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Fuck You, I love You
I can't drink enough
to get you off my mind
you've wrapped around me
in a serpentine way
choking out thoughts
of all else
drowning in an ocean of liquor
still I look up, you are the moon
shining it's pallid light
on my tear stained cheeks
my cries falling on deaf ears
bleeding out my thoughts
I crash upon the shore
of the long forgotten
the rocks like your rough edges
tear at my tender flesh
I love the pain
reveling in it
I savor each gash
harden the fuck up
you would say
you linger in my soul
still here but absent
no longer writing
only here in the wee hours
when i'm sleeping
I miss you and your poetic
fuck you attitude
hard hitting bastard
what have you done
to the bitch in me?
how dare you reach
in with your gripping
poetic verse touching my tender spots
Fuck you, I love you
to get you off my mind
you've wrapped around me
in a serpentine way
choking out thoughts
of all else
drowning in an ocean of liquor
still I look up, you are the moon
shining it's pallid light
on my tear stained cheeks
my cries falling on deaf ears
bleeding out my thoughts
I crash upon the shore
of the long forgotten
the rocks like your rough edges
tear at my tender flesh
I love the pain
reveling in it
I savor each gash
harden the fuck up
you would say
you linger in my soul
still here but absent
no longer writing
only here in the wee hours
when i'm sleeping
I miss you and your poetic
fuck you attitude
hard hitting bastard
what have you done
to the bitch in me?
how dare you reach
in with your gripping
poetic verse touching my tender spots
Fuck you, I love you
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Re: Fuck You, I love You
9th Nov 2013 7:49pm
Great write!!!!
I have been in this kind of relationship with myself.
love everything about this piece because I can relate so much
well done :)
I have been in this kind of relationship with myself.
love everything about this piece because I can relate so much
well done :)
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re: Re: Fuck You, I love You
9th Nov 2013 8:13pm
Re: Fuck You, I love You
9th Nov 2013 7:51pm
AWESOME Piece sweets!!!
I Loved the first line!!
Great job sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
I Loved the first line!!
Great job sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
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9th Nov 2013 8:14pm
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9th Nov 2013 7:53pm
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9th Nov 2013 8:15pm
Re: Fuck You, I love You
9th Nov 2013 8:33pm
Nice write crimson. Ahh, true emotion you’ve laid on your sleeve for all to see. This is a wonderful and horrific relationship that shows softness with an hardened outside coating. Rock on lady.
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re: Re: Fuck You, I love You
9th Nov 2013 9:02pm
thank you Dirt.. I feel I've revealed to much with my soft inside and hard coat.. peace Crim :)
Re: Fuck You, I love You
9th Nov 2013 8:38pm
slap that dude, Crim! you get your point across in this work. I love tough babes...
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re: Re: Fuck You, I love You
9th Nov 2013 9:03pm
thank you John.. though I wish he'd slap me in the right places ;) I got to toughen the hell up and let go.. thank you again for you visit.. peace Crim
Re: Fuck You, I love You
9th Nov 2013 10:27pm
Wonderful Write to slaps and a kiss...always the fine line-Excellence Dear Crim!!!
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re: Re: Fuck You, I love You
10th Nov 2013 00:23am
Re: Fuck You, I love You
9th Nov 2013 11:47pm
A truly relatable and self-exposing
write Unveiling.
The bottle never rids us of the
memories but it is so good, (to me
anyways), to turn to.
Great scribe... Pan
write Unveiling.
The bottle never rids us of the
memories but it is so good, (to me
anyways), to turn to.
Great scribe... Pan
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re: Re: Fuck You, I love You
10th Nov 2013 00:24am
you're right Pan the bottle is good to me too :) thank you for dropping in and visiting me :) peace Crim
Re: Fuck You, I love You
10th Nov 2013 00:08am
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10th Nov 2013 00:25am
Re: Fuck You, I love You
10th Nov 2013 00:27am
Ahh, your muses are anger and love and despair, what a lethal cocktail!
Enjoying your ink, Crim, although you're facing tough emotions.
Enjoying your ink, Crim, although you're facing tough emotions.
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re: Re: Fuck You, I love You
10th Nov 2013 3:38am
Too emotional needlessly i'm afraid for my own good.. thank you Atakti for the visit.. peace Crim
Re: Fuck You, I love You
Anonymous
10th Nov 2013 1:15am
If I told you I understand every word, feel every tear, would you believe me? Learning not to need anyone but yourself is such a hard lesson. But these poems tell me you are learning it and you will (eventually) see yourself for the beautiful being you are - with or without anyone to tell you.
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re: Re: Fuck You, I love You
10th Nov 2013 3:40am
I believe you beautiful Petit.. relying on me great insight thank you lovely one.. peace Crim :)
Re: Fuck You, I love You
10th Nov 2013 1:17am
Dear GAWD, I needed this. Reminds me too much of myself.
Hope you are well. Hugs
Hope you are well. Hugs
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10th Nov 2013 3:41am
Re: Fuck You, I love You
10th Nov 2013 3:19am
re: Re: Fuck You, I love You
10th Nov 2013 3:42am
I don't know Gemini he might just hate this.. though I thank you for the encouragement :) peace Crim
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15th Nov 2013 2:04pm
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