Rap Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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rap seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
17th May 2022 6:48pm
17th May 2022 6:48pm
Get Shot In The Face Like 50
#dark
#murder
#death
#WritingPoetry
#rap
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
17th May 2022 6:45pm
17th May 2022 6:45pm
Empty Like Them, I Could Never Be
Empty Like Them, I Could Never Be"
Me being sad, is what makes the family happy/
So when God let em breed, he made their kids cheap & tacky
In their eyes I see nothing, like their lives are unhappy/
The only family I have with a soul, is that of my Staffy
They could not control me, so had to teach me a lesson/
But then my God for a laugh, give em kids on the Spectrum
Now I think this upsets em, they can't recreate mine/
And when every word is a weapon, I get to eat like I dine
If these freaks could just die, I would be highly amused/ ...
Me being sad, is what makes the family happy/
So when God let em breed, he made their kids cheap & tacky
In their eyes I see nothing, like their lives are unhappy/
The only family I have with a soul, is that of my Staffy
They could not control me, so had to teach me a lesson/
But then my God for a laugh, give em kids on the Spectrum
Now I think this upsets em, they can't recreate mine/
And when every word is a weapon, I get to eat like I dine
If these freaks could just die, I would be highly amused/ ...
#LifeStruggles
#LifeAsAWriter
#MyInspiration
#WritingPoetry
#rap
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
2nd May 2022 2:44pm
2nd May 2022 2:44pm
Watch I Dead Your Response
Watch I Dead Your Response"
For just £500, I found where she lived/
Now the sound she might hear, is rounds in her kids
Couldn't drown me as a kid, nor control me as a man/
With all this talent to give, you should hold out your hand
In a hole like flange, is where they planned to see me/
Yet being the bolder man, they weren't the Man like Beenie
I can see em moulding scams, with a plan to beat me/
But when I cook em like scran, they soon run to EP (Essex Police)
I dropped an EP and a LP, it was then I was jailed/
I wrote a letter to the...
For just £500, I found where she lived/
Now the sound she might hear, is rounds in her kids
Couldn't drown me as a kid, nor control me as a man/
With all this talent to give, you should hold out your hand
In a hole like flange, is where they planned to see me/
Yet being the bolder man, they weren't the Man like Beenie
I can see em moulding scams, with a plan to beat me/
But when I cook em like scran, they soon run to EP (Essex Police)
I dropped an EP and a LP, it was then I was jailed/
I wrote a letter to the...
#dark
#lyrics
#WritingPoetry
#PowerOfWords
#rap
478 reads
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
20th Mar 2022 5:06pm
20th Mar 2022 5:06pm
Generation Snowflake
Generation Snowflake"
I don't tiptoe for snowflakes, nor walk on eggshells/
I don't sugarcoat sh**, whether dead or sent jail
If they said it I didn't hear it, if I wrote it, I did/
If you hate it so be it, ain't it better than bodies instead
He's obviously off his rocker, should be off with his head/
Best make sure his coffee's a Mocha, & he's properly fed
He never heard his father, or what authority said/
Until somebody hurt his father, & put him in a hospital bed
Now in a hospital bed, cuffed up is where he lies/
Repeatedly...
I don't tiptoe for snowflakes, nor walk on eggshells/
I don't sugarcoat sh**, whether dead or sent jail
If they said it I didn't hear it, if I wrote it, I did/
If you hate it so be it, ain't it better than bodies instead
He's obviously off his rocker, should be off with his head/
Best make sure his coffee's a Mocha, & he's properly fed
He never heard his father, or what authority said/
Until somebody hurt his father, & put him in a hospital bed
Now in a hospital bed, cuffed up is where he lies/
Repeatedly...
#dark
#music
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritingPoetry
#rap
1044 reads
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
7th Mar 2022 2:32pm
7th Mar 2022 2:32pm
Britain, US and Russia
#soldiers
#war
#WritingPoetry
#rap
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
327 reads
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LibraSoul96
Poem Published
4th Mar 2022 00:42am
4th Mar 2022 00:42am
Tell Em
Put my soul in these verses
I banish all evil plotted against me and ill curses
I am bathed in the power of my ancestors and predecessors
I am the branch that still is hanging on from enduring the
Cracks and lashes of pains hands
Wash me off and make me whole again
Remove the dirt and stained particles left from sin
My rivals are like Pinocchio nose grows when lying to crucify my name
Just like Geppetto, I pull the strings and this is my game
For like a MacBook emblem come and bite me
End up like Snow White collapsing from that apple now...
I banish all evil plotted against me and ill curses
I am bathed in the power of my ancestors and predecessors
I am the branch that still is hanging on from enduring the
Cracks and lashes of pains hands
Wash me off and make me whole again
Remove the dirt and stained particles left from sin
My rivals are like Pinocchio nose grows when lying to crucify my name
Just like Geppetto, I pull the strings and this is my game
For like a MacBook emblem come and bite me
End up like Snow White collapsing from that apple now...
#rap
1068 reads
3 Comments
MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
22nd Feb 2022 11:06pm
22nd Feb 2022 11:06pm
Christopher Dean
#dark
#bullying
#funny
#rap
#disappointment
611 reads
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
21st Feb 2022 5:06pm
21st Feb 2022 5:06pm
Be Careful What You Wish For
Be Careful What You Wish For"
Being cursed with depression, it's all words and weed/
And when the hurt it is present, the verses start bleed
I've been high and been drunk, I was sunk and emerged/
All my life I've been unwanted, by both him and by her
From these words I have gained, what my family all lack/
Yet it hurts to maintain, when all my brain does is rap
I've been drained by a dream, that they all tried prevent/
Still my name's in the scene, for how I vent with my pen
From the beginning to end, they'll say I sin when I write/
And...
Being cursed with depression, it's all words and weed/
And when the hurt it is present, the verses start bleed
I've been high and been drunk, I was sunk and emerged/
All my life I've been unwanted, by both him and by her
From these words I have gained, what my family all lack/
Yet it hurts to maintain, when all my brain does is rap
I've been drained by a dream, that they all tried prevent/
Still my name's in the scene, for how I vent with my pen
From the beginning to end, they'll say I sin when I write/
And...
#abuse
#dreams
#LifeAsAWriter
#LifeGoals
#rap
1165 reads
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
21st Feb 2022 1:32pm
21st Feb 2022 1:32pm
My Dead Uncle Bred A Nonce
#secrets
#family
#abuse
#WritingPoetry
#rap
318 reads
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
20th Feb 2022 8:40pm
20th Feb 2022 8:40pm
Life Is A Game (37 games/16 bars)
Life Is A Game" (37 games/16 bars)
You gotta take Risk, in this game, Game of Life/
To tell the truth is Taboo, they'll Buckaroo your rights
This isn't a Trivial Pursuit, like a game of Guess Who/
Playing Cards Against Humanity, you don't have a Clue
Dominant Species, with Battleship, have A Ticket To Ride/
Either Connect 4 on The Power Grid, or it's Trouble tonight
Summoner Wars, Through The Ages, Don't Break The Ice/
Say Anything and it's Dungeon, Chessboard your rights
Make you Scrabble for Monopoly, trapped in a Mousetrap/
Run by the...
You gotta take Risk, in this game, Game of Life/
To tell the truth is Taboo, they'll Buckaroo your rights
This isn't a Trivial Pursuit, like a game of Guess Who/
Playing Cards Against Humanity, you don't have a Clue
Dominant Species, with Battleship, have A Ticket To Ride/
Either Connect 4 on The Power Grid, or it's Trouble tonight
Summoner Wars, Through The Ages, Don't Break The Ice/
Say Anything and it's Dungeon, Chessboard your rights
Make you Scrabble for Monopoly, trapped in a Mousetrap/
Run by the...
#corruption
#LifeStruggles
#WritingPoetry
#LifeCycle
#rap
922 reads
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
19th Feb 2022 6:00pm
19th Feb 2022 6:00pm
Get Abused For The Bants
#dark
#funny
#WritingPoetry
#rap
#pandemic
314 reads
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
15th Feb 2022 1:46pm
15th Feb 2022 1:46pm
Truffle Butter
Truffle Butter"
Why I rap, cause I'm gifted, I only rap it if I lived it/
If you blinked for a second, you would miss it for a minute
Give a sh** about an image, never finished, never will/
I think they wanna see me dead, like they did to Emmett Till
Never beg a record deal, nor a rapper for a friend/
Nowadays rappers squeal, and what they rapping is pretend
Aged ten when I first rapped, was when I first backed pen/
It was then that I first clapped, a couple verse for revenge
I was thirsty for the ink, and on the power I was drunk/
All...
Why I rap, cause I'm gifted, I only rap it if I lived it/
If you blinked for a second, you would miss it for a minute
Give a sh** about an image, never finished, never will/
I think they wanna see me dead, like they did to Emmett Till
Never beg a record deal, nor a rapper for a friend/
Nowadays rappers squeal, and what they rapping is pretend
Aged ten when I first rapped, was when I first backed pen/
It was then that I first clapped, a couple verse for revenge
I was thirsty for the ink, and on the power I was drunk/
All...
#books
#lyrics
#LifeAsAWriter
#PowerOfWords
#rap
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