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COVETOUS
To covet your love is a sin I know
like one left dying in the desert heat
in vain I try to not covet the snow
my need for you is as strong and complete
When I come near oh how your eyes do shine
as one sincerely happy to see me
in your gaze my real and dream worlds align
and my imprisoned true self is set free
No sweeter sound in all nature exists
than my name by your alluring lips formed
seductive siren I cannot resist
by your healing kisses I am reborn
For your love I would risk a fall from grace
to now and always look upon your face
like one left dying in the desert heat
in vain I try to not covet the snow
my need for you is as strong and complete
When I come near oh how your eyes do shine
as one sincerely happy to see me
in your gaze my real and dream worlds align
and my imprisoned true self is set free
No sweeter sound in all nature exists
than my name by your alluring lips formed
seductive siren I cannot resist
by your healing kisses I am reborn
For your love I would risk a fall from grace
to now and always look upon your face
Published 31st May 2014
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31st May 2014 8:51am
Very well written
beautiful tribute to your beloved
wish I'd written one like this
well done Gahd
beautiful tribute to your beloved
wish I'd written one like this
well done Gahd
31st May 2014 10:20am
31st May 2014 9:16am
Wow!i love this but i love those last two lines more!
Good luck in your covet affair!lol!
Beautifully expressed!
xo!
Good luck in your covet affair!lol!
Beautifully expressed!
xo!
Thank you Peninnah! I am actually experimenting with the form. No affair just imagination.
31st May 2014 9:26am
"For your love I would risk a fall
from grace
to now and always look upon
your face"
oh my, that's some muse you have, cher. this is simply beautiful.
from grace
to now and always look upon
your face"
oh my, that's some muse you have, cher. this is simply beautiful.
31st May 2014 10:26am
Katja, thank you! I am trying to express the true and deep longing that accompanies love. I'd have to say this was based on a compilation of muses :) I am so glad that you think that it is beautiful. I truly love the the challenge of the sonnet structure.
6th Aug 2014 8:27am
This really is a lovely sonnet, Gahddess_Worship, luv :-*! Truly, you have done something exceptional with this form.
Lines I rather adore are:
in your gaze my real and dream worlds align
and my imprisoned true self is set free
No sweeter sound in all nature exists
than my name by your alluring lips formed
seductive siren I cannot resist
by your healing kisses I am reborn
You really have created something exquisitely lovely here, luv. :-*
Lines I rather adore are:
in your gaze my real and dream worlds align
and my imprisoned true self is set free
No sweeter sound in all nature exists
than my name by your alluring lips formed
seductive siren I cannot resist
by your healing kisses I am reborn
You really have created something exquisitely lovely here, luv. :-*
6th Aug 2014 6:14pm
Thank you so much, Savaja! "in your gaze my real and dream worlds align " was my most favorite line to write. The sonnet is definitely one of my favorite poetry forms. I love the precise rhyming structure. Shakespeare's sonnets, in my opinion, are some of the most romantic poems ever written...#29 is my absolute favorite.
