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YOU NEVER CALL
(Written for the "Something On Nature" competition)
Photo: Misty Trees By James Whitesmith
I’m your mother for heaven’s sake
would it hurt to pay me a visit?
step out of doors and take a break
that can’t be too difficult, is it?
Bathed in fluorescent facsimile of sunlight
you sit staring, transfixed by a screen
oblivious to the passing of day to night
seeking peace in an airbrushed pastoral scene
Observing seasons change from a 31st floor pew
one escalator, one elevator you’re there
In no way can equal my mountaintop view
reached by forested trail in crisp Autumn air
Come home, hijo mío, to your dear Mother earth
simplicity, peace, and harmony abound
fly back to the nest for your sacred rebirth
make haste for too soon you will lay underground
Photo: Misty Trees By James Whitesmith
I’m your mother for heaven’s sake
would it hurt to pay me a visit?
step out of doors and take a break
that can’t be too difficult, is it?
Bathed in fluorescent facsimile of sunlight
you sit staring, transfixed by a screen
oblivious to the passing of day to night
seeking peace in an airbrushed pastoral scene
Observing seasons change from a 31st floor pew
one escalator, one elevator you’re there
In no way can equal my mountaintop view
reached by forested trail in crisp Autumn air
Come home, hijo mío, to your dear Mother earth
simplicity, peace, and harmony abound
fly back to the nest for your sacred rebirth
make haste for too soon you will lay underground
Published 17th Oct 2015
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17th Oct 2015 1:24pm
gaia's jewish [?] ltm those opening lines sound juuuuust like my mama
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g, this is a really creative pov, truly an inspired write to motive us mouse potatoes to get out & smell the tilled soil
loved this
best of luck to you mon ami
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g, this is a really creative pov, truly an inspired write to motive us mouse potatoes to get out & smell the tilled soil
loved this
best of luck to you mon ami
17th Oct 2015 9:13pm
Merci beaucoup, Katja! You live in an ideal spot to enjoy Mother Nature. I am clad I could evoke thoughts of your Mama. I am more of a bear potato :)
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17th Oct 2015 9:14pm
Thank you Taryn! Your comment is spot-on. I appreciate your encouraging words.
17th Oct 2015 7:05pm
Spending too much time glued to the screen. The images are touched up, air brushed or idealized and nothing like the real thing. Mother Nature has every reason to complain. Can be a bit of a nag though. Excellent work Gahdess! You're such a good son....
17th Oct 2015 9:17pm
Thank you Crow! I laughed at your "good son" comment, repeating it in my best Yiddish accent :) Although I would more than likely get "why can't you be more like your brother?"
17th Oct 2015 10:29pm
Gorgeous lines to worship Mother Nature! We should live in and with her and not be spectators from without ... Good luck!
17th Oct 2015 10:51pm
Thank you Miss Chi! I completely agree. Thank yoiu for you beautiful comment!
30th Oct 2015 5:28am
Yes from the very first line I was hooked. Gahddess you have a certain way with which you write,
in that it just makes me always feel like you're talking straight to my face you are an amazing talent.
You take the reader were you want them to go and I'm no exception ,
What a view absolutely beautiful! good luck on the comp!
Love Zazzles
in that it just makes me always feel like you're talking straight to my face you are an amazing talent.
You take the reader were you want them to go and I'm no exception ,
What a view absolutely beautiful! good luck on the comp!
Love Zazzles
16th Nov 2015 5:26pm
Oh I loved this GW ! "hijo mio", yes visit your mother and give her a hug.....lol
I was just thinking the same when I was at the park this weekend, taking in all the colors and sketching ; )
Wonderful ink
I was just thinking the same when I was at the park this weekend, taking in all the colors and sketching ; )
Wonderful ink
17th Nov 2015 2:10am
I am so glad you like this Lena! I wrote it at the office from my 31st pew wishing I could be outside enjoying Autumn. Your time in the park sketching seems lovely. I'd love to see the sketches. Me encanta la frase "hijo mio" porque es tan intima y cariñoso.
6th Dec 2015 6:01pm
nothing like the simple appreciation of Nature to calm the spirit..her songs are the best..
24th Feb 2016 3:10pm
Wonderful! What a great message, delivered with humor as the nagging mother....
I do enjoy your wit. :)
Now I'm going to get away from this screen and go visit my mom!
Thanks for such an enjoyable read.
I do enjoy your wit. :)
Now I'm going to get away from this screen and go visit my mom!
Thanks for such an enjoyable read.
24th Feb 2016 9:05pm
Thank you so much Broken! That I've lured you to visit your mother is a win for me :)
