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hopscotch for the mad
i pressed my face to the stars
& spoke to them
in hushed tones
they answered in code
i couldn't decipher their language
so i went to a soothsayer
she said it wasn't for me to know
the secrets of the universe
i reached with my mind
to the furthest distances of space
sought answers where i could
in my madness bane
so tortured was my existence
clouds of voices circled my mind
with hiss & whispers
here i am once more
i believe i may be mad
vodka tears no longer
keep them at bay
i have no other talisman
to silence the din
so I feel intently
for hairline fractures
evidence i've cracked
i'm afraid once i fall into the dark
there will be no coming back
so i teeter on the edge
playing hopscotch for the mad
one, two
the men in white
are coming for you
three, four
better lock your door
five, six
time for a Thorazine drip
seven, eight
for the reprobate
nine, ten
fear the loony bin
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Re. hopscotch for the mad
3rd Jul 2017 2:20pm
What if we are searching in the wrong places for answers. Maybe the light is the abyss and the darkness is where we should lie. Great write dear.
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3rd Jul 2017 2:35pm
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3rd Jul 2017 2:31pm
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3rd Jul 2017 2:36pm
Re. hopscotch for the mad
What can I say except to fight the fight with vigor. I understand you are infatuated with the dark. Don't allow it to take posesionm of your soul..
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Re: Re. hopscotch for the mad
3rd Jul 2017 3:52pm
thank you Jerry I will fight with vigor & no I won't let the dark consume me.. love you my friend.. Brenda
Re. hopscotch for the mad
3rd Jul 2017 6:01pm
Fear not, Lady Crim. I see no evidence of madness, just imagination. Poets do tend to be fragile though. I've lost a few pieces here and there. This is an excellent write with the lucidity of the sane.
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Re: Re. hopscotch for the mad
3rd Jul 2017 7:43pm
thank you Sir Crow my imagination makes me nervous sometimes but I wouldn't be a writer without it.. thank you for the love you've shown me.. love Crim
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3rd Jul 2017 6:02pm
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3rd Jul 2017 7:43pm
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Anonymous
- Edited 4th Jul 2017 4:08am
4th Jul 2017 4:07am
This reminds me of my brother's constant battle with schizophrenia. When he does not take his meds, he speaks of dark places like this...It touched my heart because it really conveys the intense struggle of being caught between reality and illusion. ❤
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Re: Re. hopscotch for the mad
4th Jul 2017 2:26pm
thank you for sharing your own personal story with me.. I'm bipolar but I do take my meds but even they are sometimes not talisman enough.. love Crim
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Anonymous
4th Jul 2017 5:54am
My Beautiful Brenda, you feel you are mad because of all which filters through you battling for your attention...it is overwhelming but I know you...you will categorize what goes where and understand why...you teeter as you balance yourself between the two worlds, both having all your respect, 100%....and I'll always be there to hold your hand when you feel you may fall.
I love you passionately my love
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
I love you passionately my love
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
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Re: Re. hopscotch for the mad
4th Jul 2017 2:28pm
thank you my love that is what happens exactly.. I will learn the balance & how to put these forces in check as time goes by.. i've learned so much over the years.. I deeply cherish the knowledge that you journey with me.. I love you deeply.. love Brenda
Re. hopscotch for the mad
4th Jul 2017 4:34pm
I love this it's so very clever - really love the hopscotch part of it, original and well written :-)
you have such a poetic mind :-)
you have such a poetic mind :-)
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5th Jul 2017 12:32pm
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Anonymous
4th Jul 2017 4:59pm
Brenda.. sometimes that fear, is strength enough.. and the cracks you feel, could be the opening of the light.. it's natural to be scared, when swimming in uncharted waters.. but i have faith in you.. i don't think i say that enough.. you will find your way.. i believe that.. love you always...
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. hopscotch for the mad
5th Jul 2017 12:34pm
thank you Dave what a beautiful way of seeing things.. I believe in you too..deeply appreciate you being you & being here.. I love you my brother.. Brenda
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Anonymous
5th Jul 2017 3:06pm
Beautiful Dark Angel, this one had me on edge. I kept wanting to reach through the computer and hug you. You are one of the strongest women I've ever had the honor of knowing. That you recognize the torment and dangers in the teetering helps protect you from the fall, lovely one. And I'm hopping along beside you if you need a steadying hand. So much love for you...
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Re: Re. hopscotch for the mad
5th Jul 2017 3:17pm
thank you lovely one for the love & hugs I can feel them.. this was just a hard day.. they come & go thankfully I know to stay on my meds.. which keeps me from teetering over the edge.. love you lady.. xo Crim