Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#heartbroken
heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Made just made for two
They say that what's in the darkness eventually, it's seen through the lights of day, for sure it holds true when things, in a relationship starts to feel different with no emotions or love 🤨 For the deepness of what love was, it wasn't no more, than empty moments of what is gone between two people once in love. But yet it's here and in full bloom, that it's over when the heart becomes, heavier and uncomfortable with inner pain that goes deeper than deep. Yet it was built on love and honor and respect, but even that slowly disappeared into, the deepness of the darkness. Replace by...
#bittersweet
#heartbroken
#hope
#love
#sadness
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choker
Poetry died
the day you left me:
you robbed me of
all my beautiful words
and lavished them
on some pretty girl.
You decorated her
with the stolen verses
that my heart
had sung for you.
Now all I do is paint-
paint myself with tears;
even the color is pale-
artless work on a broken canvas.
Why don't you take away
my pearly tear drops:
string them together
to make a choker;
a souvenir-
to gift her
when you choke her heart too!
.
the day you left me:
you robbed me of
all my beautiful words
and lavished them
on some pretty girl.
You decorated her
with the stolen verses
that my heart
had sung for you.
Now all I do is paint-
paint myself with tears;
even the color is pale-
artless work on a broken canvas.
Why don't you take away
my pearly tear drops:
string them together
to make a choker;
a souvenir-
to gift her
when you choke her heart too!
.
#betrayal
#breakup
#heartbroken #love
#heartbroken #love
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Becomes to much
As long as you can make sense of the things, that have silently appeared in your life and world, 🌎 that has been affecting your own thoughts and insight and mind. For as the weight slowly, begins to come more heavier then you can understand, or tolerate the pain that seems to slowly bring, with it's a deepness of hurt. 😞 As sorrow begins eating away, at your own subconscious thoughts, that have been broken into pieces of the heart. 💔 For sure life was never meant to be easy, for everything that we have to go through, is not what we imagine life to be. For sure it's...
#confusion
#frustration
#heartbroken
#regret
#sadness
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rusted memories
rusted memories
jabbed my heart:
my soul's turning sepsis
gradually it will rot
oozing odour of toxicity
which has already started
paralyzing me,
my senses are going numb;
lockjaw of mind-
cant' enunciate feelings.
hurry, inject me a shot!
jab me with sanity,
eliminate the microbial apparitions
of my infected past
haunting the catacombs
in my mental cavern;
exhume his
ungodly touch,
vandalize graves
of his lies,
exorcise!
please exorcise me
of his remains ...
jabbed my heart:
my soul's turning sepsis
gradually it will rot
oozing odour of toxicity
which has already started
paralyzing me,
my senses are going numb;
lockjaw of mind-
cant' enunciate feelings.
hurry, inject me a shot!
jab me with sanity,
eliminate the microbial apparitions
of my infected past
haunting the catacombs
in my mental cavern;
exhume his
ungodly touch,
vandalize graves
of his lies,
exorcise!
please exorcise me
of his remains ...
#betrayal
#heartbroken
#lies
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Only Her
Im sick with knowing that its been me
I am the one who has brought this woman to her knees
Who has stripped all happiness from her eyes
Who offered this body up on a platter
to vicious men who didnt know how to even love themselves
much less care enough to handle her gently
And it was love
All along it was always love that she was in pursuit after
Forever searching losing pieces of herself along the way
willing to sacrifice her very damn soul to find
But she never did
In dark empty and silent rooms she would find herself
begging the...
I am the one who has brought this woman to her knees
Who has stripped all happiness from her eyes
Who offered this body up on a platter
to vicious men who didnt know how to even love themselves
much less care enough to handle her gently
And it was love
All along it was always love that she was in pursuit after
Forever searching losing pieces of herself along the way
willing to sacrifice her very damn soul to find
But she never did
In dark empty and silent rooms she would find herself
begging the...
#dark
#despair
#emptiness
#grief
#heartbroken
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DON'T TOUCH IT'S NOT YOURS
It's me again the story teller of unspoken words ✍️ What I would like to rap about something, that happens more often than we think. 🤔 Man to woman and woman to man that you deem it necessary to CHEAT, when you have a person that you claim to love with honesty and truth and trust, with a positive commitment with consistency and real communications to articulate why you chose them. 🤔 Now let's dive deeper than deep, into the box of secrets 🤨 hiding in the dark. 🌑 For sure it's more than a statement, but yet a question ❓ Why when see someone...
#anger
#confusion
#disappointment
#hate
#heartbroken
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Graduation Day
Breathing in springs aroma
While celebrating diplomas
A symphony of scents revealed
Alongside the football field
Sweet honeysuckle and lilacs
And a bed of hyacinths to relax
The celebration now underway
It's high school graduation day
Jessica approached center stage ...
While celebrating diplomas
A symphony of scents revealed
Alongside the football field
Sweet honeysuckle and lilacs
And a bed of hyacinths to relax
The celebration now underway
It's high school graduation day
Jessica approached center stage ...
#heartbroken
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Embarrassed to Admit That
I broke one of my cardinal rules
I looked up one of my exes
What I saw upon her profile popping up
Is that she has achieved everything she has ever wanted
More especially everything we once spoke about
In that moment I felt happy for her
However I felt equally as embarrassed
I felt embarrassed by my own life
My end of the bargain had never been achieved
I'm no closer to my dreams today
Than when I was when I was with her
I felt embarrassed to think about
If the roles were reversed my own story
Would fill her with relief ...
I looked up one of my exes
What I saw upon her profile popping up
Is that she has achieved everything she has ever wanted
More especially everything we once spoke about
In that moment I felt happy for her
However I felt equally as embarrassed
I felt embarrassed by my own life
My end of the bargain had never been achieved
I'm no closer to my dreams today
Than when I was when I was with her
I felt embarrassed to think about
If the roles were reversed my own story
Would fill her with relief ...
#bittersweet
#heartbroken
#MovingOn
#regret
#secrets
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To ignore the signs
Let's take a moment to analyze what I'm saying to you all, that are involved in this conversation, with the realization of understanding. FOR how many times have your own thoughts, shown you that, what you don't see is that, what you need to see, but yet we refuse to not acknowledge it 🤔 For sure the same thing holds true, in our own personal relationships, when things start to fall out of place that you, start to notice the deepness of the shifting of common sense. 🤫 But yet we still ignore the current changes in high sights 😕 of what our own brain 🧠 is trying...
#confusion
#heartbroken
#philosophical
#regret
#StreamOfConsciousness
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sugar or salt
i whisper words of love
but they slip off you
like frayed silk
my playful fingers pry
like a flittering butterfly
but you repulse
as some slimy earthworm's
wriggling on your skin
my smile...oh that smile-
you called it sunflower;
now casts shadow on your face
you have a sweet tooth-
and told me once
you loved me
more than sugar and honey
now i realize...
i was just
...some salty snack
...
but they slip off you
like frayed silk
my playful fingers pry
like a flittering butterfly
but you repulse
as some slimy earthworm's
wriggling on your skin
my smile...oh that smile-
you called it sunflower;
now casts shadow on your face
you have a sweet tooth-
and told me once
you loved me
more than sugar and honey
now i realize...
i was just
...some salty snack
...
#betrayal
#deception
#heartbroken
#lies
#love
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Mr. Woody
Distraught over the belief that his wife was having an affair, Poppa Woody of Canada cut off his own penis & testicles with a kitchen knife in 2016. Unfortunately for him, he lived. Mrs. Woody denied ever having an affair. Since Mr. Woody's sex life hasn't been the same, Mrs. Woody currently seeks men to fulfill her sexual wants and desires. Mr. Woody understands and excepts his wife's lifestyle!
#fiction
#heartbroken
#ignorance
#satirical
#sex
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obsession
years after your return,
frozen memories thaw
in the warmth of your presence...
i tried to survive
many winters
on my own...all alone,
while...you were relishing
sweet fragrance of blossoming flowers;
blessings of summer showers,
with your beloved...
don't know why
i couldn't erase you
from my heart
the longing...yearning,
like snowflakes
freezing me in the cold...
even though you left me in lurch
yet...
yet i kept you locked in my soul...
and now...that she's left
leaving...
frozen memories thaw
in the warmth of your presence...
i tried to survive
many winters
on my own...all alone,
while...you were relishing
sweet fragrance of blossoming flowers;
blessings of summer showers,
with your beloved...
don't know why
i couldn't erase you
from my heart
the longing...yearning,
like snowflakes
freezing me in the cold...
even though you left me in lurch
yet...
yet i kept you locked in my soul...
and now...that she's left
leaving...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#hope
#love
#obsession
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DU Poetry : Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems