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your breasts
were just the right size
just the right brown
for the light
one window away
balanced between
the two parts of the day
and our love
innocent
but only to us
and they
could always
be waiting outside
but not in this room
where two months rent
was more than enough
for eternal love
for your breasts
so warm in my hands
your breasts
that sucked firm in my mouth
and the constant surprise
of your thin sweet milk
as his baby
slept quietly beside us
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Published 23rd Jan 2013
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23rd Jan 2013 00:31am
hoowee....that's one sweet lil humdingalaleche (humdinalingus,anyone?) milk & casualCookies indeed
eye loves it
eye loves it
28th Jan 2013 2:28am
Anonymous
23rd Jan 2013 10:08am
Good write lemmy.
Strider
Strider
28th Jan 2013 7:04am
23rd Jan 2013 10:38am
...I'll not bore you with stories of my own memories, but I'll damn well thank you for firing them up.
The last verse is a pretty trick, a clever twist of the blade, but that first verse...that bastard is a whoooole other pretty thing.
Lovely to see you treading the boards.
h.
The last verse is a pretty trick, a clever twist of the blade, but that first verse...that bastard is a whoooole other pretty thing.
Lovely to see you treading the boards.
h.
Yes, I did the last one; I must have stolen the first one and then erased all memory of having done it. :)
23rd Jan 2013 1:02pm
The impact from this one was a *whoomph*, if I may be so eloquent. Delicate and deadly, spiderweb kine delightful, you know? So yeah, I'm bookmarking it.
DU-marking it as books (will mention below as well) are obsolete. (You make me pathetically happy. :)
24th Jan 2013 7:11am
Your writing should have its own book or few.
I'm gonna sniff your ass and say
your a genius, Ray.
I'm gonna sniff your ass and say
your a genius, Ray.
Thank goodness, I was afraid my ass had sneezed.
(Books? They're obsolete; I use DU now. :)
(Books? They're obsolete; I use DU now. :)
Oh damn. At first I was like ok he is into breasts . Then I thought brown breasts. And I thought ok already you like fucking breasts .. I get it. Then you did the awe thing with the baby there "his baby" made it all worth it. Good job fucking ray. Good job
25th Jan 2013 8:23am
A bit of tongue in cheek. Sounds good Ray. Slap us back to our senses with that ending there.
Aha, nicely done.
Aha, nicely done.
28th Jan 2013 2:27am
Anonymous
27th Jan 2013 7:14am
Ooh, what a piece!
Last part gripped me even more....an enjoyable read.
Wow, casual cookie....thanks for sharing :-)
Cheers
Tidespotter
Last part gripped me even more....an enjoyable read.
Wow, casual cookie....thanks for sharing :-)
Cheers
Tidespotter
28th Jan 2013 7:09am
Anonymous
- Edited 28th Jan 2019 8:46am
30th Jan 2013 2:29pm
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