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~masochist's kiss~
take all of me
throw it amongst the empties
with the broken glass and cigarette butts
*
spread your piss drunk thoughts
on the walls of my mind
you've left your mark
*
I can't shake thoughts of you
brutalizing my heart
dirty fighter hitting me sideways
with a cruel left hook
*
tasting my masochistic nature
knowing i'll come for you
on my knees crawling
always cumming back for more
*
leave my heart bruised and decimated
picking what's left of me off the floor
naked, shaken covered in the ashes
of what could be
*
~burned to the ground with what is~
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Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 9:30am
that's what love is, it comes at you sideways.
we stand & fight, Crim, trying to find value
among all the cigarette butts...
we stand & fight, Crim, trying to find value
among all the cigarette butts...
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 10:08am
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 9:32am
Brenda
Love takes on it own
form for each of us. Some tastes
we acquire and others are just
natural...
I love the ending
"shaken covered in the ashes
of what could be
*
~burned to the ground with what is~"
I think brilliant
Keith
Love takes on it own
form for each of us. Some tastes
we acquire and others are just
natural...
I love the ending
"shaken covered in the ashes
of what could be
*
~burned to the ground with what is~"
I think brilliant
Keith
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 10:09am
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
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23rd Aug 2016 11:00am
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 11:13am
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 1:05pm
This whole poem was a masterpiece. So beautifully written! Every word fit perfectly with the one before it. It was creative, it was raw, it was touching. There's a flood of emotions running through me right now. This is by far one of the most best poems I have ever read. It stimulates my mind in just the right way. Great poem thank you for sharing it!
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 3:15pm
thank you most graciously you are so very kind to say so.. you moved me deeply with your very generous comment.. putting a smile on my face this morning :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 3:12pm
There is beauty within these lines, although most
would say there isn't. But to be treated in such a
brutal way is both a joy to the giver and the one
who is treated in such a way . . . there is satisfaction..
would say there isn't. But to be treated in such a
brutal way is both a joy to the giver and the one
who is treated in such a way . . . there is satisfaction..
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 3:19pm
thank you Jerry for understanding I take pleasure in those that cut my heart.. it's masochistic I know but it's the truth.. I deeply appreciate you for seeing the beauty in this write and kind of relationship..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
Anonymous
23rd Aug 2016 3:25pm
So intensely raw.
It made my heart ache for you.
A love like this...is all consuming.
Regardless of its toxic nature. You hate to love it as you do, but can't imagine yourself without it.
You captured the depth of emotions perfectly.
No one can deliver as you can, my dear Crim 💓
Truly brilliant.
It made my heart ache for you.
A love like this...is all consuming.
Regardless of its toxic nature. You hate to love it as you do, but can't imagine yourself without it.
You captured the depth of emotions perfectly.
No one can deliver as you can, my dear Crim 💓
Truly brilliant.
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
thank you lovely Heart words can be cruel yet inevitably I find myself drawn to the hard ones.. overly kind and I get nervous..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
Anonymous
23rd Aug 2016 5:50pm
Ah, Love!. . .Such a dreadful, dreadful thing. . .but this here poem, my Queen, is genuine and heartfelt. . .my heart wept in silence. . .love to you. . .~Devlin.
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 10:40pm
thank you my beautiful Dark Queen though it was only words the left hook only a metaphor.. though I must be masochistic because inevitably I will come back for more with this person..
love you lady..
xo Brenda
love you lady..
xo Brenda
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 6:21pm
Whoa! This is too sexy. Passion is an abusive master.
The DA should issue an arrest warrant for crimsin for writing honest erotica.
The DA should issue an arrest warrant for crimsin for writing honest erotica.
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 10:42pm
thank you Snuggle though it was only a tongue lashing though it did indeed cut.. though I'm drawn to this so appreciate you finding the appeal in this :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
Anonymous
23rd Aug 2016 9:21pm
Perfectly described. .loved it Maestro.
Love Trish
Love Trish
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 10:43pm
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
Powerful writing Crim! ...and so sad as well. Those intense emotions that you tap into are what make you such a great poet! You definitely made me feel this one! Xx-sara
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23rd Aug 2016 10:44pm
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 10:47pm
Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
23rd Aug 2016 11:45pm
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
24th Aug 2016 1:00am
I learn from you Crim. Ecstasy may well be possible even in the midst of what many would call degradation. You're a fearless writer, and "masochist's kiss" is shocking (to many) but remains a love poem, albeit painful. Brilliant work!
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
25th Aug 2016 3:23am
thank you Sir Crow I'm a true masochist at heart I love the ones that burn..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
24th Aug 2016 2:34am
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25th Aug 2016 3:27am
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
24th Aug 2016 3:50pm
"tasting my masochistic nature
knowing i'll come for you
on my knees crawling
always cumming back for more" > brilliant wording, Crim! Just brilliant!!!
As a fellow masochist I could really feel this one, made me think of 'Do I Wanna Know' from Arctic Monkeys...
Love, Duende
knowing i'll come for you
on my knees crawling
always cumming back for more" > brilliant wording, Crim! Just brilliant!!!
As a fellow masochist I could really feel this one, made me think of 'Do I Wanna Know' from Arctic Monkeys...
Love, Duende
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
25th Aug 2016 3:24am
thank you lovely Duende so happy you as a sister masochist you felt this write :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
Anonymous
25th Aug 2016 00:05am
Brenda.. raw and powerful.. as always you kicked ass.. love you..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
25th Aug 2016 3:24am
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
25th Aug 2016 1:03pm
yes & please & thank you :)
hardwired to like it harder
loved this, beautiful one
xoxox
hardwired to like it harder
loved this, beautiful one
xoxox
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26th Aug 2016 2:17pm
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
26th Aug 2016 9:35pm
How much a painful cycle this is. In just an I stant I felt I saw the history of the fight, the bruising, and the sad reconciliation. And more tragic, the inevitable knowledge that it will come again.
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Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
27th Aug 2016 00:52am
I feel bad I got too extreme with metaphors it was a only a severe tongue lashing but being masochistic I know I will be back for more thank you for your kind thoughts..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. ~masochist's kiss~
29th Aug 2016 3:19am
Human behavior over love/lust/attachment/addiction is such a peculiar thing. You have a very fascinating, and provocative writing style. Nice ink!
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29th Aug 2016 3:35am
Re: Re. ~masochist's kiss~
29th Aug 2016 3:39am
Saw one of your forum posts recently, so i had to stop by and check out more of your intense writing.
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29th Aug 2016 3:44am