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The Sir To Come
Helene seems a little cool, unimpressed
By my demands that she submit
My insistence that she "call me Master"
With the adulation reserved for a prince
Helene indicates that I'm "too nice"
My show of arrogance just that:
A show
Lacking the conviction to back it up
Or a hand that's firm but never cruel
Gifted in the ways of discipline
Allowing her the knowledge that she's safe
Curled in the shelter of my shadow
"Perhaps one day," she sighs,
"You'll learn to capture me
Then become the Sir of my mind, body
And soul."
By my demands that she submit
My insistence that she "call me Master"
With the adulation reserved for a prince
Helene indicates that I'm "too nice"
My show of arrogance just that:
A show
Lacking the conviction to back it up
Or a hand that's firm but never cruel
Gifted in the ways of discipline
Allowing her the knowledge that she's safe
Curled in the shelter of my shadow
"Perhaps one day," she sighs,
"You'll learn to capture me
Then become the Sir of my mind, body
And soul."
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Re. The Sir To Come
8th Sep 2015 7:04pm
you'll always be Sir to me ;)
love this masterful and beautiful ink..
with love Crim
love this masterful and beautiful ink..
with love Crim
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8th Sep 2015 7:11pm
Re. The Sir To Come
8th Sep 2015 8:33pm
Agreed with Crim. And you can submit yourself to an uncruel man. I certainly have since my Sir. With man not cruel but firm and warm. If they can accept my pleasure to please, total devotion. A dom can be sculpted as well.....
In ways that jive with his personality. Sculpted by learning her pleasre in it, appreciating it, not being afraid of it.
But not changing the soul of you Crow. A girl would be crazy to want that.
Great write! Outside look in. Your an interesting man doll. One of a kind.
👽👽👽
Jennifer
In ways that jive with his personality. Sculpted by learning her pleasre in it, appreciating it, not being afraid of it.
But not changing the soul of you Crow. A girl would be crazy to want that.
Great write! Outside look in. Your an interesting man doll. One of a kind.
👽👽👽
Jennifer
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Re: Re. The Sir To Come
8th Sep 2015 9:49pm
I'm just beginning to learn about dominants and submissives. It's fascinating. I just used to think in the clichés of "let's play master and servant" but now understand that it's far more complex and potentially fulfilling than that. It can add depth to a relationship, and apparently a lot of fun, erotic and otherwise. Thanks Jennifer!
Re. The Sir To Come
8th Sep 2015 9:31pm
This is like a noble character, this Sir.
"Curled in the shelter of my shadow "
Is a lovely line and shows depth of being. I like this. There is psychology happening. The pretense of what we "should be" versus " who we be". Great job, Crowl
"Curled in the shelter of my shadow "
Is a lovely line and shows depth of being. I like this. There is psychology happening. The pretense of what we "should be" versus " who we be". Great job, Crowl
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Re: Re. The Sir To Come
8th Sep 2015 9:58pm
This would be a "sir" who's respectful and considerate of women even while engaged in a dom / sub relationship.
You're right about the pretense in the sense of finding the right role to satisfy a potential lover. It might mean going a little out of character or effecting a more profound change, in this case becoming tougher, more confident. The guy here is still trying to figure out what's expected of him and if he can deliver. Thanks DPW!
You're right about the pretense in the sense of finding the right role to satisfy a potential lover. It might mean going a little out of character or effecting a more profound change, in this case becoming tougher, more confident. The guy here is still trying to figure out what's expected of him and if he can deliver. Thanks DPW!
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9th Sep 2015 1:00am
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9th Sep 2015 9:25pm
Re. The Sir To Come
9th Sep 2015 1:37am
I think I would prefer a nice sir...but each to each's own eh.:) Good read Crowfly...and I still like the flying crow.
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Re: Re. The Sir To Come
9th Sep 2015 9:26pm
Re. The Sir To Come
9th Sep 2015 4:42am
Stunning lines in this *Sir Crow.. a balanced[uncruel] hand of a Master is a sexy pleasure all its own..
so I think this Helene needs a spanking, and good!
"Or a hand that's firm but never cruel"
&
"Curled in the shelter of my shadow"
~giving you dark poetry sighs fer these lines. gorgeous vibes!
Your open mind & soul bleed deeply from the thoughts portrayed throughout,
& if this is a newer topic for you.. must say-- you are "wingin it' w/ perfection.
further studies on subj matter are gonna bow & arch these ladies into lunette fashioned beggin, surely.
[..once/if fully ensconced. ]
very much enjoy your heartmind thoughts/share here, sweet friend. huggs n awwes
~d
so I think this Helene needs a spanking, and good!
"Or a hand that's firm but never cruel"
&
"Curled in the shelter of my shadow"
~giving you dark poetry sighs fer these lines. gorgeous vibes!
Your open mind & soul bleed deeply from the thoughts portrayed throughout,
& if this is a newer topic for you.. must say-- you are "wingin it' w/ perfection.
further studies on subj matter are gonna bow & arch these ladies into lunette fashioned beggin, surely.
[..once/if fully ensconced. ]
very much enjoy your heartmind thoughts/share here, sweet friend. huggs n awwes
~d
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Re: Re. The Sir To Come
9th Sep 2015 9:40pm
This is a newer topic for me Darksighs, and I'm trying to be careful. I wrote a couple I deleted because I thought they might be offensive to a few folks here. I might try some "further studies on subj matter." Thanks for the encouragement and your sweet comments!
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Re: Re. The Sir To Come
9th Sep 2015 9:50pm
Thanks Taryn. I'm often confused by how far a Dom should go, where the lines are drawn, if there's any actual cruelty. I think it's role playing without intent to inflict harm. I would hope for an underlying tenderness and generosity whatever the scenario, and respect beneath the fantasy. I try to imagine myself in the role of Dom and wonder if I would be perceived as being confident or tough enough to pull it off. I know I've got a lot to learn.
Re. The Sir To Come
9th Sep 2015 9:06pm
A gentle lover is revered as a precious gem, and also, receiving a Dom lover is sometimes better left as a fantasy. Having a shadow to comfort and protect you is always good. Much enjoyed this poem. - blue angel
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Re: Re. The Sir To Come
9th Sep 2015 9:52pm
Thank you Blue Angel! I agree. It's better to have a gentle lover, one who pays attention to your needs. Indulging in some kind of power play is questionable, particularly in the wrong hands.
Re. The Sir To Come
10th Sep 2015 00:28am
Kind of see the title as a foreshadowing that she may yet get here wish... And then some. There are so many points in a relationship that prove to be pivotal...this certainly seems to focus on one of those. Love the feeling we're just getting to the good part, even as we've come to the last line. Nicely written.
Michael
Michael
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Re. The Sir To Come
10th Sep 2015 7:51pm
i'm not one for D/s, preferring a s&m dynamic with an s-type, but this speaks to me & the parts of me that crave a decent DD/lg dynmic, crowman... most of the ladies above are spot on with their "firm but fair" analysis... there are aspects of guidance & nurturing few people consider, thinking it's all kinkyfuckery
loved this piece. truly
xoxox
loved this piece. truly
xoxox
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Re: Re. The Sir To Come
10th Sep 2015 8:09pm
This is pretty new to me, but I'm fascinated. Right now I'm basically observing and wondering. There's a lot more than kinkiness to the various possibilities, and I'm hoping to be educated. Thanks Katja!