Miscellaneous Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Great Day For A Cool Swim
Preston and some friends arrived at the beach house
just in time to see Juliette swimming around
in a black bikini before she heard a
voice say "Great day for a cool swim, Darling Sweetheart!"
just in time to see Juliette swimming around
in a black bikini before she heard a
voice say "Great day for a cool swim, Darling Sweetheart!"
#beach
#fiction
#friendship
#summer
#water
25 reads
0 Comments
Tasty Delights
When you expire
I'm sure you'll burn in fire
Time to grill you up
I'm sure you'll burn in fire
Time to grill you up
#death
#fire
#haiku
#satirical
#funny
37 reads
6 Comments
Unseen
Trek onward to overcome the fear
When it grates my flesh but feeds my spirit all the things I yearn to hear
Truths of grace breaking through
Undeserving yet still I hope in the invisible You
Debts cry to control
Lay claims to the will to reposes by default, my soul
With interests built up, the entitlement of the betrayed
Taken apart, dissect the heart, when my actions are filleted
You’ve every right to reject but still you love when I am unlovely
Fear cast out of perfect affections lavished upon
Beauty from the ashes when...
When it grates my flesh but feeds my spirit all the things I yearn to hear
Truths of grace breaking through
Undeserving yet still I hope in the invisible You
Debts cry to control
Lay claims to the will to reposes by default, my soul
With interests built up, the entitlement of the betrayed
Taken apart, dissect the heart, when my actions are filleted
You’ve every right to reject but still you love when I am unlovely
Fear cast out of perfect affections lavished upon
Beauty from the ashes when...
#Christian
#faith
#WritingPoetry
#fear
#NaPoWriMo2024
39 reads
0 Comments
Closeness
You’re somewhere close by
You’re watching
You’re waiting
It’s okay
I’m waiting too
I’m here only for you
We’ve met a thousand times before
We’ll meet a thousand times again
Yet I can’t remember what your face looks like
But I will know it when I do
You’re watching
You’re waiting
It’s okay
I’m waiting too
I’m here only for you
We’ve met a thousand times before
We’ll meet a thousand times again
Yet I can’t remember what your face looks like
But I will know it when I do
#relationships
#dreams
#spiritual
60 reads
5 Comments
Hereditary
I'm destined to fail
Both parents unsuccessful
Can I make a change?
Both parents unsuccessful
Can I make a change?
#hope
#motivational
#uplifting
#choices
#risk
41 reads
6 Comments
I Am Greed
The whisper of the devil
Tricking you
Tickling you with false comfort
Tempting you with my six deadly sin friends
Lust gluttony and sloth
And wrath envy and pride
I feed humanity with emptiness
False hope and broken dreams
I will destroy your spirit
As I tease you with material consumption
I control your desires
The apple in Eden
I am greed
I am the downfall of empires
All empires
Man worships my false value
Yet values my importance
To feed his ego
I am greed
The more I am...
Tricking you
Tickling you with false comfort
Tempting you with my six deadly sin friends
Lust gluttony and sloth
And wrath envy and pride
I feed humanity with emptiness
False hope and broken dreams
I will destroy your spirit
As I tease you with material consumption
I control your desires
The apple in Eden
I am greed
I am the downfall of empires
All empires
Man worships my false value
Yet values my importance
To feed his ego
I am greed
The more I am...
#greed
39 reads
4 Comments
Let me be your story
Come and be in my book
Let me be your story
I could write a thousand words a day
With the right inspiration
Play me your souls music
Teach me the worlds sounds
Educate me on the ways of being
So I can prosper all the more
Let us surrender to ourselves
We can rejoice in this blessed day that be
We can laugh and cry, perhaps touch the sky
But we can be together whilst we do
Be my daily update
Tell me todays news
Help me piece the puzzle together
Because I sure as hell don’t know!
Let me be your story
I could write a thousand words a day
With the right inspiration
Play me your souls music
Teach me the worlds sounds
Educate me on the ways of being
So I can prosper all the more
Let us surrender to ourselves
We can rejoice in this blessed day that be
We can laugh and cry, perhaps touch the sky
But we can be together whilst we do
Be my daily update
Tell me todays news
Help me piece the puzzle together
Because I sure as hell don’t know!
#myself
#WritingPoetry
#NaPoWriMo2024
48 reads
5 Comments
In Plain Sight
On holiday in Lisbon, going round the zoo,
I suddenly remembered that I had a job to do.
I had to write with some aplomb, as soon as I could;
with so much going on, gracious me would it be good?!
Well, I'd already had rum, so while I sat down to think,
I ordered ravioli, nicely washed down with more drink.
It was an urban joke, being so very sleep-deprived;
Inspiration really lagged, but regardless, it arrived.
To finish this, I had to have a stab, late at night.
When my phone began to buzz, it heralded the light.
Although my work...
I suddenly remembered that I had a job to do.
I had to write with some aplomb, as soon as I could;
with so much going on, gracious me would it be good?!
Well, I'd already had rum, so while I sat down to think,
I ordered ravioli, nicely washed down with more drink.
It was an urban joke, being so very sleep-deprived;
Inspiration really lagged, but regardless, it arrived.
To finish this, I had to have a stab, late at night.
When my phone began to buzz, it heralded the light.
Although my work...
#PowerOfWords
#mystery
#NaPoWriMo2024
45 reads
6 Comments
A Screaming Wind
His voice hurts her ears.
Piercing.
A mouthy earring.
Dangling,
on the edge of being silenced.
Piercing.
A mouthy earring.
Dangling,
on the edge of being silenced.
#anxiety
#silence
#PowerOfWords #unicorns
#PowerOfWords #unicorns
60 reads
1 Comment
It's What They Tell Me
I am a true American heroine
ate a little too much Florentine, and salmon
at Sunday brunch, and again at Monday’s lunch
as there is nothing else to do with leftovers.
You search for yourself in my profile
not how it is written, but in between, where
you’ve bitten more than you can swallow,
need to mould me by not mine, but your design
place me high on your angelic pedestal
an itch in my big toe has me fumbling fast
towards to your feet, wrapped neat in a ribbon
we tie up my evening with playing Juliet
To You,...
ate a little too much Florentine, and salmon
at Sunday brunch, and again at Monday’s lunch
as there is nothing else to do with leftovers.
You search for yourself in my profile
not how it is written, but in between, where
you’ve bitten more than you can swallow,
need to mould me by not mine, but your design
place me high on your angelic pedestal
an itch in my big toe has me fumbling fast
towards to your feet, wrapped neat in a ribbon
we tie up my evening with playing Juliet
To You,...
#betrayal
36 reads
4 Comments
Ode to Filled Doughnuts
Just sit right back and hear this tale,
the tale of a faithful treat.
It started out as a lump of dough
and now it’s quite elite.
The bakers fried that lump of dough
and found it pretty grand.
And so they made a bunch of them,
to help their list expand.
They paired it well with sugar dust
and fruit with yummy cream.
They even cut the middles out
and glazed them to a sheen.
But best of all was when they found
a way to fill them up.
They puffed them up with jam and cream
and pushed the limit so extreme,...
the tale of a faithful treat.
It started out as a lump of dough
and now it’s quite elite.
The bakers fried that lump of dough
and found it pretty grand.
And so they made a bunch of them,
to help their list expand.
They paired it well with sugar dust
and fruit with yummy cream.
They even cut the middles out
and glazed them to a sheen.
But best of all was when they found
a way to fill them up.
They puffed them up with jam and cream
and pushed the limit so extreme,...
#unicorns
29 reads
4 Comments
Snowy
Snow on mountains fall
Biting wind stings nose and cheeks
Winter lingers on
Biting wind stings nose and cheeks
Winter lingers on
#winter
#nature
#snow
53 reads
8 Comments
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