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Consumed
Touch me in my dark places
with your luminous being
enter where no one dares tread
a maze of madness
only you can
see through to my core
so many false doors
leading no where
demons lurk here
with fierceness and fire
your pyro eyes
burn them to cinders
touch me in my dark places
hot spots that would scorch any other
you kiss gently and melt my scars
summoning the tenderness in me
I come on quiet feet
a submissive to her Master
you keep me safe
in the land of forgotten
gave me a name when I had none
with your luminous being
enter where no one dares tread
a maze of madness
only you can
see through to my core
so many false doors
leading no where
demons lurk here
with fierceness and fire
your pyro eyes
burn them to cinders
touch me in my dark places
hot spots that would scorch any other
you kiss gently and melt my scars
summoning the tenderness in me
I come on quiet feet
a submissive to her Master
you keep me safe
in the land of forgotten
gave me a name when I had none
Published 11th Jun 2015
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11th Jun 2015 7:36pm
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11th Jun 2015 7:59pm
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11th Jun 2015 8:17pm
outstanding, Crim, the final line knocked me out. you loaded all kinds of love in this...
11th Jun 2015 8:27pm
I thoroughly enjoyed this piece, Crim. It's beautifully introductory and lures the reader to her world. Leaves a feeling of privacy whilst confessional. I agree with John above that closing line knocks it out the ball park.
*I come on quiet feet*
*Touch me in my dark places*
Both beautifully memorable.
Thank you ever so much for the read!
Al .
*I come on quiet feet*
*Touch me in my dark places*
Both beautifully memorable.
Thank you ever so much for the read!
Al .
Anonymous
11th Jun 2015 8:51pm
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Anonymous
11th Jun 2015 9:34pm
"touch me in my dark places"
[you know i'm stealing this line, yes?]
Brenda, darkling, darling this sings such a melancholy ache in my secret heart
absolutely loved xo
[you know i'm stealing this line, yes?]
Brenda, darkling, darling this sings such a melancholy ache in my secret heart
absolutely loved xo
Anonymous
11th Jun 2015 9:47pm
crim,
your light touch on this burns deep!
tornado
your light touch on this burns deep!
tornado
11th Jun 2015 10:37pm
11th Jun 2015 11:28pm
You're back with a vengeance Crim! Such a delight! It would be a pleasure to melt your scars...
12th Jun 2015 00:28am
Ahhh, crimsin, luv ~ :-*
This is immersed in complexities of deepest needs of one's soul: aching tenderness, lasting love, profound caring, a safe haven. All is here imbued with such haunting bittersweet sadness... :-*
Your pen is mighty, luv. You are a creative perfect storm of glorious beauty whipped with winds of sheer perspicacity.
This is immersed in complexities of deepest needs of one's soul: aching tenderness, lasting love, profound caring, a safe haven. All is here imbued with such haunting bittersweet sadness... :-*
Your pen is mighty, luv. You are a creative perfect storm of glorious beauty whipped with winds of sheer perspicacity.
Anonymous
12th Jun 2015 3:42am
this has such honest depth and beauty, dear Crim
thanks for sharing with us
love and light
thanks for sharing with us
love and light
13th Jun 2015 10:39am
15th Jun 2015 2:24am
Welcome back, lovely lass.
This excellently written wistful message is well received by One who knows your dark places, of this I am certain.
your demons be damned in His hands.
you know,
C.
This excellently written wistful message is well received by One who knows your dark places, of this I am certain.
your demons be damned in His hands.
you know,
C.
15th Jun 2015 8:41pm
My darling Crim.. U always touch me right there!
a heart wrenching piece...
Loves you Brenda, I miss you...
Love
Jackie xoxoxo
a heart wrenching piece...
Loves you Brenda, I miss you...
Love
Jackie xoxoxo
Anonymous
16th Jun 2015 2:31pm
Sweet Crim.....I've missed you so much.....hope this finds you well.....luv everything about this write......welcome back with fire in your words.....xo :)
26th Jun 2015 5:56pm
Lovely Crim. Your softer side is just as thrilling as your other side(s). You know true devotion. Miss you much! - w/love - blue angel
Anonymous
19th Jul 2015 5:21am
Brenda, so nice to see you got your voice back.. Brilliant as always!!
Dave
Dave
