Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#heartbroken
heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Seek
If you can't find love
anywhere
Seek it within you
...it shall be there
anywhere
Seek it within you
...it shall be there
#heartbroken
#love
#minimalist #spiritual
#minimalist #spiritual
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Bug
I used your pet name last night.
It was an accident.
It slipped out of the lonely gap of my teeth
as I slipped him out of me.
It came searching for you like the pest that you are.
I called this stranger your pet name and cried,
It was an accident.
How it still pains me
that you turned out to be a flea only for her.
The bird woman
The one who could leave and still be so present.
So controlling in absence.
But my dear,
you are a bug.
A plague that took years from me...
It was an accident.
It slipped out of the lonely gap of my teeth
as I slipped him out of me.
It came searching for you like the pest that you are.
I called this stranger your pet name and cried,
It was an accident.
How it still pains me
that you turned out to be a flea only for her.
The bird woman
The one who could leave and still be so present.
So controlling in absence.
But my dear,
you are a bug.
A plague that took years from me...
#breakup
#disappointment
#heartbroken
#rejection
#UnrequitedLove
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In cased inside of glass
If you could change your life what would you consider, to change about your own life. FOR it's true that we have the ability and power, to alter our lives and further along, the direction of our lives as well, as our dreams. For sure if you could get one thing right, in your own life what would it be, that you have done that you would, want to be truly undone. FROM the deepness of the hurt and pain, that you caused, and left so many levels of feelings, unattended with emotional scars. That still to this day is lingering, in the dark deepness of some people's, heart and mind that you had...
#confusion
#disappointment
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#rejection
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Let's talk
Tell me what you need
Tell me what I can’t see
The pain that lies beneath
The pain cannot be explained
It rolls endlessly in my brain
Tell you…
For what?
It’ll drive you insane.
No, talking will not help me
I can't tell you
Then you will see
The damages
The cracks
That is deep in me
Talk to you?
You’ll run from me
Your that light
The one that helps me at night
It’s dark here
Laying alone, I fear
Emotions
Mimicking the dark color of the sky
I can take it a...
Tell me what I can’t see
The pain that lies beneath
The pain cannot be explained
It rolls endlessly in my brain
Tell you…
For what?
It’ll drive you insane.
No, talking will not help me
I can't tell you
Then you will see
The damages
The cracks
That is deep in me
Talk to you?
You’ll run from me
Your that light
The one that helps me at night
It’s dark here
Laying alone, I fear
Emotions
Mimicking the dark color of the sky
I can take it a...
#heartbroken
#secrets
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The spirit of the soul
As a writer of spoken words ✍️ we have the ability to manifest thoughts and insight, into the deepness of the imagination of those things that are involved, in creating a different kind of perspective on life and love. For sure we can unlock 🔓 your own thoughts that were once, hidden behind the curtains of your own thoughts, and insight and spiritually awaken your own deepest thoughts, that slowly becomes more than just words. But yet thoughts and feelings of emotionally tasty, bits of consciousness of the truth of a passion fruit 🍓 THAT leaves a taste of...
#courage
#fear
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#strength
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Sadness
Sadness is worst of visits.
She drinks all our tea.
Devours all the cupcakes
and never goes away.
She drinks all our tea.
Devours all the cupcakes
and never goes away.
#apathy
#depression
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#sadness
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Different Now
I'm starting to see things a little different now.
The older I get, the more difficult it gets, to try to forget, about the thing that you did.
I'm like, fucking wow.
I use to think that you were the one, but this is no longer what I would call fun.
I see that this ain't what I thought that was love.
I wish that I could, but I can't.
I wish that you would, but you ain't.
The time that we wasted is gone.
There's no need to keep this lie going on.
The beat has done faded out of this song.
Walking away, distance is gained with each step that we...
The older I get, the more difficult it gets, to try to forget, about the thing that you did.
I'm like, fucking wow.
I use to think that you were the one, but this is no longer what I would call fun.
I see that this ain't what I thought that was love.
I wish that I could, but I can't.
I wish that you would, but you ain't.
The time that we wasted is gone.
There's no need to keep this lie going on.
The beat has done faded out of this song.
Walking away, distance is gained with each step that we...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love #relationships
#love #relationships
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Titanic
In the deep we peacefully sleep
Though our ship did swiftly sink
In frozen tides where icebergs lie
We felt little pain as we quietly died
Though our ship did swiftly sink
In frozen tides where icebergs lie
We felt little pain as we quietly died
#dark
#heartbroken
#sadness
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Frosted Windows
He has no idea how hard I try.
Then when it's time to defend myself, this pain in my chest, this exhaustion, has no answer to give.
I can feel myself checking out.
Two loved ones dying of cancer, not enough determination to even make a sandwich.
I'm numb, I'm broken, I love just as deep, but defense mechanisms are massively protecting and hurting me at the same time.
This snow with the bright red Robin, she's fluttering about, ruffling her feathers as she picks from the assorted feed I throw out for them.
Yesterday I had doves, as I sip my coffee and stare out...
Then when it's time to defend myself, this pain in my chest, this exhaustion, has no answer to give.
I can feel myself checking out.
Two loved ones dying of cancer, not enough determination to even make a sandwich.
I'm numb, I'm broken, I love just as deep, but defense mechanisms are massively protecting and hurting me at the same time.
This snow with the bright red Robin, she's fluttering about, ruffling her feathers as she picks from the assorted feed I throw out for them.
Yesterday I had doves, as I sip my coffee and stare out...
#despair
#fear
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#sadness
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Rainbow
Rainbow
We have a rainbow between us,
you and I.
And though you may be unable to see it
I can spot it with my eye.
There is so much color,
beautiful and true!
And it is a triple rainbow!
No. Not just a single one.
At the other end, my pot of gold.
At the other end maybe you.
Maybe this is just a dream
from which I do not want to awaken.
I only know you in dreams this way.
My god, my heart you have taken!
Is this rainbow somehow in your world?
Would you spot it if you tried
or is...
We have a rainbow between us,
you and I.
And though you may be unable to see it
I can spot it with my eye.
There is so much color,
beautiful and true!
And it is a triple rainbow!
No. Not just a single one.
At the other end, my pot of gold.
At the other end maybe you.
Maybe this is just a dream
from which I do not want to awaken.
I only know you in dreams this way.
My god, my heart you have taken!
Is this rainbow somehow in your world?
Would you spot it if you tried
or is...
#emotional
#heartbroken
#love
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The storm
My life was once perfect, a dream come true,
Wrapped in warmth, like morning light breaking through.
But then came CPS, like a storm in the night,
Unleashing a tempest, dimming my light.
Demolishing the haven where memories grew,
Tearing through my soul, leaving shadows askew.
Half dead with despair, a heart in disarray,
Each piece of my laughter, now drifting away.
The smiles that once danced in the corners of rooms,
Have faded to whispers, choked by the gloom.
No more laughter, no more joy, just...
Wrapped in warmth, like morning light breaking through.
But then came CPS, like a storm in the night,
Unleashing a tempest, dimming my light.
Demolishing the haven where memories grew,
Tearing through my soul, leaving shadows askew.
Half dead with despair, a heart in disarray,
Each piece of my laughter, now drifting away.
The smiles that once danced in the corners of rooms,
Have faded to whispers, choked by the gloom.
No more laughter, no more joy, just...
#grief
#heartbroken
#memories
#motherhood
#sadness
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Coulda been
One day.
I'll.
Wake.
Up.
And.
This.
Will.
Make me.
Happy.
And none of the things.
You've ever.
Done to me.
Will.
Hurt.
None of the loss.
The good byes.
To people.
Who were.
Never.
Really there.
And I'll dance.
In that fantasy.
Coming.
Back.
To
Something.
I.
Tried.
To.
Love
I'll.
Wake.
Up.
And.
This.
Will.
Make me.
Happy.
And none of the things.
You've ever.
Done to me.
Will.
Hurt.
None of the loss.
The good byes.
To people.
Who were.
Never.
Really there.
And I'll dance.
In that fantasy.
Coming.
Back.
To
Something.
I.
Tried.
To.
Love
#apathy
#disappointment
#heartbroken
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