Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#heartbroken
heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
painting the moment
the doors slams
.you are gone
.
the air falls to
the floor defeated
and the roses on
the table can no
longer laugh
.you are gone
.
the air falls to
the floor defeated
and the roses on
the table can no
longer laugh
#heartbroken
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Fall in Love; At Your Own Detriment
They say love’s a river; soft and wide...
A tender tide; a gentle guide
But heed me well; O foolish heart;
For love will tear your world apart
It starts with whispers; sweet and light...
A fevered dream; a stolen night
You build your castle; stone by stone...
Yet wake to find you’ve wept alone
Their words like silk; their touch like fire...
You drink the lie; consumed by desire
You trade your will; you bend; you break...
And still; you give; though much they take
They hold you close; they make you whole...
Then...
A tender tide; a gentle guide
But heed me well; O foolish heart;
For love will tear your world apart
It starts with whispers; sweet and light...
A fevered dream; a stolen night
You build your castle; stone by stone...
Yet wake to find you’ve wept alone
Their words like silk; their touch like fire...
You drink the lie; consumed by desire
You trade your will; you bend; you break...
And still; you give; though much they take
They hold you close; they make you whole...
Then...
#breakup
#FallingInLove
#heartbroken
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a poets dilemma
..what do you do
when all the
sunsets die
when all the
sunsets die
#heartbroken
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Our Commitment
The sensation of her fingertips
Gently touching my hardened face
The taste of her tender lips
Memories I can't erase
Soft touch all over my skin
Her body I to explored
Her passion burned from within
As her key opened my hearts door
So many moments that we shared
Over time our love deeply grew
Emotional boundaries that we dared
My deepest secrets only she knew
We tried new things together
Expanding experiences from our past
Forging our relationship to last forever
Everything about us was meant to last
...
Gently touching my hardened face
The taste of her tender lips
Memories I can't erase
Soft touch all over my skin
Her body I to explored
Her passion burned from within
As her key opened my hearts door
So many moments that we shared
Over time our love deeply grew
Emotional boundaries that we dared
My deepest secrets only she knew
We tried new things together
Expanding experiences from our past
Forging our relationship to last forever
Everything about us was meant to last
...
#heartbroken
#loneliness
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It Is What It Is
What’s my next move?
I’m scared to dip my toe,
Petrified of every step,
Afraid of what I’ll never know.
But it’s necessary,
I can’t stay in your shadow,
There’s more to life than what you gave,
I need to find it, to let go.
My heart hurts, whether you see or not,
But let’s not dwell in all the ugly,
I won’t point fingers, or play the violin,
No, I owe no one an explanation.
If they ask, I’ll simply say—
It is what it is, and nothing more,
No excuses needed, not...
I’m scared to dip my toe,
Petrified of every step,
Afraid of what I’ll never know.
But it’s necessary,
I can’t stay in your shadow,
There’s more to life than what you gave,
I need to find it, to let go.
My heart hurts, whether you see or not,
But let’s not dwell in all the ugly,
I won’t point fingers, or play the violin,
No, I owe no one an explanation.
If they ask, I’ll simply say—
It is what it is, and nothing more,
No excuses needed, not...
#breakup
#emotions
#heartbroken
#hurt
#separation
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Dead Butterfly
Spreading
margarine,
APPLE CORE
I had it
'and no choice"
Dead here,
kill my wicked
nightmarish dreams
I cozen you baby,
I wake you.....
cut the webs
I.......had to try
butterfly.......
window shut,
self inflicted wounds....
Hunts with tools.
Cuts that forever slice.
A world of a pale ash-try.
when cattle meant to die.
margarine,
APPLE CORE
I had it
'and no choice"
Dead here,
kill my wicked
nightmarish dreams
I cozen you baby,
I wake you.....
cut the webs
I.......had to try
butterfly.......
window shut,
self inflicted wounds....
Hunts with tools.
Cuts that forever slice.
A world of a pale ash-try.
when cattle meant to die.
#confusion
#dark
#despair
#grief
#heartbroken
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This Feeling
I think of you often
Fondly, softly
Quietly in my prison of a mind
During my days and my nights
As I sit typing these small mementos
I’m reminded of how close we became
Your laughter, your beauty
The never ending conversations
This feeling of emptiness, loneliness
This somber sadness grips my soul
Clutching with intent to crush what’s left
Mangled and mashed into dust
Tears well up ready to burst forth
A briny, saline waterfall crashing into the depths of my heart
Inducing an anxious panic overriding all...
Fondly, softly
Quietly in my prison of a mind
During my days and my nights
As I sit typing these small mementos
I’m reminded of how close we became
Your laughter, your beauty
The never ending conversations
This feeling of emptiness, loneliness
This somber sadness grips my soul
Clutching with intent to crush what’s left
Mangled and mashed into dust
Tears well up ready to burst forth
A briny, saline waterfall crashing into the depths of my heart
Inducing an anxious panic overriding all...
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#sadness
#UnrequitedLove
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YOU pretend to love me
For it's true that no one is sent to you by chance or accident, so why do you pretend to love me, when you only wanted to use me till I'm broken like crystal broken, pieces of shatter glass. Can you be really honest and truthful, with your own feelings and emotions and genuine, thoughts of why do you really pretend to love me only to be leaving in the end. For sure I thought that we had a sacred connection, yet I see that was created by ghostly images like those that echos from the negativity of my past. For what happen to you and me as we dream of a life together, with love and affection and...
#confusion
#frustration
#heartbroken
#regret
#sadness
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Speaking my mind for the first time
I’m beginning to be so over it
That is the truth
This is how I feel after all you do
Being left on read is comical
Now you’ve just left my heart sore
So I must be a bore
Because you refuse to talk to me anymore
That is the truth
This is how I feel after all you do
Being left on read is comical
Now you’ve just left my heart sore
So I must be a bore
Because you refuse to talk to me anymore
#faith
#heartbroken
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I am not dreaming anymore at night
I am not dreaming anymore
At night
Because there are
Nothing left for me to dream
At the moment
And that is the truth
When I sleep at night I sleep
Like a log
I never get up in the middle of the night
I also hear myself breathing nonstop
I need to get 8 hours of sleep
I can't function without sleep
My father
When I wake up in the morning
I am always waking up tired
My dear God
I would love to go back to bed
And sleep a few hours
But if I do that I won't sleep at night
Also, I am not a morning person...
At night
Because there are
Nothing left for me to dream
At the moment
And that is the truth
When I sleep at night I sleep
Like a log
I never get up in the middle of the night
I also hear myself breathing nonstop
I need to get 8 hours of sleep
I can't function without sleep
My father
When I wake up in the morning
I am always waking up tired
My dear God
I would love to go back to bed
And sleep a few hours
But if I do that I won't sleep at night
Also, I am not a morning person...
#anxiety
#denial
#despair
#heartbroken
#jealousy
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Friends I am afraid to lose you
Friends I am afraid to lose you
Any day that God will shorten your life
So please continue to live your life to the fullest
Because life is a beautiful gift that God Gave you
And also he had created you with his holy hands
Many years ago
Also, God is your father
And you are all his children
You also need to take good care of your health
Friends I hope that you will not smoke any cigarettes
Because you will die of lung cancer
Also, I hope that you will stay sober
But if you choose to drink you will destroy your liver
You also...
Any day that God will shorten your life
So please continue to live your life to the fullest
Because life is a beautiful gift that God Gave you
And also he had created you with his holy hands
Many years ago
Also, God is your father
And you are all his children
You also need to take good care of your health
Friends I hope that you will not smoke any cigarettes
Because you will die of lung cancer
Also, I hope that you will stay sober
But if you choose to drink you will destroy your liver
You also...
#anger
#anxiety
#apathy
#hate
#heartbroken
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GHOST IN DAYLIGHT
Red light warning.
Open eyed kiss.
Midst my decathect,
Love like lunar waning.
Cut out from the dream tapestry.
Never,behind every door.
Loss,inside every hole.
The key, in every "contradiction".
I am the new moon.
Unseen,and ashamed...
I am the ghost in daylight...
Open eyed kiss.
Midst my decathect,
Love like lunar waning.
Cut out from the dream tapestry.
Never,behind every door.
Loss,inside every hole.
The key, in every "contradiction".
I am the new moon.
Unseen,and ashamed...
I am the ghost in daylight...
#confusion
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#sadness
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