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-twinkle in the dark
This was inspired the other night when I noticed a friend looking at her boyfriend. It's quite something to actually get the feeling I got from randomly noticing her look at him at a bar on karaoke night, hah.
I said: Look at the way she looks at you...
He answered: I know, she's my queen...
the way she looks at him
reveals a blissful reverie
shining brighter than
any ordinary dream
for in that moment her eyes
are a gateway to the stars
giving two hearts hope
like a twinkle fighting for a chance
to light forevers dawn
and for him, her ardent gaze
can take back everything
love once lost to darkness;
so he willingly surrenders his kingdom
having found his queen
his twinkle, in the dark...
I said: Look at the way she looks at you...
He answered: I know, she's my queen...
the way she looks at him
reveals a blissful reverie
shining brighter than
any ordinary dream
for in that moment her eyes
are a gateway to the stars
giving two hearts hope
like a twinkle fighting for a chance
to light forevers dawn
and for him, her ardent gaze
can take back everything
love once lost to darkness;
so he willingly surrenders his kingdom
having found his queen
his twinkle, in the dark...
Published 22nd Sep 2015
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22nd Sep 2015 10:06pm
23rd Sep 2015 2:14pm
22nd Sep 2015 10:56pm
it's the one look
we'd all like to
take
sorry, I mean
get..:)
beautiful writing,
Fen...
we'd all like to
take
sorry, I mean
get..:)
beautiful writing,
Fen...
23rd Sep 2015 2:15pm
23rd Sep 2015 4:27am
23rd Sep 2015 2:15pm
23rd Sep 2015 7:41pm
why are my karaoke nights not half as inspiring as this [?] smh
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i dunno if you've ever read patrick rothfuss (yea i know you & books, but still) it's beautiful prose & this twinkle of yours reminded me of maybe my favourite passage every about falling in love ....
"It was worth blood and the fear of death to see her fall in love with him. Just a little. Just the first faint breath of love, so light she probably didn’t notice it herself. It wasn’t dramatic, like some bolt of lightning with a crack of thunder following. It was more like when flint strikes steel and the spark fades almost too fast for you to see. But still,
you know it’s there, down where you can’t see, kindling."
Patrick Rothfuss, The Wise Man's Fear
... dunno why i thought of that o.O but i did
anyhoo, this is beautifully written, Eddie, subtle & sure
much enjoyed
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i dunno if you've ever read patrick rothfuss (yea i know you & books, but still) it's beautiful prose & this twinkle of yours reminded me of maybe my favourite passage every about falling in love ....
"It was worth blood and the fear of death to see her fall in love with him. Just a little. Just the first faint breath of love, so light she probably didn’t notice it herself. It wasn’t dramatic, like some bolt of lightning with a crack of thunder following. It was more like when flint strikes steel and the spark fades almost too fast for you to see. But still,
you know it’s there, down where you can’t see, kindling."
Patrick Rothfuss, The Wise Man's Fear
... dunno why i thought of that o.O but i did
anyhoo, this is beautifully written, Eddie, subtle & sure
much enjoyed
24th Sep 2015 2:22am
Thanks so much for sharing. I loved that piece, especially the opening...
You always have something worth sharing. Don't forget that when it's dark, my dear. ..
You always have something worth sharing. Don't forget that when it's dark, my dear. ..
23rd Sep 2015 10:28pm
It's a beautiful thang' to witness 'what love looks like', isn't it?!
This is a lovely observation Fenom, penned with tenderness....
This is a lovely observation Fenom, penned with tenderness....
24th Sep 2015 2:24am
Honestly, I'd never seen a look like that. Except maybe some girl flick... hah...
Thanks for stopping by, Rain. ..
Thanks for stopping by, Rain. ..
19th Mar 2016 8:00am
maybe it is that look & not the smile that the mona lisa should be famous for....
19th Mar 2016 8:54am
Hehe, interesting thought my friend. Thanks for the visit and philosophy...
19th Mar 2016 8:59am
Hehe, interesting thought my friend. Thanks for the visit and philosophy...
19th Jun 2016 3:27pm
To notice expressions of others, one's surroundings, the beauty of life in general before expressing it is a gift.
19th Jun 2016 5:11pm
One most empaths are given...
Thanks for the read/add and kind words...
Thanks for the read/add and kind words...
