indulge myself in the woods"- i could quit my job and move to the woods for a few years, i'm cool with that.
well penned RoseJasmine
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Oh Samael, what a delicate commentator you are. Your comment alway makes me feel so warm. I always appreciate your comment you know. I really do.
Have you been to the state birding park yet? If you did, guess you have had a peaceful moment as I did in the woods.
Thank you so much for the such detailed feedback. I am honored.
much love
RoseJasmine
Have you been to the state birding park yet? If you did, guess you have had a peaceful moment as I did in the woods.
Thank you so much for the such detailed feedback. I am honored.
much love
RoseJasmine
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5th Mar 2018 4:05pm
it's on my short term bucket list, hopefully i'll do it sometime this week.
just keep on taking us with you on your fantastic excursions and i'll be happy.
just keep on taking us with you on your fantastic excursions and i'll be happy.
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5th Mar 2018 4:11pm
Looking forward to reading your wonderful trip soon. I will share some more later...
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Dear Danny, glad my write could remind you of those beautiful momories. I love those sights you mentioned...they would make me want to camp there forever. Hope I really can cast away worldly goods and live in the woods one day.
Thank you so much for the thought and the RL add.
much love
RoseJasmine
Thank you so much for the thought and the RL add.
much love
RoseJasmine
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5th Mar 2018 6:04pm
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6th Mar 2018 00:37am
Dearest Tim, glad you could feel the serenity like what I could feel in your works. Truly appreciate your encouragement.
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. These Moments
Anonymous
6th Mar 2018 1:01pm
What a calm and tranquil trip you have just taken us on.
Beautiful moments to behold <3
Beautiful moments to behold <3
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7th Mar 2018 1:31am
Dear Sophie, that's the most wonderful camping I have ever had. Hope I could show you all of it but actually I couldn't.
Thank you so much for the nice feedback <3
much love
RoseJasmine
Thank you so much for the nice feedback <3
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. These Moments
6th Mar 2018 7:20pm
What a lovely way you captured a beautiful moment. You took me there. You had me at birds and foliage :)
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Thank you Starlight, glad you joined me back to those moments.
Thank you for sharing your thought.
Welcome to DUP!
love
RoseJasmine
Thank you for sharing your thought.
Welcome to DUP!
love
RoseJasmine
Re. These Moments
7th Mar 2018 4:54pm
hi jasmine , this is a very gentle and beautiful poem . i love how you referred to the breeze nibbling your '' ignorant hair '', the hidden birds singing in ravishing voices,
this has to be one of my favourite lines .. ''Let the swaying shadows
etch your words on the mossy pebbles''
i love how you have given such description , and a really lovely feel to the nature that you observed . a pleasure to read x
this has to be one of my favourite lines .. ''Let the swaying shadows
etch your words on the mossy pebbles''
i love how you have given such description , and a really lovely feel to the nature that you observed . a pleasure to read x
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8th Mar 2018 1:51am
Dear Daffodil, thank you so much for the read and commenting.
Those moments were etched in my heart, and I tried to depict them in such limited words. The nature, her beauty is incredibly magnificent beyond words.
Anyway, I love nature and I will still write more for her....
love
Jasmine
Those moments were etched in my heart, and I tried to depict them in such limited words. The nature, her beauty is incredibly magnificent beyond words.
Anyway, I love nature and I will still write more for her....
love
Jasmine
Re. These Moments
10th Mar 2018 6:43am
I'm glad to have stumbled upon this wonderful piece. Your words capture the comfort and calm of nature, and its beauty, so well. Great work!
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11th Mar 2018 2:52pm
Thank you Thorny for stopping by and commenting. I am glad to share the beauty of nature with you, and I am honored with the RL add.
love
RoseJasmine
love
RoseJasmine
Re. These Moments
11th Mar 2018 00:47am
such beauty and inspiration I am taken away into your dream - i feel somehow part of it :-))))))
Beautiful :-)))))))
Beautiful :-)))))))
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11th Mar 2018 2:56pm
Wow David, so glad you took this piece into your Reading List. I am honored :))))))
Thank you so much for the nice feedback :)))))
much love
RoseJasmie
Thank you so much for the nice feedback :)))))
much love
RoseJasmie
Re. These Moments
Anonymous
12th Mar 2018 2:34am
Wow you captured that moment beautifully, I wanted to join you in those woods.
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12th Mar 2018 3:00am
Thank you LittleGift for stopping by and sharing your though. Glad you want to join me. It's really worth soaking in the woods...
Ncie to meet you here, and welcome to DUP!
love
RoseJasmine
Ncie to meet you here, and welcome to DUP!
love
RoseJasmine
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Anonymous
12th Mar 2018 3:03am
Thank you. My mother lives in France and her house is next to woods. It is quite remote and I love it there. So your poem really sang to me :) thanks for the warm welcome
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12th Mar 2018 3:10am
No problem. Love your presence very much. I am from Taiwan. There are a lot of beautiful woods here. Glad we have this hobby in common.
Re. These Moments
13th Mar 2018 6:56pm
This is such a tranquil piece. I loved every word. You are truly an amazing poetess. You care about your words and your inner world and it shows.
love marielle
love marielle
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14th Mar 2018 4:54pm
Thank you my dear for the nice feedback. I love your comment. It's precious to me. You really pay attention on my words and also read my mind. Appreciate your thought.
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. These Moments
21st Mar 2018 1:04pm
I love this line: “Weeping willows put on jade green dresses” ...gorgeous imagery poetess, you’ve painted a canvas!
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21st Mar 2018 3:25pm
Hey nightbirdblue, so glad to have your visit, and know you love the weeping willow part. Your words do encourage me. Thank you so much!
love
RoseJasmine
love
RoseJasmine