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The Desert (depression, camels, etc)
I am going to drown
in the desert.
My lungs won't work properly;
I am struggling to breathe.
Each choking breath makes my eyes run.
I am alone
with sand and far-away camels.
The camels won't talk to me
because camels don't talk,
and even if they could talk they wouldn't understand
that I am drowning in this dry, sandy place.
As far as the mind can see there is nobody
I think maybe I hope for too much
but I am in the pitiless desert
where everyone is striving to survive.
Anyway, who would expect to see a drowning man
struggling to breathe
and wasting water from his eyes
in the desert?
in the desert.
My lungs won't work properly;
I am struggling to breathe.
Each choking breath makes my eyes run.
I am alone
with sand and far-away camels.
The camels won't talk to me
because camels don't talk,
and even if they could talk they wouldn't understand
that I am drowning in this dry, sandy place.
As far as the mind can see there is nobody
I think maybe I hope for too much
but I am in the pitiless desert
where everyone is striving to survive.
Anyway, who would expect to see a drowning man
struggling to breathe
and wasting water from his eyes
in the desert?
Published 21st Sep 2012
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Anonymous
21st Sep 2012 4:46pm
What a powerful write. Very visual. Great job!!! :)
22nd Sep 2012 2:10am
Anonymous
22nd Sep 2012 3:02pm
Powerful imagery
Well written
A good read
Welcome to DUP New Member
I look forward to reading more
Peace
Kitty
Well written
A good read
Welcome to DUP New Member
I look forward to reading more
Peace
Kitty
25th Sep 2012 4:45am
Thanks for the nice comments and the welcome, Kitty! I'm looking forward to posting more (and reading more).
22nd Sep 2012 3:28pm
"As far as the mind can see there is nobody
I think maybe I hope for too much
but I am in the pitiless desert
where everyone is striving to survive.
Anyway, who would expect to see a drowning man
struggling to breathe
and wasting water from his eyes
in the desert?"
You paint a very accurate picture, been there done that, yet there is a certain beauty in that austerity, Like there is nothing between you and the sky. Welcome to the DU.
Red
I think maybe I hope for too much
but I am in the pitiless desert
where everyone is striving to survive.
Anyway, who would expect to see a drowning man
struggling to breathe
and wasting water from his eyes
in the desert?"
You paint a very accurate picture, been there done that, yet there is a certain beauty in that austerity, Like there is nothing between you and the sky. Welcome to the DU.
Red
25th Sep 2012 4:43am
