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Our Daily Bread
Movement molds me
a hazel iris in a socket
surrounded by the skin
of water irrigating
its armored sediment
This stream migrating
toward the river, kited
leaves reeling downward
cottonwood diagonally
skyscraper confetti
from the roof of trees
a parade of Autumn’s
Summer victory
Stones stacked in unison
emerge from the silt
an unnatural balance
strong as the hands
that formed these sentinels
of gravitational defiance
I’m a carousel princess
at the end of your gaze
you, paying homage to me
before the fish you hooked
I watch you bow in prayer
give thanks for the gift
of your daily bread
You glance up, smile
rolling the fishing line
knowing I won’t partake
of its delicate flesh
but will turn my head
write of it instead
write of your skilled
removal of hook
your compassionate
appreciation for Life
Suddenly the sun trips
falls deep into the forest
Our last evening together
a panic rises inside me
you read it across my face
set your basket on the bank
position yourself behind me
pull me against you in silence
I will miss the metronome
of your heart beneath
your flanneled music
your woodsy scent …
But we don’t say it, we say
nothing, that is our magic
our shield against meaning
and previous experience
We need no worded promise
no guarantee I’ll soon return
no man-made definitions
to label what we’ve found
You pull me up, draw me tightly
into your mouth, exchange breath
entwine my hair like fishing line
give thanks for what we have
I’m a WWII photograph, the nurse
bent perfectly backwards in a kiss –
I’m every woman a man has Loved
I’m every princess that ever lived.
‘Aho’
~
Image taken at Cherokee Indian Reservation
private property
a hazel iris in a socket
surrounded by the skin
of water irrigating
its armored sediment
This stream migrating
toward the river, kited
leaves reeling downward
cottonwood diagonally
skyscraper confetti
from the roof of trees
a parade of Autumn’s
Summer victory
Stones stacked in unison
emerge from the silt
an unnatural balance
strong as the hands
that formed these sentinels
of gravitational defiance
I’m a carousel princess
at the end of your gaze
you, paying homage to me
before the fish you hooked
I watch you bow in prayer
give thanks for the gift
of your daily bread
You glance up, smile
rolling the fishing line
knowing I won’t partake
of its delicate flesh
but will turn my head
write of it instead
write of your skilled
removal of hook
your compassionate
appreciation for Life
Suddenly the sun trips
falls deep into the forest
Our last evening together
a panic rises inside me
you read it across my face
set your basket on the bank
position yourself behind me
pull me against you in silence
I will miss the metronome
of your heart beneath
your flanneled music
your woodsy scent …
But we don’t say it, we say
nothing, that is our magic
our shield against meaning
and previous experience
We need no worded promise
no guarantee I’ll soon return
no man-made definitions
to label what we’ve found
You pull me up, draw me tightly
into your mouth, exchange breath
entwine my hair like fishing line
give thanks for what we have
I’m a WWII photograph, the nurse
bent perfectly backwards in a kiss –
I’m every woman a man has Loved
I’m every princess that ever lived.
‘Aho’
~
Image taken at Cherokee Indian Reservation
private property
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Re. Our Daily Bread
Anonymous
8th Nov 2016 11:00pm
Im' so extremely moved and airless,
lagoons have formed within my sight.
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9th Nov 2016 4:22pm
May you skinny dip in the lagoons, Ma'Lady
May their salty contents purify your Spirit.
Thank you for a lovely comment. So appreciated.
May their salty contents purify your Spirit.
Thank you for a lovely comment. So appreciated.
Re. Our Daily Bread
8th Nov 2016 11:35pm
There are so many emotions wrapped in these words. I found myself holding my breath at the end. Because it ends. Beautiful...
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9th Nov 2016 4:21pm
Each ending is just a new beginning, Willow. Let them come. Thank you for your lovely comment. It's very much appreciated.
Re. Our Daily Bread
8th Nov 2016 11:38pm
What a beautiful, wonderful write. You took me
on a magical trip and left me at the end. loving
the woman in the poem!
on a magical trip and left me at the end. loving
the woman in the poem!
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Re: Re. Our Daily Bread
9th Nov 2016 4:20pm
Thank you, Jerry. I'm glad the magic spoke to you. Appreciate muchly your lovely comment.
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9th Nov 2016 5:37am
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Re. Our Daily Bread
9th Nov 2016 8:19am
'But we don’t say it, we say
nothing, that is our magic
our shield against meaning
and previous experience'
Absolutely beautiful and so powerful in its meaning. Not to say it, says it all....
nothing, that is our magic
our shield against meaning
and previous experience'
Absolutely beautiful and so powerful in its meaning. Not to say it, says it all....
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9th Nov 2016 4:18pm
There comes a time in all our lives that the 'knowing' outweighs the defining label humanity has created. Thank you for picking up on that, and your comment. Appreciated.
Re. Our Daily Bread
This is beautiful. It's so beautiful, I'm unsure where to start in commenting on it.
The fantastic description of the setting in the opening three stanzas leaves one almost feeling like they are there. Perfect imagery, perfectly timed.
The fourth stsnza brought a smile "the carousel princess" I lingered in so many fantisized images there. That stanza is the highlight for me. Your description of the poems subjects is well, breathtaking... From her princess moment through his survival instinct the fishing image is wonderful. And he prays. Stunning brain fodder.
I took a life lesson away in the fifth were you describe a non judgemental love. An understanding that we don't have to partake in the same things to be happy.
And the rest ends this beautiful fantasia moment everything from her anxiety to his gratitude and their mutual longing though it hasn't started is stunning.
It ends in what I consider to be the most beautifully erotic writing I have seen in the DU for ages. I went back up the page to confirm the category choice, expecting to find it moved to love or erotica somehow.
This my friend is definately one of the most breathtaking,stunning reads I have had the honour of reading in ages.
Blue Skies & love at you
Al -x-
The fantastic description of the setting in the opening three stanzas leaves one almost feeling like they are there. Perfect imagery, perfectly timed.
The fourth stsnza brought a smile "the carousel princess" I lingered in so many fantisized images there. That stanza is the highlight for me. Your description of the poems subjects is well, breathtaking... From her princess moment through his survival instinct the fishing image is wonderful. And he prays. Stunning brain fodder.
I took a life lesson away in the fifth were you describe a non judgemental love. An understanding that we don't have to partake in the same things to be happy.
And the rest ends this beautiful fantasia moment everything from her anxiety to his gratitude and their mutual longing though it hasn't started is stunning.
It ends in what I consider to be the most beautifully erotic writing I have seen in the DU for ages. I went back up the page to confirm the category choice, expecting to find it moved to love or erotica somehow.
This my friend is definately one of the most breathtaking,stunning reads I have had the honour of reading in ages.
Blue Skies & love at you
Al -x-
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Re: Re. Our Daily Bread
I am humbled by your generous time and response, Al. The beauty of Nature has always been a deep inspiration. That I could capture it to the degree that someone would feel they were actually there makes me feel I've done her justice.
Most Native Americans are very spiritual and give thanks to the life they believe surrendered to their need. Atohi lives off the land and gives thanks for everything he catches or harvests from its soil. These are the old ways of non commercialism. Of taking from nature only what you need to survive and wasting nothing of that gift. It's a precious and ancient form of lifestyle he keeps alive through his living. And in that nature and man are balanced.
Love is complete acceptance of the path each has chosen prior to returning here. It's the deep recognition of responsibility to oneself and the world around them - it's a non-interference in obligations mapped out by the spirit of another. It's coexisting in a harmonious balance of acceptance. I love watching him work the land - he loves watching me write. Whether on rocks in a stream, dying fields of Winter, or rainy front porches. He says it's an art form that deserves encouraging, just as sowing a garden requires nurturing.
In regards to category, I wasn't certain where to put this. The Love category here is of the pains and trials of Love. And this certainly is neither. Erotic seemed a bit too narrow for the Spiritual reach, and the Spiritual seemed a bit too high for the human aspect. Sometimes all one can do is observe the beauty happening to and around them without categorizing it.
Thank you, my friend. Your time and attention is greatly appreciated.
Most Native Americans are very spiritual and give thanks to the life they believe surrendered to their need. Atohi lives off the land and gives thanks for everything he catches or harvests from its soil. These are the old ways of non commercialism. Of taking from nature only what you need to survive and wasting nothing of that gift. It's a precious and ancient form of lifestyle he keeps alive through his living. And in that nature and man are balanced.
Love is complete acceptance of the path each has chosen prior to returning here. It's the deep recognition of responsibility to oneself and the world around them - it's a non-interference in obligations mapped out by the spirit of another. It's coexisting in a harmonious balance of acceptance. I love watching him work the land - he loves watching me write. Whether on rocks in a stream, dying fields of Winter, or rainy front porches. He says it's an art form that deserves encouraging, just as sowing a garden requires nurturing.
In regards to category, I wasn't certain where to put this. The Love category here is of the pains and trials of Love. And this certainly is neither. Erotic seemed a bit too narrow for the Spiritual reach, and the Spiritual seemed a bit too high for the human aspect. Sometimes all one can do is observe the beauty happening to and around them without categorizing it.
Thank you, my friend. Your time and attention is greatly appreciated.
Re. Our Daily Bread
9th Nov 2016 1:23pm
Sage one you set the scene perfectly..
I love this..
"skyscraper confetti
from the roof of trees
a parade of Autumn’s
Summer victory
Stones stacked in unison
emerge from the silt
an unnatural balance
strong as the hands
that formed these sentinels
of gravitational defiance"
the picture is perfect..
so majestically beautiful is this write..
love Brenda
I love this..
"skyscraper confetti
from the roof of trees
a parade of Autumn’s
Summer victory
Stones stacked in unison
emerge from the silt
an unnatural balance
strong as the hands
that formed these sentinels
of gravitational defiance"
the picture is perfect..
so majestically beautiful is this write..
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Our Daily Bread
Thank you, Brenda. I feel you're a nature lover as well and connect with you through that conduit. Thank you for a lovely comment and RL honor. Both are greatly appreciated. xo
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9th Nov 2016 5:07pm
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Re. Our Daily Bread
9th Nov 2016 10:51pm
I love where you say kited leaves especially, it tells us so much about the leaf dancing whimsically on the wind, but also hints to purpose in all things. That is what is says to me, anyhow. Skyscraper spaghetti is wonderful, you illuminate the celebration that is within every moment of life. The tender way you consider your other is gorgeous. How you appreciate him. How he has earned the right to dwell within you. Overawed by your spirit and ability, as always.
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Thank you, Daniel. Much gratitude to you, my friend.
P.S. - I LOVE skyscraper spaghetti! Best laugh all day. Thank you. :)
P.S. - I LOVE skyscraper spaghetti! Best laugh all day. Thank you. :)
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Re. Our Daily Bread
11th Nov 2016 9:47pm
oh my - how you build the blocks of this then house within it your heart
"Entwine my hair like fishing line" - the poem and reader spins like a Jenny in this
And then something so unexpected that only poetry and a poet can do... that last verse
"Entwine my hair like fishing line" - the poem and reader spins like a Jenny in this
And then something so unexpected that only poetry and a poet can do... that last verse
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Re. Our Daily Bread
13th Nov 2016 3:38pm
Congratulations! This poem has been nominated for DUP's Poem of the Month! You may view the nomination here, and will be notified if the winner.
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Re. Our Daily Bread
Congratulations! This poem was voted the Winner of the Poem of the Month, December 2016! You may view the award here!
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9252/
Again, congratulations!
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9252/
Again, congratulations!
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Re. Our Daily Bread
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2nd Dec 2016 4:23pm
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Re. Our Daily Bread
24th Dec 2016 5:49pm