Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
If You Want/ Si Tu Quieres
If you really want to leave me.
Deveras quieres a ir de aqui.
Then go ahead and get the fuck on.
Vete de la chingada de aqui, puta.
Because you had the greatest man.
Por que tu tiene el mejor mexican.
But you had to believe them instead.
Pero querias creer tu pinche gente tambien
I'm not too sure what your friends done said,
No se que su amigos dicen.
But their all are crazy in their fucking heads.
Son locos en los pinche mentes.
Fuck you and...
Deveras quieres a ir de aqui.
Then go ahead and get the fuck on.
Vete de la chingada de aqui, puta.
Because you had the greatest man.
Por que tu tiene el mejor mexican.
But you had to believe them instead.
Pero querias creer tu pinche gente tambien
I'm not too sure what your friends done said,
No se que su amigos dicen.
But their all are crazy in their fucking heads.
Son locos en los pinche mentes.
Fuck you and...
#anger
#breakup
#heartbroken #relationships
#heartbroken #relationships
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People Leonard Cohen
People Leonard Cohen
Lives now in heaven
And there in heaven, he sleeps
At night in his brass bed
During the day Leonard Cohen
Walk in God's gardens
And he collects the apples from the apple trees
And Leonard Gives the apples to God's servant
And the servants make apple pie for Leonard's diner
They know that apple pie is Leonard's favorite dessert
After dinner, Leonard goes to bed
He gets his 8 hours of sleep a day
God loves Leonard
And Leonard loves God
Leonard has a good relationship with God
People Leonard is safe...
Lives now in heaven
And there in heaven, he sleeps
At night in his brass bed
During the day Leonard Cohen
Walk in God's gardens
And he collects the apples from the apple trees
And Leonard Gives the apples to God's servant
And the servants make apple pie for Leonard's diner
They know that apple pie is Leonard's favorite dessert
After dinner, Leonard goes to bed
He gets his 8 hours of sleep a day
God loves Leonard
And Leonard loves God
Leonard has a good relationship with God
People Leonard is safe...
#confusion
#denial
#heartbroken
#rejection
#shame
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November Poems 2024 >> let your thorns my vintage wine inspire
No. 01
let your thorns
my vintage wine inspire
“The connoisseur does not drink wine
but tastes of its secrets.”—Salvador Dali
the subtleness of wantonness is as unsubtle as the sobering rain
that blesses the receiver, as it sweeps his humble hopes into the drain.
for this same cause must i take pause to anchor hope upon a higher plane,
that when the deluge comes, my pains of yesterday may slay me not again.
the kindness of all kinds of friends who occupy my person and my space
is not...
let your thorns
my vintage wine inspire
“The connoisseur does not drink wine
but tastes of its secrets.”—Salvador Dali
the subtleness of wantonness is as unsubtle as the sobering rain
that blesses the receiver, as it sweeps his humble hopes into the drain.
for this same cause must i take pause to anchor hope upon a higher plane,
that when the deluge comes, my pains of yesterday may slay me not again.
the kindness of all kinds of friends who occupy my person and my space
is not...
#FallingInLove
#heartbroken
#ILoveYou #romantic
#ILoveYou #romantic
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Hymn To The Woman
Woman
You are God's gift to the world
Woman
You are
The flowers that grow wild
Around the river
Woman
The water of the river
Is flowing slowly
Woman
Your eyes are so beautiful
Woman
Your smile is like a rainbow
So let it shine
Woman
Don't be afraid to show your smile
You are God's gift to the world
Woman
You are
The flowers that grow wild
Around the river
Woman
The water of the river
Is flowing slowly
Woman
Your eyes are so beautiful
Woman
Your smile is like a rainbow
So let it shine
Woman
Don't be afraid to show your smile
#anxiety
#disappointment
#heartbroken
#jealousy
#loneliness
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2837 sonata
Now that he is growing up
He doesn't stay home very much
Because he is out all the time
And he is afraid that he will miss out
In his life
I say that is understandable for him and me
Even though life is short
He doesn't stay home very much
Because he is out all the time
And he is afraid that he will miss out
In his life
I say that is understandable for him and me
Even though life is short
#dark
#denial
#hate
#heartbroken
#shame
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Fall into my breath
Hey now where did you go?
Thought I was holding you?
All you are is air darling
Fall into my breath and chase away my fears only don't leave me so hollow
I sit back and look at this thing I've become
Am I really so twisted or are these the things you've filled me up with
But trusting what you say
I truly am not worth a thing.
Thought I was holding you?
All you are is air darling
Fall into my breath and chase away my fears only don't leave me so hollow
I sit back and look at this thing I've become
Am I really so twisted or are these the things you've filled me up with
But trusting what you say
I truly am not worth a thing.
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#rejection
#suffering
#vulnerability
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Mcgim sonata
Mother dearest
You live inside of my heart
And inside my heart, I made a special place, just for you
So that you could live inside of my heart and be left in peace
Mother dearest
You don't have to worry about pollution and violence
Because there is no pollution or violence inside of my
Heart
Mother dearest
You are now an angel with wings
And inside of my heart, you can fly
Mother dearest
Inside of my heart
I created a garden for you so that you could smell the flowers any time That you like
Mother dearest
You can sleep...
You live inside of my heart
And inside my heart, I made a special place, just for you
So that you could live inside of my heart and be left in peace
Mother dearest
You don't have to worry about pollution and violence
Because there is no pollution or violence inside of my
Heart
Mother dearest
You are now an angel with wings
And inside of my heart, you can fly
Mother dearest
Inside of my heart
I created a garden for you so that you could smell the flowers any time That you like
Mother dearest
You can sleep...
#bittersweet
#confusion
#denial
#despair
#heartbroken
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You Are Such A Lying Slut!
I don't believe this, Sarah!
Both Kevin and Adrienne
called me on the phone
and told me that since I've
been gone, you allowed
yourself to get naked and
banged by Leonardo for
some pornographic film!
Both Kevin and Adrienne
called me on the phone
and told me that since I've
been gone, you allowed
yourself to get naked and
banged by Leonardo for
some pornographic film!
#dialogue
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#heartbroken
#sex
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Impression
I've seen the good, and I've seen the bad. I've never been happier than when I'd been had.
My life took a twist and my life took a turn. My life knows what it is to lose what I had to hold.
I've seen the light and I've seen the dark. It was the brightness of you that lit the spark.
If you could forgive and you could forget I'm sure that a wedding we would set.
I'd never forsake you. I'd never leave. This heart is yours that I wear of my sleeve.
Our destiny sits within your hands. My heart is as full as the bottle fills the sands.
You'll never know how much I miss...
My life took a twist and my life took a turn. My life knows what it is to lose what I had to hold.
I've seen the light and I've seen the dark. It was the brightness of you that lit the spark.
If you could forgive and you could forget I'm sure that a wedding we would set.
I'd never forsake you. I'd never leave. This heart is yours that I wear of my sleeve.
Our destiny sits within your hands. My heart is as full as the bottle fills the sands.
You'll never know how much I miss...
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#regret
#rejection
#sadness
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Nightingale
A midnight full of potential that lets me down without notice.
I've touched eternity without admission in hopes of a reprieve from a destiny that eluded me.
A shade of blue that masks suicide from within.
Love couldn't save her from herself. Love won't save me.
I purchased a romance that was out of my price range.
Destiny as it seems holds a grudge against those less fortunate.
I've touched eternity without admission in hopes of a reprieve from a destiny that eluded me.
A shade of blue that masks suicide from within.
Love couldn't save her from herself. Love won't save me.
I purchased a romance that was out of my price range.
Destiny as it seems holds a grudge against those less fortunate.
#grief
#heartbroken
#loneliness #regret
#loneliness #regret
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My Eternal Flame
I’m reaching out for you
Feel my warmth come through
Screaming out your name
My love is driving me insane
Walking in the rain
Feel the touch of my face
You’re not here – to dry my tears away
How can I make you see
I am the other half
That reflects your eyes
Weren't you the love of my life?
My heart will never find peace
I always feel that something’s missing
Something’s missing....
My eternal flame
Feel my warmth come through
Screaming out your name
My love is driving me insane
Walking in the rain
Feel the touch of my face
You’re not here – to dry my tears away
How can I make you see
I am the other half
That reflects your eyes
Weren't you the love of my life?
My heart will never find peace
I always feel that something’s missing
Something’s missing....
My eternal flame
#breakup
#conflict
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#love
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Yearning to be a grandparent and angered because your kids refuse your wish?
By Stanley Collymore
Another spin on this story of the
mother angered because her
two daughters are clearly
resolutely determined that they don't want
any children, therefore basically depriving
her of the grandchildren, she obsessively
wants is obviously this! It's actually, their
lives, not your own, that you simply lived
as you wanted to. So sensibly accord to
them the same right of choice! Besides,
the reality generally is, that people, who
theoretically, would actually undeniably
make discernibly superb...
Another spin on this story of the
mother angered because her
two daughters are clearly
resolutely determined that they don't want
any children, therefore basically depriving
her of the grandchildren, she obsessively
wants is obviously this! It's actually, their
lives, not your own, that you simply lived
as you wanted to. So sensibly accord to
them the same right of choice! Besides,
the reality generally is, that people, who
theoretically, would actually undeniably
make discernibly superb...
#anger
#disappointment
#frustration
#heartbroken
#sadness
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