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Smoke
I feel like smoke
That vapor inhaled deeply
suspended within love sweetly
held intimate inside, a gas
filling the empty spaces
the miasma that covered
your open wounds
but then you said I choked you
and expelled me in a misty spray
I became ether
a haze, that cloud that surrounds you
the fog that follows until I disappear
inside the pall of despair
That vapor inhaled deeply
suspended within love sweetly
held intimate inside, a gas
filling the empty spaces
the miasma that covered
your open wounds
but then you said I choked you
and expelled me in a misty spray
I became ether
a haze, that cloud that surrounds you
the fog that follows until I disappear
inside the pall of despair
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19th Mar 2013 4:29am
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28th Mar 2013 6:44pm
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Anonymous
19th Mar 2013 8:28am
Wow..a heavy comparison-uniquely beautiful, I love this one..and know the sentiment. Clever! much love
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Your words are too kind...Thank you Miki
We linger, often times, when there is nothing left of us. I wanted to express that feeling in poetic verse.
Much love for your kindness
G
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Anonymous
19th Mar 2013 12:44pm
Sad write of rejection and holding onto what has gone. Like it! :)
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28th Mar 2013 6:54pm
Thanks Flowergirl
I'm glad you enjoyed this sad piece of me trying to hold on to what's gone
Much love my friend
G
I'm glad you enjoyed this sad piece of me trying to hold on to what's gone
Much love my friend
G
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19th Mar 2013 1:39pm
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Thank you Grace.
It's true, I wanted to show that in poetic visual aid
Thank you for coming over to read this and adding your insightful comment.
Much love
G
It's true, I wanted to show that in poetic visual aid
Thank you for coming over to read this and adding your insightful comment.
Much love
G
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27th Mar 2013 3:32am
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28th Mar 2013 7:03pm
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29th Apr 2013 1:03pm
You're good lady! Very good... The imagery in this is amazing, the wordplay...MASTERFUL!!
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29th Apr 2013 5:53pm
You flatter me sir, I am humbled by your words
Thank you so much ....Poetikmind
G
Thank you so much ....Poetikmind
G