Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#heartbroken
heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
You Are Such A Lying Slut!
I don't believe this, Sarah!
Both Kevin and Adrienne
called me on the phone
and told me that since I've
been gone, you allowed
yourself to get naked and
banged by Leonardo for
some pornographic film!
Both Kevin and Adrienne
called me on the phone
and told me that since I've
been gone, you allowed
yourself to get naked and
banged by Leonardo for
some pornographic film!
#dialogue
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#heartbroken
#sex
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Impression
I've seen the good, and I've seen the bad. I've never been happier than when I'd been had.
My life took a twist and my life took a turn. My life knows what it is to lose what I had to hold.
I've seen the light and I've seen the dark. It was the brightness of you that lit the spark.
If you could forgive and you could forget I'm sure that a wedding we would set.
I'd never forsake you. I'd never leave. This heart is yours that I wear of my sleeve.
Our destiny sits within your hands. My heart is as full as the bottle fills the sands.
You'll never know how much I miss...
My life took a twist and my life took a turn. My life knows what it is to lose what I had to hold.
I've seen the light and I've seen the dark. It was the brightness of you that lit the spark.
If you could forgive and you could forget I'm sure that a wedding we would set.
I'd never forsake you. I'd never leave. This heart is yours that I wear of my sleeve.
Our destiny sits within your hands. My heart is as full as the bottle fills the sands.
You'll never know how much I miss...
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#regret
#rejection
#sadness
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Nightingale
A midnight full of potential that lets me down without notice.
I've touched eternity without admission in hopes of a reprieve from a destiny that eluded me.
A shade of blue that masks suicide from within.
Love couldn't save her from herself. Love won't save me.
I purchased a romance that was out of my price range.
Destiny as it seems holds a grudge against those less fortunate.
I've touched eternity without admission in hopes of a reprieve from a destiny that eluded me.
A shade of blue that masks suicide from within.
Love couldn't save her from herself. Love won't save me.
I purchased a romance that was out of my price range.
Destiny as it seems holds a grudge against those less fortunate.
#grief
#heartbroken
#loneliness #regret
#loneliness #regret
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My Eternal Flame
I’m reaching out for you
Feel my warmth come through
Screaming out your name
My love is driving me insane
Walking in the rain
Feel the touch of my face
You’re not here – to dry my tears away
How can I make you see
I am the other half
That reflects your eyes
Weren't you the love of my life?
My heart will never find peace
I always feel that something’s missing
Something’s missing....
My eternal flame
Feel my warmth come through
Screaming out your name
My love is driving me insane
Walking in the rain
Feel the touch of my face
You’re not here – to dry my tears away
How can I make you see
I am the other half
That reflects your eyes
Weren't you the love of my life?
My heart will never find peace
I always feel that something’s missing
Something’s missing....
My eternal flame
#breakup
#conflict
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#love
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Yearning to be a grandparent and angered because your kids refuse your wish?
By Stanley Collymore
Another spin on this story of the
mother angered because her
two daughters are clearly
resolutely determined that they don't want
any children, therefore basically depriving
her of the grandchildren, she obsessively
wants is obviously this! It's actually, their
lives, not your own, that you simply lived
as you wanted to. So sensibly accord to
them the same right of choice! Besides,
the reality generally is, that people, who
theoretically, would actually undeniably
make discernibly superb...
Another spin on this story of the
mother angered because her
two daughters are clearly
resolutely determined that they don't want
any children, therefore basically depriving
her of the grandchildren, she obsessively
wants is obviously this! It's actually, their
lives, not your own, that you simply lived
as you wanted to. So sensibly accord to
them the same right of choice! Besides,
the reality generally is, that people, who
theoretically, would actually undeniably
make discernibly superb...
#anger
#disappointment
#frustration
#heartbroken
#sadness
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October Poems 2024 >> broken strings—broken wings
A poem for each day of the month in which I was born
DAY 29
broken strings—broken wings
the spot you’ve left here vacant
no longer find i fragrant,
for all your charm has vanished with the wind.
the voices i am hearing
have petrified my bearing
for i am by their told-you-so chagrined.
that cold october morning,
without the slightest warning,
your heart repurposed was no longer mine,
for you had...
DAY 29
broken strings—broken wings
the spot you’ve left here vacant
no longer find i fragrant,
for all your charm has vanished with the wind.
the voices i am hearing
have petrified my bearing
for i am by their told-you-so chagrined.
that cold october morning,
without the slightest warning,
your heart repurposed was no longer mine,
for you had...
#birthday
#heartbroken
#LifeAsAWriter
#LifeCycle
#UnrequitedLove
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WHAT YOU NEED AND WANT
It's me again the story teller of unspoken words, ✍️ I would like to have a few minutes of your time.⌚ As we exchange thoughts, regarding our lives as man to woman and woman to man. 🤔 For sure we all have gone through some changes, before in our own lives with relationships of dealing, with someone creeping into the deepness of the darkness. Thinking that the grass is greener on the other side.🤨 Only to discover that what happens in the 🌑 dark always come to the🕯️ light. But yet they are trying to hide the truth of being unfaithful,...
#disappointment
#emotions
#heartbroken
#hope
#love
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Destruction

#dreams
#ForbiddenLove
#heartbroken
#lover
#passion
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Incompatible
i want to know all your secrets
but you remain so distant
as you walk through my fire
on eggshells and broken glass.
You're not made for crying
and I don't understand
as I stumble through your dreams.
Somewhere in the future
or somewhere in the never
we may come to understand,
but for now, the difference is the pain.
Our love slightly fades
without a tear or a smile
the way the summer herds ...
but you remain so distant
as you walk through my fire
on eggshells and broken glass.
You're not made for crying
and I don't understand
as I stumble through your dreams.
Somewhere in the future
or somewhere in the never
we may come to understand,
but for now, the difference is the pain.
Our love slightly fades
without a tear or a smile
the way the summer herds ...
#heartbroken
#LifeAsAWriter
#love #sadness
#love #sadness
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Empty
The difference only a few days can make
How a heart filled with love can so easily break
A voice that gave me peace and now it haunts me
A face that brightened my day and now it taunts me
With thoughts of a future that we'll never share
A dream once so beautiful is now a nightmare
The sum of my fears has come to fruition
My mind knew better but my heart wouldn't listen
Wrapped up in a fantasy, pretending it was real
Of course I knew better but I wanted to feel ...
How a heart filled with love can so easily break
A voice that gave me peace and now it haunts me
A face that brightened my day and now it taunts me
With thoughts of a future that we'll never share
A dream once so beautiful is now a nightmare
The sum of my fears has come to fruition
My mind knew better but my heart wouldn't listen
Wrapped up in a fantasy, pretending it was real
Of course I knew better but I wanted to feel ...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#hurt
#love
#regret
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All the fear ahead, without you
We are only strangers
Looking for some reason to live
But what if we seem to shiver
Just looking through the horizon
Poor strangers we are
That can't look so far
Tiny eyes opening hard
When there are no twinkling stars
Paradise in disgrace
Landscape over my shoulder
And where are you now?
Aging before I get older
So I pray that I could die
But the pain never seems to surface
These tears that I cry
Emptiness making me nervous
I wish it could be enough
All the fear ahead
And...
Looking for some reason to live
But what if we seem to shiver
Just looking through the horizon
Poor strangers we are
That can't look so far
Tiny eyes opening hard
When there are no twinkling stars
Paradise in disgrace
Landscape over my shoulder
And where are you now?
Aging before I get older
So I pray that I could die
But the pain never seems to surface
These tears that I cry
Emptiness making me nervous
I wish it could be enough
All the fear ahead
And...
#heartbroken
#LookingForLove
#love
#rhyming
#sadness
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Living my life in your hands
Living my life in your hands
Because Father, you also own me
Also, I am one of your sons
I know that you have lots of other children
Besides me
Also, we are all siblings
And we have each other
We hope we are going to be here
Tomorrow
If our Father keep us alive
Also, we love our life
That our Father gave to us
Yes, my siblings love me
Are now teenager
Also, I can't believe how fast they are growing
Every year
Soon their teenager life will be over
And they will start living their youth life
Also, we pray...
Because Father, you also own me
Also, I am one of your sons
I know that you have lots of other children
Besides me
Also, we are all siblings
And we have each other
We hope we are going to be here
Tomorrow
If our Father keep us alive
Also, we love our life
That our Father gave to us
Yes, my siblings love me
Are now teenager
Also, I can't believe how fast they are growing
Every year
Soon their teenager life will be over
And they will start living their youth life
Also, we pray...
#boredom
#frustration
#greed
#grief
#heartbroken
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