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Day of peace
In the depths of the deep,
The debt we owe is not cheap.
For we pay the price,
And the time is ours.
Hoping for that day of peace...
A scene to be seen,
A sight to be sought.
A life to be lived,
And a life to be bought...
Drowning in the sea of life,
I think I may, I think I might.
The debt we owe is not cheap.
For we pay the price,
And the time is ours.
Hoping for that day of peace...
A scene to be seen,
A sight to be sought.
A life to be lived,
And a life to be bought...
Drowning in the sea of life,
I think I may, I think I might.
Published 6th Feb 2013
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6th Feb 2013 4:04pm
First off, just let me say that I love the ocean and all of the imagery it can provide for writers. But anyway,
I liked where it was headed with the first five lines. I feel like there are hints and pieces of a much grander story here, and having this smaller window to it excites me. The repetition at the end was a good way to finish it off on a thoughtful note that entices the reader. It was a nice poem!
I liked where it was headed with the first five lines. I feel like there are hints and pieces of a much grander story here, and having this smaller window to it excites me. The repetition at the end was a good way to finish it off on a thoughtful note that entices the reader. It was a nice poem!
15th Feb 2013 6:10pm
I'm digging this poem
short and the point is reached and felt :)
well done
write on
short and the point is reached and felt :)
well done
write on
