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Don't even
Don't even tell me that you think I'm loathing;
I already know it.
Don't even tell me that you think you're better;
I suppose I already know it.
I can't wait here and wither away while you laugh.
I can't sit here and wait while you continually condescend me.
I don't need this right now.
and I definitely don't need you.
I already know it.
Don't even tell me that you think you're better;
I suppose I already know it.
I can't wait here and wither away while you laugh.
I can't sit here and wait while you continually condescend me.
I don't need this right now.
and I definitely don't need you.
Published 19th Sep 2013
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21st Sep 2013 7:15pm
I think that you did real good
on this one Zexion.
Your spelling and punctuation
is all good and in order.
One thing that I've noticed on
here though is that with the
exception of the commas and semi-
colons I would leave-out the periods
It seems to impede the flow of your
scribe.
Other than that it all looks good to
me.
You made your point to your intended
receiver and didn't ramble-on.
And then you finished it off nicely
by letting them know your solution to
the situation.
A nice to-the-point write.
Good work... Pan
on this one Zexion.
Your spelling and punctuation
is all good and in order.
One thing that I've noticed on
here though is that with the
exception of the commas and semi-
colons I would leave-out the periods
It seems to impede the flow of your
scribe.
Other than that it all looks good to
me.
You made your point to your intended
receiver and didn't ramble-on.
And then you finished it off nicely
by letting them know your solution to
the situation.
A nice to-the-point write.
Good work... Pan
21st Sep 2013 7:36pm
